9 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Really intriguing premise - and nicely done!
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 05:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
This just blew me away. I've read it about four times now, but I still don't think I can do it justice. So many beautiful lines and images but I especially loved Pam's cardigans in the donation bin. I love thinking of them like this - what a completely peaceful and blissful life you've given them.
Date: April 06, 2008 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is simply breathtaking, bebitched, just gorgeous prose that flows like poetry. I must've copied and pasted at least six different sections that I wanted to mention in the review before I finally gave up -- it's all so incredibly well written. And it's one of those powerful pieces that just sticks with you; I feel like I'm sort of caught in a haze, unable to snap out of the world you've created here. Just beautiful -- thanks for this. :o)
Date: April 06, 2008 05:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
One of the best stories I've read in a long, long time. I love the idea of Pam disappearing and starting over, and the way you told that story was so beautiful and vivid and real. Just lovely.
Date: April 06, 2008 04:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
I've had that feeling a lot lately, just wanting to pick up and move somewhere new and not tell a soul, so this really resonated. Thanks for writing it, it was beautiful!
Date: April 06, 2008 04:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
I agree with basically everything Colette said. Just lovely and so refreshing and, 'One day in August, the world rips and reshuffles and everything begins to fall into place,' might be the most beautiful things I've read in a while.
Date: April 06, 2008 03:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love that they both had the courage to take risks and still ended up together. Their lives seem so calm and peaceful, yet vibrant, now that they live in such a different setting. It's almost as if DM was a cage holding them back, and now they can spread their wings and be the people they've always wanted to be.
Lovely job.
Date: April 06, 2008 02:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is incredibly beautiful. I think I love this more than I love most people. Seriously. I love the idea of Pam just having enough and dropping off the face of the earth. I love the idea of Jim following her.
Amazing. Beautiful. Loved it.
Date: April 06, 2008 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
Every once in a while, something truly original and wonderful appears here. Like this. Such a quiet, soulful piece - unexpected, yet totally imaginable. I love how visual this is, how emotionally evocative. Too many gorgeous images to list, but I especially liked the bit about Jan seeing Pam near Scottsdale...The rumor drifts around like an aged tumbleweed - just beautiful and dreamlike. And the entire last paragraph and final sentence are worth reading over and over. In fact, I think I will ;-) Bravo.
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 01:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was such a great piece! VERY poetic!