Date: April 02, 2008 10:03 am Title: Open Water
Sounds like the big head was trying to do the thinking by putting him on that plane.
And it also sounds like that kiss could melt some polar ice caps of it's own.
Nicely done, wendolf.
Date: April 02, 2008 09:46 am Title: Open Water
Love the polar bear analogy. Brilliant. You're working fast and furious, right? 'Cause I'm starving over here! ; )
9 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 09:18 pm Title: Housewarming
GUH! This was a GREAT chapter so you can officially stop torturing yourself. So many perfect moments and wonderful lines -- where to begin?
"Had just seeing him pulled the needle off the record?" Frakking brilliant metaphor -- LOVED this.
"Then he pulled away from her and every ounce of who she was becoming silently ached." WOW. Just...wow! I love this line and how it implies that somehow Jim is the conduit or the channel that helps guide her from the girl she was to the woman she wants to be.
"This kiss said, think about it and I’ll be back and maybe I love you." GO JIM! Way to throw down the proverbial gauntlet!
I think that this perhaps best sums up what I love most about this chapter which is that Jim has declared himself loud and clear and he's barely said a word to do it! But the bottom line is that Pam can't pretend for a second that he doesn't have feelings for her (and vice versa) or that he's "abandoning" her or that she's allowed to continue to be so much flotsam and jetsam in the current of her own life. She's got all the info and needs only to figure out what SHE wants now -- and then reach out and take it. Just awesome!!
Can Jim hurry up and get on that plane so he can get back already? He's made his point now so .... on to the fluffy smut!! :-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much, SV! I'm glad it wasn't too bad . . . I don't know why I struggled with it so. Anyway, I appreciate your specifics -- it's always so nice to hear what people liked (or didn't). I'm anxious for Jim to get back, too (especially since I've never been to Australia and can't really say much about it ;-). Anyway, it's not real time, so he'll be back soon! And then we shall have smut!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 08:05 pm Title: Housewarming
This fic is so good...I can't wait for more! Is it bad that I want Jim back from his trip, like...right now?
Date: April 01, 2008 05:26 pm Title: Housewarming
Way to go, Jim. Be. Assertive. Be. Be. Assertive. In your absence you will allow for Pam to grow all Fancy and New.
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 05:02 pm Title: Housewarming
I am loving this little twist! I never, ever expected that. And really, how brave of him to do it. I would think it would be about the last thing he wanted to do......which it is of course, which is where the bravery comes in. I feel so sad for her and her empty apartment. You've really managed to make the reader (this one at least!), feel just how alone and disoriented she must be. Talk about a 180 degree change.....wow. (I've been there, so I can totally relate.)
I loved, just loved how he came into the apartment, grabbed her and kissed her. Let's just give her something to think about.....;-)
In fact, he was biting his bottom lip in a way that made her breath catch.
That reminds me of a certain video on YouTube, and I know you know which one I'm referring to. ;-)
“Because you need to figure out what this,” he paused for a moment and let it sink in that he was referring to the earth-shattering, brain-exploding kiss they had just shared, “means to you.” He hesitated and she opened her mouth to say something but then he spoke again in that voice that was like . . . foreplay. “Cuz I already know what it means to me.”
Okay, and that was way hot for some reason....I think it's because he's being so assertive for a change. Great, just great wendolf.
“I can get my lamp. It’s in the bedroom.”
For some reason, the lamp thing is still just cracking me up. I can totally see her dragging that thing around. Great call back.
Also, leave it to thoughtful Jim to bring her a TV. I have to admit, part of me wanted him to be a little more involved with her getting set up in her apartment, but I don't feel that way now. Once again, you've taken what's expected and flipped it over on it's head. Stellar as usual. Okay, I guess I'll leave a little room in case someone else wants to review!
Author's Response: Thanks Annika! I wasn't sure if Jim would really be that assertive (or that brave, for that matter), but he did give the Casino Night speech (not in this fic, I mean, but on the actual show), so I think he's got some bravery and assertiveness in there somewhere. ;-) As for him helping her with her apartment, I think that's what he'd really like to stay and do. Help her set it up and then help her . . . well, properly "accessorize" all the rooms (not sure that's ever been used as a euphemism before, but). But he's playing it smart in this one. Make her miss you, Jimmy. Make her miss you bad ;-)
Thanks for reading and letting me know what you think!
Date: April 01, 2008 02:39 pm Title: Vacation Time
This is an excellent story!
B
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 01:59 pm Title: Housewarming
I don't know what you're worried about -- I love this chapter! Jim is loving and even passionate, but not pushy or pouty or even very angsty. Pam realizes that while she is starting to realize that she has true feelings for Jim, she needs to be sure before acting on them. Jim doesn't leave for his trip without saying goodbye (like I was afraid he would). And he lets Pam know how he feels about her before he goes (like I was afraid he wasn't). Overall, I thought it was great!
I will say, you're really making us wait for the payoff with this one! And I don't just mean the smut. Just that moment when we know Jim and Pam are together. But I'm sure it will be worth the wait. :-)
Author's Response: Thanks grapejelly! Yeah, I couldn't have Jim leave without saying goodbye and I couldn't have him say goodbye without another hot kiss. Just sayin.
And, yes, this story is much slower to build to the steam than my others. Hell, in "Sheet Music" I think they had sex 3 times in the first chapter! But be patient, my little friend. All will be revealed in time... Thanks again for your review!
Date: April 01, 2008 01:54 pm Title: Housewarming
Love. This. Story. Contrary to what you may believe, this was an excellent chapter. Boy, you artist types...so hard on yourselves.
Loved this in particular: "This kiss said, think about it and I’ll be back and maybe I love you. Then he pulled away and dropped his hand and opened the door."
Author's Response: I guess we are hard on ourselves . . . just our nature ;-) I'm glad it was okay after all. Thanks as always for your review!
Date: April 01, 2008 01:32 pm Title: Housewarming
I think the pacing of this chapter is great -- the whole story is so understated. It could very easily have become this hugely melodramatic angst-fest (or smut fest) -- not that there's anything wrong with those things, *cough* -- but I like that this story just seems so real and understated. Very nice. And this paragraph is made of awesome:
“Because you need to figure out what this,” he paused for a moment and let it sink in that he was referring to the earth-shattering, brain-exploding kiss they had just shared, “means to you.” He hesitated and she opened her mouth to say something but then he spoke again in that voice that was like . . . foreplay. “Cuz I already know what it means to me.”
THAT is about the most apt description I've ever heard of JK's voice when it goes all gravelly. :o)
Author's Response: Yeah . . . I love trying to describe his voice. Even watching the Leno interview, I find myself analyzing what makes it so incredibly sexy. And I've used "rough" and "gravelly" and whatever a gazillion times. Foreplay seemed like an apt description. ;-)
Date: April 01, 2008 01:28 pm Title: Vacation Time
I must tell you, Pam dragging the lamp from room to room is just one of those tiny details that makes this story so genius. Seriously. :o)
Author's Response: Hee. Glad you found that amusing ;-)
Date: April 01, 2008 01:27 pm Title: Fresh Start
I think you did a great job with this chapter. I always find chapters like this (the sort of transitional ones in between action) to be tedious to write -- and it's tempting to want to fly through them. But I think you did a great job here of filling in the blanks in a very realistic, well-paced way.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, the transition ones aren't nearly as fun as the smut and angst and just . . . drama. Glad this one was okay.
Date: April 01, 2008 01:26 pm Title: State of Arousal
*slow Kevin smile* I'm sorry. My goodness. That was hot. :o) And you know -- I like it that you addressed that (mis)conception that just because Jim's a decent guy, he's some kind of asexual boy or something. It sort of baffled me when people were saying that about him in season 2. (I mean, look at the expression on his face when Pam takes her hair down to show Kelly how she'd wear her hair; even Mindy said on the commentary that he's undressing her with his eyes.) And frankly, I think there's something to be said for a guy who's man enough to stop and think -- do the selfless thing. And he's one of those men.
But I am grateful you gave him some, er, relief in this chapter, at least...which probably makes me a skeevy little perv, but I don't care. :)
Author's Response: If you're a skeevy little perv, join the club. Yeah, there is something so hot about realizing a guy like Jim (a nice, sensitive, really good guy) has . . . NEEDS. Why is that? Anyway, I had no intentions of putting the Krasturbation scene in there, but it just popped up (TWSS?) and I couldn't ignore it. ;-) Neither could Jim, apparently.
Date: April 01, 2008 01:25 pm Title: Housewarming
so so so good...loved that he knew she needed time, but still wanted to let her know how he felt...can't wait for more!!
Date: April 01, 2008 01:23 pm Title: The Chocolate Whisperer
Whoa, sister. I see why this chapter was so much fun to write. :o) It's another that seems so organic - that they could joke around instead of just jumping each other immediately. And the sense that Pam is slowly, slowly unwinding really comes through here, as does the spontenaity of their kiss. Just wonderful.
Date: April 01, 2008 01:21 pm Title: Honeymoon Suite
Another chapter that had me grinning from ear to ear. Love the banter with Mark -- so real. And I love, love the dialogue with Jim & Pam (that she calls him on using the word "snazzy" is so perfectly them). I love what you're building up to here as well. And the vulture metaphor is perfect -- of course he's not. :o)
Author's Response: Mark was fun to write. Although I just read Stablergirl's "For What I am When I am With You" and her Mark puts mine to shame . . .but, as I've said before, we can't all be prodigies. Anyway, thanks again for your reviews!
Date: April 01, 2008 01:20 pm Title: Aftershock
Amen, Mrs. Beesly. At least she had the courage to call it off, which really is to be commended.
Date: April 01, 2008 01:19 pm Title: Give the Girl a Life Saver
This may well have been my favorite scene (which is saying a lot). You just capture their dynamic so well -- particularly the tenderness that's there. I think one of the lovliest moments they've shared on the show was the hug in The Merger, and that's the same sense I get here. And you write their dialogue just pitch perfectly. Love it.
(And, um, I also love it that your JK love is shining through here -- slipping her hands under his jacket to hug him? Gaahhh.)
Author's Response: Oh, yeah, baby. I think my JK love is always simmering so close to the surface that I actually have to tamp it down so it doesn't just overflow sickeningly on every. single. page. There's just something about that guy...
Date: April 01, 2008 01:18 pm Title: Now or Never
Love your Roy here. I've always envisioned that he'd be capable of that kind of gentleness as well -- just that he'd grown so used to taking Pam for granted that he never showed that side anymore. I love how understated this chapter was as well.
Author's Response: Yeah, I usually tend to write Roy as a stereotypical asshole, but we all know that even "bravery is not her strong suit" Pam would have dumped him a long time ago if that's what he was. So hopefully I walked that line between jackass and guy that Pam fell in love with okay...
Date: April 01, 2008 01:17 pm Title: Ahem...
Okay, I love it that you didn't make it some grand dramatic gesture -- that it was as simple as Jim just clearing his throat, because I think you're absolutely right that he wouldn't have been able to do anything more...dramatic or aggressive than that. (Random side note: At my wedding, we had to have the whole "Speak now or forever hold your peace" line; according to our minister, it couldn't be excluded from the vows for some reason. Very strange.)
Off to the next chapter!
Author's Response: The teenage writer in me started with the "speak now or hold your peace" grand gesture idea, but then the 38-year-old writer in me talked her down from those dramatics. Jim is just not that kind of guy. So I'm glad this seemed more organic. Interesting that you still had that at your wedding . . .I haven't been to one (maybe ever) that did that? Anyhoo, thanks for your review!
Date: April 01, 2008 01:15 pm Title: Here Comes the Bride
So here's how good this story is: I inhaled the entire thing in one sitting and couldn't tear myself away from the chapters long enough to even review them (and as a fellow writer, I totally get how much reviews mean!). Seriously -- love this.
Now I'm off to leave proper reviews for each chapter. :o)
Author's Response: Girl7, you are the greatest. I love reviews like yours. And since you took the time to go back and review each chapter, I shall respond to each review! Tit for tit . . .
Date: April 01, 2008 12:55 pm Title: Housewarming
I have no idea what you were worried about because that chapter was all sorts of goodness. I wanna skip over the angst that seems like its coming (according to your foreboding in your chapter end notes). But I suppose that's what makes the payoff so good, right? Right.
Author's Response: Okay, good. I guess it just didn't flow from my typey little fingers as easily as I had hoped. But I'm glad it was good for you (TWSS).
rnDon't worry -- Not too much angst, nbyevu. Just have to deal with some baggage is all. Jim will be back soon enough. Thanks for your comments!
Date: April 01, 2008 12:46 pm Title: Housewarming
Um, yeah, that Jim sure knows how to warm a house. And I don't mean the TV. Way to man up and explain exactly why you're still going and what you're hoping for when you return.
*le sigh*
Author's Response: I love that expression "man up" . . . not sure why. Anyway, glad you liked it. yeah, and Jim can warm my house any time... Thanks for your review!
Date: April 01, 2008 10:16 am Title: Vacation Time
Love this story! The characterization is really perfect, and I loved the dialog in this chapter. Very JAM...can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review honey!!!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 10:10 am Title: Vacation Time
i love love love you for this. i hate when people make jim out to get walked all over so thank you for not doing that here. even with someone he loves as much as pam, this is very very realistic. :)
Author's Response: I hate that too, waltisafox. I like a guy with balls (that goes without saying, right?) -- not some pantywaste (or is it pantywaist?) who just moans and hangs his head forever. Even Jim on the show got some cojones eventually. So thanks for agreeing with me on that! And for your review, of course.