Reviewer: Annika Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 08, 2008 08:38 pm Title: it's just, i think i'm lost somewhere in the solar system

And he thinks it's mean, all the ways she murders him.

 

But he's a glutton for punishment, and he knows he's rather die in the palm of her hand than hold on to someone ... less.

 

She smiles at him across poker chips and he takes his latest last deep breath.

Just beautifully done.  You've managed to really set a mood and capture how Jim must have felt.

Reviewer: wendolf Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: April 07, 2008 08:30 am Title: don't forget to live

Wow, this was really touching and sad. Great job. I liked lines like this: She grabs a Blue Moon, wishing it were a Hoegaarden, but resigned to wanting what she can't have, settling for things she doesn't want.
Funny how a beer can be a metaphor for so much more. Anyway, loved it even though it broke my heart.