8 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2008 04:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like the style a lot more than the outcome :P
Oh, that clavicle...
Date: March 22, 2008 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was really good and interesting, right until the pregnant bit. I'll not hold it against you. I really like odd structure.
9 [Report This]Date: March 19, 2008 09:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
unfold--I'm so happy to see a new story from you!! I read through this and thought it was Roy at first, but that's what I get for so hungrily devouring something you've written. A more careful reread revealed the deeper emotion between Jim and Pam, and that this was, indeed, an angsty twist on s2. I love the structure you used here with the punctuation and personification. This was great; don't go away for so long again! --CH
Date: March 19, 2008 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh my God this was amazing. I thought it was so beautiful how you structured the sentences, and really shocking there at the end. Awesome!
Date: March 19, 2008 09:28 am Title: Chapter 1
This was awesome. The syntax reminds me of ee cummings.
10 [Report This]Date: March 19, 2008 03:53 am Title: Chapter 1
This was lovely. It gave me the shivers in the best way. Your experimentation with form really worked here. :)
Date: March 18, 2008 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great scene - very sensory. I like this experiment. Thank you!