10 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2008 10:55 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
Need...MORE. NOW. *claws*
*clears throat* Umm, sorry. I don't normally read WIPs because then I eventually get to the last chapter and go all sad face. Like this: =(
But everyone was going on and on about this story, so I decided to read it. It's fabulous. At first, I was a bit thrown off by the characterizations of Jim and Pam, but I've warmed up to them, and I very much want to know more about this Jim-like guy Pam is reminded of who broke her heart. And I'm hoping they just get it on already! And I'm ESPECIALLY hoping you update a ton while I'm on vacation so I can come back to many chapters. I love this! You've really created a unique, intriguing, and funny storyline! :D
One thing though (and this is the Polish in me talking): The plural of Pierogi is actually Pierogi. And ketchup on them? BLASHEMY.
Date: March 20, 2008 10:38 pm Title: Talking is cool, just promise you'll keep it clean.
Recognized by the fish guy and the butcher...that's fabulous. I'm not sure what kind of drugs you were on when you thought this story up, but I wish I was on them too! This is so ingenious.
Date: March 20, 2008 08:18 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
OK, this line was so freaking hilarious that I laughed so loudly, I scared my 90 lb dog enough to make her jump off the bed:
"Fertilize her or get all beef ‘n cheddar on her or whatever."
Girl, you are too damn funny for words!
And hey -- I know you just posted like a zillion chapters in a row but I'm so sad there aren't more because now I'm TOTALLY dying for one of them to make a move so they can have some strange heart to heart about why they've always been at odds and why they can't stay away from eachother and blah, blah, blah fluffcakes of love and....well, you know. Happy JAMmy goodness!
You know a story is good when every time you read a chapter you can't help but to keep glancing at the little scroll bar on the right side hoping to god that it won't get to the bottom as quickly as you fear it will. Alas, I'm enjoying this so much that I pretty much feel like it moves too fast with every chapter!
Waiting with baited breath for the next installment!
Date: March 20, 2008 08:11 pm Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
“Stay,” she requests simply, smiling, and she swears his eyes widen in shock. “Hang out with me,” and god it’s like she’s saved herself and doomed herself all in the same breath.
OH MY GOD. Sucker punch to the solar plexus! I did not see that coming but holy hannah I'm gonna sound like a fangirl now...
SQUEEEEEEEEE!!!
*Sigh* I totally love this story!
Date: March 20, 2008 08:07 pm Title: Just when I've figured out how to pretend you're out of my system, you show up and I forget.
OK, so I'm like crazily behind here (and seriously, you musn't ever sleep b/c I feel like I didn't check the "most recent" list for 48 hours and you've posted like half a novel -- what gives?!?) and I was just going to wait until I got to the most recent update to post a review, but two things in this chapter made me laugh so damn hard I just had to say something:
"She’s turning into some sniveling fan who wants him to sign her boobs or something."
"she’s running and all of a sudden her left right left right turns into penis penis penis penis and her cheeks are red and she’s sure it’s from the run and she’s penis penis penis penis and when she finally gets to her driveway and she’s finally slowing her pace and definitely not thinking about Jim’s penis she looks up and he’s standing there on her porch."
Bwaahahahahahahah!!!! OMG!!!
*THUD*
That's me hitting the floor after rolling out of bed from laughing my proverbial ass off. You so completely rock!
Date: March 20, 2008 07:53 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
yay...can't wait for more!!
Date: March 20, 2008 07:44 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
absolutely genius. PLEASE come back soon.
10 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2008 07:00 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
THIS CHAPTER WAS BEYOND STELLAR. Seriously, you need to do this for a living, if you don't already, because you're that good. I laughed out loud, and got freaking horny at the same time. I will die if there's not an update tonight. No pressure though.......
Date: March 20, 2008 04:16 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
"get all beef ‘n cheddar on her..." Yes, I am still laughing. Dear lord, Jim is soooo whipped - I love it.
Date: March 20, 2008 04:15 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
Nurse Come Over Here and Take Off Your Clothes, maybe?
Mm hmm. NOW you're talkin'!!!
You already know all the other parts I love, like basically everything.
Lesson 1 in How to Be a Good Beta: Beta for someone who doesn't need a beta! That way, you just get to read their stuff first and add comments like "I love this!" or "This is great!" or "Penis penis penis penis!!!" (situation, you say?)
Date: March 20, 2008 04:09 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
Oh, my GOD, this just gets better and better! How are you cranking out this great story so fast?!?!?! The character dynamics are so great, the dialog is witty, the tension is building nicely.
Laughing out loud at "he’s left standing there with a little bit of a “situation“…and a cut on his finger."
Absolutely holding my breath for the next chapter. I wish there was a 15 star rating!
Date: March 20, 2008 03:45 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
Ok... you've spoiled us sooo much with all the fast updates but...keep 'em coming! I'm just loving this story...the tension, the internal struggle, the different look at Jim and Pam! Love love love!
M
Date: March 20, 2008 03:38 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
I laugh out loud at this story. The beefy and delicious? I can't even handle it. It's so amusing and when I'm done reading the chapter, I literally say "Oh come on!" because I need more. So amusing, yet so addicting and well written!
Date: March 20, 2008 03:31 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
oh sweet jeebus, Jim! You are such a horn dog! With his beef 'n cheddar and his 'situation' and all.
And Stablergirl? how do you make putting a band-aid on in to foreplay? Guh.
Date: March 20, 2008 03:24 pm Title: Did you want fries with that?
That chapter was so funny. I loved all of the jokes about Arby's beef ’n cheddars.
- hey, you stud muffin, you’re beefy and delicious
- Fertilize her or get all beef ‘n cheddar on her or whatever. Ok so that was kind of gross, but he’s distracted and injured
Date: March 20, 2008 11:24 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
Geez, I hope you write about 70 chapters for this story! I am loving, LOVING it!
Date: March 20, 2008 08:59 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
I've held off on reviewing this because I haven't been able to find the right words to express just how much I am loving this story. The realness of it is a testament to your talent as a writer. These are real people with complex, unperfect feelings that you've created here.
I think what you've got here is an interesting look at who Jim and Pam. Our situations and environment influence who we are, but not totally. This Jim and this Pam are in a different situation and have a different path in life than they do on the show, but deep down, they still are the same people we've come to know and love. i think your characteraztion of Jim is just brilliant. Ugh! Must. Read. More.
Thanks You!
Date: March 20, 2008 08:32 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
LOVED IT!
10 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2008 07:48 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
This fic is just sucking me in more and more with every chapter.
Date: March 20, 2008 07:43 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
This story has me convinced that you could write a novel and I'd love it just as much as I love your Office fic. Because this is fanfic but it's also so not. And that's a compliment. I am so into this story and I'm so glad you're updating as frequently as you are. I love how this Jim and Pam are way different from the characters we know but still so the same. I also love how Pam thinks that she doesn't affect Jim at all. Can't wait to see what's next!
And, pierogies! All cool girls eat pierogies. :-)
Date: March 20, 2008 07:18 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
whoa, this is gorgeous.. beautiful writing.. ::claps:: i love this line :
"staring at her like she’s told him she’s carrying his child or something."
awesome.
Date: March 20, 2008 07:04 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
You have got to stop this there-endeth-the-lesson thing with chapters. I do not approve of chapters because they dictate where I have to stop reading and I'm really not into the whole I-have-to-wait-for-more thing. Despite the fact that you are writing this fairly quickly (thank goodness for small favours), the waiting game may be shaving some years off my life. And it's not even this story, it's all of your stories. Your blessedly talented writing will ensure that the 4 papers that I have to do will be done only after I've checked here first for an update.
On a much clearer note, I really love this AU as I've never read anything quite like it. And even though the eggs were supposed to be awful tasting, it made me very hungry. Now, if that's not a good indication of skilled writing... I don't know what is.
Date: March 20, 2008 06:20 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
Just wanted to say thanks for updating so quickly. Sounds like you were quite busy yesterday. Really appreciate you taking the time to update for us.
Date: March 20, 2008 06:12 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
Another great chapter! Loved this line:
And lots of others . . . but I'll be more specific later when I have more time. Just . . . great job!
Date: March 20, 2008 05:28 am Title: It's only awkward if you make it awkward...
This story still has me by the collar.
And speaking of all the penis talk...you know the saying that if you mention a gun in the first act, it has to get used by the third? Does that apply to penises too? (Sorry, but I think we all have penises on the brain after these last couple of chapters ;-)