Date: June 22, 2008 09:12 pm Title: Chapter 7
Please, please, please update soon! This chapter made me so sad...but I guess that's what makes it so good! It evokes emotion! Please update soon...like NOW!! :)
Author's Response: Update coming soon! Things are looking up, so hopefully it'll evoke some happier emotions soon! Thanks for reviewing!
9 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2008 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 7
Bravo! Another great chapter. I love all the great dynamics you have running through the piece. Yes, it's dark, but I'm glad to see that you pushed the limits and took it there. It's a wrenching downward spiral, but you've kept it sincere.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you've enjoyed it even though it's dark! I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story.
9 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2008 07:56 pm Title: Chapter 7
Wow. That is truly rock bottom. Very well written.
I hope the trip to California will have a positive outcome!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was nervous about this chapter, so it's good to hear you enjoyed it!
Date: June 16, 2008 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 6
"These aren't the characters you know and love..." After that tag line, I didn't want to read this story. As much as I love angst, I thought to myself... this is not the kind of angst I'm going to like. I finally printed the first six chapters, however, after passing it over day after day and I've got to tell you... man, what an amazing job you've done with this. You've not left any detail uncovered as you've written each chapter and scene, and you are progressing the storyline along in a realistic way. I can't say enough good things about how much I'm enjoying your work. You've described Jim's downward spiral just brilliantly.
I have to say that I'm hoping for a happy ending, because I'd hate to think of Jim totally giving up all hope on Pam not to mention life itself, and punishing himself into oblivion, but I totally understand that coming back from all the "junk" he's gone through and put others through will not be a fluffy journey. I look forward to going the distance with you on this one as you see fit. You are a truly gifted writer.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you gave this story a chance! I know it was probably a bad tag to put on there, but I just wanted to warn everyone this would be a darker story. Thanks so much for such a thoughtful review. I'm glad you braved the angst and I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story! Let me know what you think!
9 [Report This]Date: June 15, 2008 01:10 pm Title: Chapter 6
Good Chapter. Update!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: June 14, 2008 06:17 pm Title: Chapter 6
I just signed up so I could review this chapter. After lurking I felt compelled to review!
Your story is brilliant! I can't believe how well you write. Your chapters are so fleshed out and realistic. I think that sometimes in fanfic a resolution is rushed, so that a happy ending occurs on an artificial time line. I appreciate how thought out each chapter has been in your story, and how every character is flawed (Karen has done lots of hurtful things but you can see why, and Jim isn't just the "good guy" who's been wronged either, he's made tons of mistakes).
I hope you give Jim a happy ending, even though I'm finding it hard to see Pam taking his sudden change of heart well (at least in her eyes it's a sudden change, she doesn't know he didn't get the note).
How will Pam realize she's not a consolation prize after Karen broke his heart? (Which is how she'd see it)
Hopefully you have this ending well with Jim getting a chance to explain. I can't wait to see how you have them reunite. Will he bump in to her in Philly? Or look her up? I'm assuming (hoping) you DO have them reunite.
I was faked out a ton in the past couple of chapters...I kept thinking Jim would bump into her at the bar, or that the whole point of him going back to Scranton for that one night after staying with his brother was so that he could accidentally see her. Luckily, your brilliant mind doesn't think in such contrivances (mine does!) and you've made it all the more realistic. There's no far-fetched coincidences for you!
Anyway, sorry for the uber-long review, I obviously had a lot of time to think about this one (you can also see that I'm not a writer!)
Please update soon, I'm totally hooked!
Author's Response: No, thank you for writing a long review! It was so great to read! Thanks so much for putting so much thought into your response! It's really a joy to read and see what other people are thinking about the direction I've taken the story. I hope I will address all of your concerns in a realistic and enjoyable way, and I hope you'll enjoy the rest of this story. (I'm also honoured you signed up to review! Glad you de-lurked!)
Date: June 14, 2008 08:30 am Title: Chapter 6
The only way is up, right? I hope so. Poor miserable, depressed alcoholic Jim : (
Author's Response: You're right! And it's all about to get better. :)
Date: June 09, 2008 07:29 pm Title: Chapter 5
ahhh... the depths of despair for poor Mr. Halpert... it can only go up from here! Great update!
Author's Response: Thank you! Jim still has a little ways to go before life will start looking up again, but I hope you'll enjoy the Jim angst to come!
Date: June 07, 2008 07:10 pm Title: Chapter 5
I have to finally comment because this is some great writing. The Jim and Karen stuff was very well written, to the point where I was like, "I hate this story" but I really love it actually.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'll take it as a compliment that you feel that strongly over the Jim and Karen stuff! Karen is (mostly) out of the way, but she may be making an appearance again in the near future...I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story, and let me know what you think!
Date: June 05, 2008 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 5
Please, please update soon! This is a great story!
Author's Response: I'm working on it! I'm afraid I've hit a bit of a block so this week's update might be a little late, but I'm trying to keep the updates pretty regular! Thanks for taking the time to comment...I really appreciate it! I hope you'll continue to enjoy the story.
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 02:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
I am so so so so sooo loving this story (well, all of your stories, but that's beside the point). You write beautifully, and everything is so detailed, and this chapter is no exception. I can't wait to read more!
Date: June 05, 2008 10:18 am Title: Chapter 1
I really love this story...it feels real and emotional, and I really the like the concept you've been playing with. Looking forward to more.
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 12:30 am Title: Chapter 5
WOW.
This is absolutely heartbreaking, but its somehow beautiful.. even if this last chapter absolutely KILLED me. There's such a quiet sadness weaved in. I really love it, and I can't wait to see where you take it.
Author's Response: I think it's a beautiful journey to see two people so far apart and finding their way back to one another. I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and thanks so much for your kind comments. It means so much to me!
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 11:39 pm Title: Chapter 5
I kind of hate you right now. I'm tearing up, and I'm not sure I've ever done that from reading fic. Seriously, this just hurts. I hope it gets better, but almost anything will be a relief. Wonderful job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to comment! I know the angst is a lot to handle, and I really appreciate you sticking with the story even though it hurts! I promise the reward will be a happy ending, even if it takes us a while to get there! I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story.
Date: June 04, 2008 10:20 pm Title: Chapter 5
ah angsty indeed. As awful as that was, I actually quite enjoyed seeing Jim so messed over Pam being gone. At least Karen is gone. What a crazy twist though, hiding Pam's note. I could totally see her doing that.
Author's Response: Karen did get quite sneaky, didn't she?! I don't think the "real" Karen would have been so underhanded, but it's been fun letting her go a little wild! Thanks for commenting, and I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 09:55 pm Title: Chapter 5
:( please! give me something good! make it better! :'(. (I am a bit of a sucker for angst though)
great chapter. update soon!
Author's Response: I'm a sucker for angst as well, although I have to admit, it's much easier to stomach when you're the writer as opposed to the reader! Thanks for commenting! I will make it better, but Jim has a few more things to figure out. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Let me know!
Date: June 04, 2008 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 2
noooooooo!!!!!!
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 07:11 pm Title: Chapter 5
I think your Angsty!Jim is the angstiest of all the Angsty!Jims. This is angsty-verging-on-suicidal Jim--a whole new level of Angsty!Jim. I have to know--did you kick a puppy when you were done writing this chapter, maybe during? Seriously, this was unbelievably good and so well written. Maybe a little glimmer of happy soon, please? I think our boy has done his penance.
Author's Response: I confess, I have a severe angst addiction. But to answer your question, I went and hugged my puppy afterwards...just to balance the universe a little. I think Jim still has some self-loathing to do before he really gets things figured out. He's going to have to get to his very darkest place before he can crawl back out of it. But I do promise happiness in the fairly near future!
Date: June 04, 2008 07:07 pm Title: Chapter 5
This was NOT what I was expecting! Having Pam gone is a great twist in the plotline. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: I didn't want to make it TOO easy for Jim! He still has some stuff to figure out before he can make things right with Pam, methinks. Thanks for the review! Glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: May 28, 2008 07:26 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh, PLEASE don't tell me that this is over! I NEED some Jam before this story is over, PLEASE! Lol, sorry for that. I usually don't like Jim/Karen stories in any way, shape or form, but yours is done very well, and I enjoyed being able to peek halfway into Karen's head. But that's done now. GIMME SOME JAM!!! :)
Author's Response: I'm with you...I don't like Jim/Karen, either! (Which is probably why Karen is so easy to hate in this story!) Jim still has some things to figure out before Pam comes into the picture, but I promise that's coming!
9 [Report This]Date: May 28, 2008 05:24 am Title: Chapter 4
This chapter certainly ran the whole gamut of emotions. The gala was such an amazing trainwreck! Hate that Karen! The absence of Pam's note had crossed my mind when reading a prior chapter, and I wasn't sure if you had intentionally omitted it. I was really happy to have it finally surface. Very clever. I'm thinking maybe that things are looking up from here for poor Jim? I hope so!
Author's Response: Whoops...I missed this one earlier. I tried to figure out a way to get the note in there earlier, but this is where it decided to show itself! Karen is pretty easy to hate now, huh? Thanks for your reviews! They always make me happy!
10 [Report This]Date: May 27, 2008 09:27 am Title: Chapter 4
This is a very powerful story! Please keep the updates coming. Your writing style is great and I truly enjoy reading!
Author's Response: I will keep them coming! Most of the story is already written and I'm just cleaning it up to post, so look for updates once a week or so! Thank you for taking the time to review! I really appreciate it and I hope you will continue to enjoy the story!
Date: May 26, 2008 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 4
Good job and great, great chapter. I did not expect this at all, but I really love all this drama.
I still kind of feel bad for Karen, but I also hate her. I sure don't like how she took the medal though. Hmmm
That explains why Jim didn't go back though, I can see him needing something else.
Now, let's speed up to the happy ending :)Author's Response: I'm so glad to hear you feel for Karen! I know there's a lot of hate for her, and while that's definitely what I was going for, I'm also hoping some people will empathise with her downfall. Jim was no saint to her, after all! Thanks for the review! Hope you will continue to read and enjoy!
Date: May 26, 2008 09:15 pm Title: Chapter 4
Great chapter! Maybe a little soap opera-y with the Affair Guy punching and kicking Jim at the party, but it did give him a good excuse to quit and get out. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: I think people will do a lot of crazy things when they've had a bit to drink and are in an emotionally charged situation like they were! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter and hope the rest won't disappoint! Thanks for taking the time to review!
Date: May 26, 2008 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 4
awesome :) sneaky horrible horrible Karen! This was a great chapter
Author's Response: I agree! Karen is pretty terrible! Thanks for reviewing! Hope you like the rest of the story! Let me know what you think about the other chapters!