This was wonderful and original! I love seeing things from the documentarians' perspectives, how invested they get in the storyline, being so close to the action and yet disconnected.

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Are you KIDDING me? You've got to be kidding me. Tell me that comment about you disliking this fabulous story was sarcasm at work -- because how could you not be bust your buttons proud of this? Seriously!

I love how you've given us small, new peeks into the world of Jim and Pam. I've grown to love the idea of really taking the show to be the documentary it portrays, with Jim and Pam real people who's lives are unravelling (or intertwining, as the case may be) before our very eyes -- not to mention the eyes and ears and cameras and boom mics of the crew.

There was a moment in each of these five parts that just killed me.

In Part 1, it's all in the title: There's a beat between she's and great. Because there is SO much being said in that space. It hinted at a bigger story and of a wealth of things unspoken. Probably delicious, but definitely unspoken. I think for me as a viewer of the show, that was the moment that made me lean forward with that wonderful feeling of anticipation for the first time.

Part 2: When she stops him after the second time, he nearly screams: tell him. [Such a girl.] I love how invested the camera guy is -- against his will! And how despite the fact that he'd like to remain detached and not get all girly, like us he can't help but be drawn in by the Jim/Pam romance. Love it!

I adored pretty much all of Part 3 but it was this line that really did me in: The hopeless romantic side of Mindy buys a can of grape soda, and she leaves it in the cooler under her desk. Because, like us, no matter how hopeless it seemed at times and no matter how often we wanted to rail our frustrations at the two of them for being so blind and stupid and just TORTURING us (and eachother) this way, we couldn't give up on the hope that maybe, just maybe they'd figure it out one day. This line just perfectly sums that up.

Part 4: He tries to keep his finger off the record button when he's around him. Nothing more depressing than having someone record your depression. God knows we all felt Jim's pain but it is kind of bittersweet to see that the crew felt it too -- enough to respect the man's need to some measure of private grief, no matter how small. Very poignant in it's simplicity.

And Part 5 did it all for me in that last two lines: These crazy kids. Steve presses his lips together to hide his smile. Because no matter how pollyanna-ish it might be to believe that Jim and Pam will get their happily ever after, it is nearly impossible to be immune to their joy in one another. Even crusty, cynical old Steve.

If you think this is your bad stuff, I can't wait to see what you've got coming next -- I'm betting it will blow me away! Really -- you did a wonderful job with this and you should be proud.

Author's Response:

Oh, whoa; you've made me feel sheepish now!! I'm kind of annoyed with the way some of the lines flow [or don't] but you've made me feel so much better about this story as a whole, now, including some of the parts I disliked, so thank you. :D Seriously. I can't even begin to tell you how much this review has meant to me. 

Although oof, now I'm not so sure about my follow-up! I hope it lives up to your expectations. :D

You are amazing.  

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You're way too hard on yourself.  This was such a good read.  Really enjoyed it. 

Author's Response: And you're much too nice to me! - but I'm not complaining. :D Thank you so much!

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This is just perfect.  I love it - seeing these little glimpses of them through other people's eyes.  And so similar to my reactions sometimes, too.  Great job!

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I, in fact, own none of this - even the reactions of the fictional characters are ripped off from people in real life. ;)