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So beautiful. I love how he misses her so much just for one night, that at the beginning, I actualy thought they'd broken up. And then it made me smile when he called her and it turned out that she was only going to be away from him for one night.

Sweet.

You have such a beautiful writing style, I don't think I've read anything of yours I haven't liked.  Amazing.

...her voice like a slow river

If you just wrote that one phrase, I'd have loved this. This captures that solitary, still of the night feeling so well, when being that in love is as awful as it is wonderful (it sends a surge of something akin to despair through him.) Like how you use his hyper-awareness of the sounds/forces of nature around him as a metaphor for his vulnerability and fear, just below the surface (the mystery of where they’re headed - perfect.) And his inability to tell her rings so true  - I'd love to think that he doesn't need to, that she already knows. Beautiful.