Date: April 06, 2008 09:26 am Title: Homecoming
fantastic, you did leave me hanginf though, however, this chapert was VERY good.
Date: April 06, 2008 07:04 am Title: Down Under
Good. Hopefully Jim's made a few friends who'll hang with him and keep his spirits up. Because otherwise, it would be a long two weeks sitting around with all the Pam thoughts running through his head.
You know we're all waiting for the big reunion, don't you? All you writers just like to torture us with all this crap about "Pam's not ready for Jim yet....she's afraid" Afraid of what? Dating Halpert? Sex with Jim? I don't understand this fear you speak of. ;)
Author's Response: Afraid of what? Dating Halpert? Sex with Jim? I don't understand this fear you speak of. ;) Hee! I don't either, EH! So the reunion will be coming VERY soon ;-0 And by soon I mean the next chapter. I swear ;-) Thanks for your review!rn
Date: April 04, 2008 10:52 pm Title: Here Comes the Bride
I loved that I could really hear the Australian accents. That means you nailed the lingo :)
Author's Response: Oh, good! I have one Australian friend (named Scott) and I kept trying to hear his voice as I wrote it. Glad it came across okay. Thanks for reviewing, Pamcakes!
Date: April 04, 2008 09:50 pm Title: Down Under
cute...short and sweet but it was nice to see him in Australia...can't wait for more!!
Date: April 04, 2008 09:04 pm Title: Down Under
Enough seperation already. It's like torture.
Date: April 04, 2008 09:00 pm Title: Down Under
You're seriously killing me here my dear wendolf. KILLING ME. What happened to my totally and utterly logical suggestion for breezing right through this trip?!?! *SIGH*
Well, although it didn't end in the happy, fluffy smut I was pushing for, I still loved it. Scott the guide was adorable and hilarious and a very welcome touch in this chapter which, I suspect, you knew would make all of your loyal readers feel about as sad and lonely as poor Jim. He was a much needed ray of sunshine. :-)
My two favorite lines were (as if you couldn't guess):
His heart was completely AWOL, left back in Scranton like a forgotten pair of sunglasses. That kind of crushed my little heart with it's sadness. Poor Jim and his AWOL heart!
He thought about calling Pam every day, several times a day, and the constant urge made him feel like somewhat of an addict. Like he needed a Pam fix. And I think this is a sentiment that most of us can relate to. Sometimes it is unhealthy to be this addicted to someone, but in Jim and Pam's case it just illustrates how meant to be together they truly are.
Note to Jim: get thee to an airport and get yourself a Pam fix STAT!
Beaut of a job as always!
Date: April 04, 2008 08:43 pm Title: Down Under
Sorry to be such a negligent reviewer lately, but I'm still here, reading and loving this story. Too tired at the moment (not to mention sated with the eyeful of JK I just got in LH ;-) to give many examples, but wanted to say your polar bear analogy was terrific - Jim wishing the camera guys would save the struggling bear was perfect. Many wonderful moments/lines, like this: His heart was completely AWOL, left back in Scranton like a forgotten pair of sunglasses. What a great image. And you've built the sexual/emotional tension really well - cause it's not generic Sexy 101 - it's driven by who these particular characters are - I love when I can really 'hear' the voices without having to work hard to believe it's them (lazy reader that I am, lol.) More please.
Date: April 04, 2008 07:59 pm Title: Down Under
Oh, poor Jim, everything that is going on in his heart is all over his face! Thanks for this little bit to hold us over!
(Now use all the yummy Leatherheads press and photos to inspire you to write!!)
Date: April 04, 2008 07:58 pm Title: Down Under
"...and the constant urge made him feel like somewhat of an addict." Yeah, me too, as I obsessively check for updates : ) This chapter was a nice little break in the action, wendolf. I love how you conjured up Scott and Chloe and made them seem real, a nice addition to the story. I also like the idea of Jim actually (kind of) having fun on his vacation. Let me tell you once again how much I enjoy this story. It's such a treat.
Date: April 03, 2008 09:49 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
Loving this story! It's good that Jim decided to go to Australia and give Pam some time alone... though I'm not so sure he'll have a great time here with all the pam-thoughts (which is a shame cause I'd damn sure like to show him around :D). I'll definitely stay tuned!
Date: April 03, 2008 03:16 am Title: Keep on Swimming
I'm really enjoying this story. I like the way you wrote the Roy and Pam interaction; Roy having a coke not a beer and the way they avoided the big shouting match. Nice.
Date: April 02, 2008 09:20 pm Title: Here Comes the Bride
I don't know if I've reviewed this yet, wendolf, so I apologize if I haven't. I love this story. So, so good. I love the twist of Jim going to Australia despite the fact that he'd love to stay and be Pam's errand boy/lover, etc. I like that he's a little more assertive in this story, but yet still.....Jim. You really manage to push these characters but yet still keep them believable and true to what we know of them.
Also? I got little goosebumps when Jim just walked in and kissed her. Weee!! Can't wait for more, my friend!
Author's Response: I’m prefacing all my review responses today with: sorry I’m so darn slow . . . I will be faster in the future, I promise. Now -- kells, glad you liked Jim heading to Australia. I often wondered what he did about that trip... Thanks so much for reviewing. Makes my day!
Date: April 02, 2008 07:25 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
Good chapter. Good for you for painting Roy in a kind light. He deserves it in this story. Very well done.
Date: April 02, 2008 06:17 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
Oh, he definitely had a gender. And she was pretty sure she had felt it against her hip when he kissed her. Oh, how I LOVE that little passage : )
Date: April 02, 2008 06:08 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
aww...so glad that that is over...now on to more jam??? can't wait for more!!
Date: April 02, 2008 06:04 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
Good to see Jim giving Pam the space she needs to figure things out, and Pam actually using that time and "keeping on swimming" ;) - very mature of both of them. And I love the scene with Roy, very subtle, very natural, and I think it was very needed - glad to see Pam facing the consequences of her actions. Loving this story, keep it up! :)
Date: April 02, 2008 05:44 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
I've got a great idea -- how about "Jim hated Australia. He hated it like Michael's staff meetings (when Pam wasn't there to distract him), like Angela's religious judgments of, well, everything and Dwight's bobblehead collection. So he called the airline, changed his flight home and first thing in the morning he headed for the airport. The next day found him on Pam's porch tentatively pressing the doorbell."
And VOILA! Instant segue to fluffy smut!!
Just kidding. ;-P
My two favorite moments from this chappy are:
Maybe the timing could have been better, but calling off her wedding had been a stroke of fucking genius. She was so tired of being with a man that somehow always managed to press just the wrong buttons. WORD sister. True dat.
When the emotions – the real scary emotions like regret and fear and loneliness and not the ones he could handle like anger – hit, Roy delayed, changed the subject, diverted the landing. Diverted the landing! I love your way with metaphors. So well written!
It's great to see Pam starting to spread her wings, recognizing her own strengths and her own power.
Can't wait for the next chappy!!
Date: April 02, 2008 05:31 pm Title: Open Water
OK, I loved the entire chapter and I thought the whole "polar bear searching for an ice float-global warming" metaphor and thought it was both funny but also kind of touching in that it was a really great comparison for Pam's situation. Who'd have thought??
But as much as I loved everything else, it was this line that I adored:
God, you really are an idiot, his penis taunted him again. And this time he completely agreed.
You know, I should have guessed that -- like the rest of Jim Halpert -- his penis would also be witty and faintly sarcastic. Loves it!!
Date: April 02, 2008 04:19 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
Ok, good for you Pam. You did it. And now you have a chair to go with your lamp.
Keep Swimming!
9 [Report This]Date: April 02, 2008 04:10 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
"just keep swimming, just keep swimming" I love Nemo and this is a great manta for Pam to have. Also, I just read the last 3 chaps and dude, are those kisses sexy!
Date: April 02, 2008 03:45 pm Title: Keep on Swimming
This story is excellent! I eagerly await the payoff!
B
10 [Report This]Date: April 02, 2008 02:37 pm Title: Open Water
Love the metaphor! How did you ever think of that? It's just perfect for this story.
Only thing I didn't like was the choice of the word "brutally" to describe how it would've been if Jim had said I'm in love with you aloud. Just seemed a little off.
And his penis is talking again! Can't wait to hear Pam's thoughts.
Author's Response: Thanks VB! Don't know where I came up with that one . . . sometimes I feel like someone else is writing and I'm just sort of the conduit. Sometimes I feel very much like I'm writing (and that's usually when it feels like a struggle!). I agree about the brutally part -- think I'm going to go take another look at that now... Thanks for your review, as always!
Date: April 02, 2008 12:20 pm Title: Open Water
short one, but a good one...can't wait to see them together again!!
Date: April 02, 2008 10:51 am Title: Open Water
Lol. The wisdom of the penis. Often when men 'listen to their penis' it offers them the wrong advice. I like how you turned the tables on that old cliche. Nice chapter. I'm following this one very closely.
Date: April 02, 2008 10:22 am Title: Open Water
Like the polar bear, she’d get saved or fed or whatever for the moment, but the problem of global warming was still there, still threatening to be her downfall in the end anyway. Such a great line! I love this. And I seriously, seriously love the choice you’ve made to have Jim go to Australia anyway. I can’t wait to see what Pam’s thinking! Awesome as always, wendolf, and I’m eagerly awaiting an update!