Date: March 28, 2008 11:39 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
Oh...MY...GOD!!! You are brillant!!!! I love how the whole The Kiss was ad-lib. Please let Jim tell her that it was all real not just show. I need another chapter!!!
Date: March 28, 2008 11:38 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
HOLY $HIT! DAMN! Can I have that bucket of cold water. I love how the kiss wasn't in the script. That was crazy. I feel bad for Pam though, everything is always in front of the camera. Some things should b private, like the first kiss. I'm sooo excited to see the fallout!
Date: March 28, 2008 11:37 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
Yes -- GUH. You really outdid yourself with this one -- and that's saying quite a lot. Seriously. Holy hell. Midway through, it hit me that I soooo desperately wanted you to write the kiss in as an impulsive thing -- but then you went beyond that and gave them a hot and lustful (guh, I'll say it again) kiss before the soul-shaking one...which you described perfectly, by the way. Love it as him saying "it's okay" and "thank you" and "I love you" -- because that's so true.
Okay, I'm your bitch now...you must update soon, or I might actually die. Seriously. :o)
Date: March 28, 2008 11:28 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
There are no words to describe this brilliance. I need more.
Date: March 28, 2008 11:27 am Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
Oh holy god. Holy god. Brilliant, BRILLIANT re-envisioning of this scene. Seriously -- love your take on it, that it was so real for both of them...just incredible.
Date: March 28, 2008 11:23 am Title: Basically the only person who never changes in this equation is you. Coincidence? Probably not.
Guh. (Brace yourself: Yet another brilliant and articulate review coming. *snort*) I love the pacing of this -- the way you capture their frenzied and totally chaotic attraction really conveys the sense of being totally swept up in it (which I totally am).
God, I'm shutting up. :o) Off to the next chapter!
Date: March 28, 2008 11:11 am Title: Wait a second, I feel like I've seen this movie before.
Oh wow. Ouch. (Though your description of broken Jim -- with the jaw muscles and the bowed head and the black baseball hat....oh my.) Seriously -- yet another believable, totally well done chapter. I'm wishing I could be more articulate, but honestly? There are more chapters to go read.... :)
Date: March 28, 2008 11:07 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
Okay, so . . . I was right. You broke my brain. It's okay, though. I really wasn't using it much for anything except reading your story.
This was flawless. Just so amazing how you had them kiss first, all passionate and tongue-y and I thought (through my breathless haze) "Hey, that's not how they did it on the show" and then you had them do it again like they DID do it on the show and it all made so much sense! God, Stablergirl...if I were of the non-hetero persuasion I think I'd want to marry you (and if I weren't already married). Seriously. Just keep going. Don't ever stop.
Date: March 28, 2008 11:07 am Title: Let me finish before you defend yourself, because I need a good forty five minutes to rant.
Good lord, this was awesome. You absolutely excel at capturing the kind of frantic, stream of consciousness way Pam's thoughts are swirling at this point. Love it, love it, love it.
Must.get.to.the.next.chapter. Like, NOW.
Date: March 28, 2008 11:03 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
Whew. Ok. SG, have you thought about joining this presidential election as a candidate? I would vote for you in a heartbeat. The world would be a far more delicious and sexy place. Needless to say, I loved this chapter so very much. God, I love this story so very much. I'm spent. Oh, I also love Sweetpea very much. Make sure you relay that to her in case she doesn't read these reviews. Get me another update soon, k?
Date: March 28, 2008 11:00 am Title: Um, I think you have my gum in your mouth.
Yup. That sums it up. I need a few minutes.
10 [Report This]Date: March 28, 2008 06:48 am Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
Aaaaahhhhh! I LOVE THIS STORYYY!! I thought I had added it to my favorites like, a long time ago, so I was waiting for an e-mail update, and was like, "Waaa, I want more chapters!" But then I came here, and found 2 new chapters! Eeee!
At first, I was a little skeptical of this story, because I don't want to picture Jim as a boozing womanizer, or of Pam as bitter, but I love how you gave them such layers, so that underneath, they're much like the characters we know and love, and I love the way Jim went through this journey realizing he's in love with Pam, and how even though it was a journey, at the same time it was like a thing that kind of just clicked one day, and I love how she makes him want to be the better version of himself, and this last chapter is so good with the lines being so blurred about what they're really doing- if they're going to break "character" and really tell each other how they feel (well Jim already did, but does Pam realize?), or if they are just going to stay with the script, and Jim's feeling it so much, and gaah! I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE KISSING!!!!!!!!
*adds to favorites for sure this time*
Why doesn't this have a ribbon yet?
Date: March 28, 2008 04:37 am Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
oh wow...loved it and the emotion that he ties up with the real confession...can't wait for more
10 [Report This]Date: March 27, 2008 10:44 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
EEEEEEEEE. Kiss is next, right? Right? I'm so excited I'm nearly shaking. I hope you update soon!
10 [Report This]Date: March 27, 2008 09:48 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
sucking in a huge lungful of air and telling himself this has nothing to do with the fact that he’s never said this to anybody but his mother and now he’s going to say it to Pam and he’s terrified that he’s going to mean it.
This is the line that broke my heart. You really do have the gift. As I and others have said before, really, you should be doing this for a living. It's just too good to wait. It is my modest hope that you update tonight. I'll be up for awhile ;-)
Date: March 27, 2008 09:21 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
i am HOOKED, i love this story, it is great, i love your writing...keep up the great work, i need the next 5 chapters now :)...seriously though, so good!
10 [Report This]Date: March 27, 2008 08:49 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
First off, I haven't commented on this yet (for some reason unbeknownst to me), but it's made of awesome. Seriously. At first I wasn't so sure about the idea, but it didn't take long for me to get completely hooked. And now...*whew*.
I would also like to say that this reminds me a bit of Jane Austen's "Pride and Prejudice" with the whole hate-you/love-you-verbally-abuse-you-until-I'm-blue-in-the-face kinda thing. And I LOVE it! (My apologies if you're not a Jane Austen fan, I meant that as a compliment...for my part, I think she's probably the best thing since sliced bread sooo...yeah.) :-)
Anyway, enough rambling...you rule, this is awesome, and I can't wait for more!
Date: March 27, 2008 07:30 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
"He wants to do things for her, to be things for her, to be in her life or to just be near her life or to just be a part of something that she’s proud of." This is a breathtaking description of what love is. I am, of course, dying to know what Pam is thinking during all this. This whole chapter makes me kindof breathless (in a good way).
Date: March 27, 2008 07:06 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
For God's sack, write faster!
Date: March 27, 2008 06:37 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
Okay, I could go on and on and on about this chapter because it was just fucking brilliant (pardon my enthusiasm). I don't know how you managed to take a scene that we've all watched hundreds of times (admit it, y'all -- you've watched it hudreds) and add a whole new spin on it that is completely and totally believeable. It absolutely blew me away. And then you had lines like this:
that just broke my heart, because that's how you feel when you love someone and don't even know how to admit it. Stablergirl, I love you fic but you should be abandoning it to write a novel. No lie. We'd miss you terribly, but you should be making some money off your brilliance. Okay. I think I'm done for now. That is, until the kiss, which may just make my brain explode.
Date: March 27, 2008 06:36 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
omg!!! this is so amazing! you are a fantastico writer. just let them kiss already! or have sex.
Date: March 27, 2008 05:51 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
P.S. He wants to do things for her, to be things for her, to be in her life or to just be near her life or to just be a part of something that she’s proud of. That is just so beautiful.
Date: March 27, 2008 05:49 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
Sneaky stablergirl! You slipped another chapter in. I'm so very happy! I can't believe I nearly missed it. Phe-nom-enal!
7 [Report This]Date: March 27, 2008 05:28 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
I am a terrible person for not reviewing yet, but I am truly enjoying this story. There's something oddly compelling about imagining them as almost-but-not-quite the characters we know, and watching this story unfold from just a slightly different angle.
So it's a very fun read... even though my real name is Dawn, so, well. Some parts have been a little uncomfortable.
Author's Response: lol I'm so sorry!!! I hope you know it's less about the name and more about the imaginary woman who bears the name and happens to be a soap star, hence the running joke. Dawn is a great name, great and lovely and...um...agh I knew this would happen. I suck. ;-) Seriously, good name, not soap at all, and thank you for reviewing and reading despite the discomfort.
Date: March 27, 2008 05:28 pm Title: Are we really flirting? Or are you just pretending to be you flirting with me actually being me?
Oh. My. God. Freaking brilliant. I am, like, out of breath right now. Will comment more coherently later when I can reread this without feeling faint.