Date: June 20, 2008 06:52 pm Title: If a chosen word has got you cornered
I just discovered this story and it's a gem!
You've really captured the connection Jim and Pam have, even when they are not in the same room. You've got a nice does of fluff in here (which I love), but you are also tackling some of the serious issues they are still dealing with.
Excellent work and I can wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! That is such a wonderful compliment. Having them apart has been a fun way to work with their dynamic. You're awesome for reviewing :D.
10 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2008 03:42 pm Title: If a chosen word has got you cornered
I really liked it! Nothing wrong with some angst every once in a while
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Ellie. I think my goal with this piece was to put together realistic conversations that you could imagine Jim and Pam having, so it made sense to me that they'd have their spats over the phone as well. My main issue is that I don't think my angst-writing is on par with my fluff-writing...I'm so paranoid I'll make it melodramatic! But you're so awesome to keep up with my little story :D.
Date: June 20, 2008 03:29 pm Title: If a chosen word has got you cornered
I thought it was a fine chapter! I liked how Pam had to sleuth out what was bugging Jim. And I like that she's been able to stay friends with Roy's sister. Don't know why I like that, but I do.
Author's Response: Why thank you! And yeah, I always imagine Pam's family and Roy's family intermingling a lot...after ten years of spending holidays with his folks, it didn't feel right that she'd cut off all contact with them. Thanks so much for the review, VB, and I'm really hoping you update soon :D.
9 [Report This]Date: June 09, 2008 02:56 pm Title: Right key, wrong door
Wow! I've never had a chapter dedicated to me before!! Thank you so much for the honor! Not to mention the free plug for my story…
Perfectly enjoyable fluff here! I absolutely can see Jim and Pam spending the whole weekend together and then talking on the phone for his whole drive home.
My favorite make-me-melt line in this chapter?
Remind me again why it’s still my apartment and not our apartment?
I dunno. This one just got to me!
Author's Response: No problem, it's the least I could do. Plus I've been enjoying Cardiac Care so much.
Date: June 09, 2008 02:55 pm Title: Right key, wrong door
Wow! I've never had a chapter dedicated to me before!! Thank you so much for the honor! Not to mention the free plug for my story…
Perfectly enjoyable fluff here! I absolutely can see Jim and Pam spending the whole weekend together and then talking on the phone for his whole drive home.
My favorite make-me-melt line in this chapter?
Remind me again why it’s still my apartment and not our apartment?
I dunno. This one just got to me!
Date: June 09, 2008 01:04 pm Title: Right key, wrong door
Hey you can't go wrong with some good ol' fluff!
Author's Response: Haha, I figured as much.
Date: June 09, 2008 06:56 am Title: Right key, wrong door
Oh, I like...so very much.
“Still here, kiddo.” Jim answered, flicking on his turn signal towards the Scranton exit. Steady clicks filled the car, an oddly comforting song against the relative silence of the road. Loved that image.
“You’re the kind of girl I want to come home to.” And most definitely loved that.
Author's Response: Ooh, thanks NanReg. I love seeing what you pick out as your favorite lines. You're awesome!
Date: June 09, 2008 06:36 am Title: Right key, wrong door
Fluff is nice. Very nice. A story you could grow beets with.
Author's Response: Hahah, you crack me up. I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for the review, lisahoo :D!
Date: June 08, 2008 07:36 pm Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
Hmm ... waiting for another chapter!
Date: June 05, 2008 02:39 pm Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
These just keep getting better and better. Their conversations seems true to character without being cutesy or trite like other fics I've read.
Favorite line:
because I can’t imagine any sort of future that doesn’t have you in it.
Just perfect!
Author's Response: Thank you! I try really hard to keep them in character, and I'm so glad you think it's working. I really appreciate your taking the time to review :D.
Date: June 05, 2008 01:37 pm Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
This is so darn cute. I'm hiding in my dark room trying to conquer a migraine, and seriously, I think the fluff is helping. Love it! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Hahaha, fluff is pretty powerful. I'm glad I could be of service :D. Thanks so much for the review!!
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 10:11 am Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
Wow, I love this story. Everything about it. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! You're so awesome for taking the time to review :D.
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 09:50 am Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
Perfect dialog! I love the running commentary on what Jim's doing as he talks on the phone It flows so well with his speech, not at all clunky. I especially liked this paragraph:
Jim ducked into the drugstore, momentarily startled by the blast of air conditioning that made his clothes feel damp. The store was crowded with teenagers trying to escape the heat, and he turned to keep from colliding with a bald, suited businessman balancing an attaché and a slushie. “Seriously? The last five years didn’t tip you off?”I guess I just like the image of the businessman with the slushie … and then that comment. Zing!
Author's Response: Yes! I was hoping I'd hear from you. Haha, the businessman just popped into my head and wouldn't leave until I wrote him in. Oh, and Snarky!Jim was itching to make an appearance. I could see Pam squirming on the other line, but I couldn't save her. Thanks so much for sticking with me. You're a rock star.
Date: June 05, 2008 07:17 am Title: So I Would Choose to be with You
This is so sweet. Just a nice happy read!
Author's Response: Why, thank you! I think I might be better at happiness than angst, haha. You're so great for reviewing :D!
Date: June 05, 2008 06:01 am Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
Ok, I can't say anything more than *melt*. I'm enjoying their easy back & forth, and how Pam's voice and the sight of her makes Jim so happy. They've both earned it.
Author's Response: Haha, that's all you really need to say, because that's pretty much what I was aiming for. Thanks for sticking with me - you're awesome for taking the time to read and tell me nice things :D.
10 [Report This]Date: June 05, 2008 05:31 am Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous and more gorgeous.
“Could have left a note,” she countered, only slightly mollified, and Jim found himself suddenly wishing he could run his thumb across her soft mouth. How can I even begin to tell you how wonderful that is?! or this:
“Hey,” he said softly, still looking up at her with a lazy crook of his mouth.
“Hi,” she whispered back, biting her lip a little before grinning widely.
“I’m going to marry you,” he said finally, because it needed to be said. He needed to bind the moment up somehow, tie it down before it fled with the last rays of the summer sun. Pam started, her eyes growing wide.
Kindly continue to feed my addiction. Thank you.
Author's Response: Aw, NanReg, I was waiting to see what you thought :). Glad I didn't disappoint, and hopefully I'll come up with the next installment soon. I can see this being a pretty long-running series... especially considering how awesome you guys are who have been keeping up with it from the beginning. Thanks for the encouragement!
Date: June 04, 2008 11:17 pm Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
Oh, I'm thoroughly enjoying this story. Every time you update with a new chapter, I go back and reread the entire thing because I just enjoy it that much. You really use such lovely turns of phrases. Amazing. And this part is stunning:
[i]“You’re my favorite, Pam."
“Your favorite what?” she asked, grinning madly despite it all.
“My favorite.” he repeated warmly, as though it explained. “My favorite everything.”[/i]
Also? There was a part in this chapter that reminded me of a song I thought I'd recommend: Joshua Radin - Growing Up To Do.
And speaking of songs... the Billy Joel song you're using for chapter titles has always been a favorite of mine.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying the piece; I've been having a blast writing it. Ooh, and I checked out the Joshua Radin song, as well - I really liked it. Thanks so much for reviewing!rn
10 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2008 11:08 pm Title: Lest the strings should break, and the music be done
You have such a pretty writing style! I love this fic; helps me through the office-less nights... Update soon please :)
Author's Response: Thanks Ellie! You're totally one of the people I try super hard for :D. I'll get another chapter up as soon as I can.
Date: May 27, 2008 10:54 am Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
I love this! Their conversations make me melt.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for staying with my story. You're awesome for reviewing :D.
10 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2008 12:11 pm Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
Me, too! Me, too! I'm having such fun! All this talk of bubble baths and pruny fingers and action figures and favorites has me grinning from ear to ear. And that's totally in addition to the fact that I have off from work today AND THIS IS MY OWN KICK-SS CHAPTER! *NanReg spins around in desk chair* Life is so very good. Thank you, Kestrel, for being you : ) Needless to say, I loved this.
Author's Response: Hahaha, I was hoping I'd get a good response from you :D. Thanks so much for reading, and for leaving reviews that make me squeal. Out loud.
Date: May 26, 2008 03:14 am Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
Oh this is just lovely, you've really got Jim and Pam's voices down brilliantly here. Eagerly awaiting more :)
Author's Response: Thank you thank you!! I'm really glad you think so, because that chapter was a little harder to write than the others. I was a little worried. Thanks so much for the review - they leave a pretty big smile on my face :D.
10 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2008 12:34 am Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
I do love this story. I am certainly enjoying it! Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Yay! That's just what I want to hear! Thanks for reading and reviewing - it means the world to me :).
Date: May 25, 2008 11:14 pm Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
My favorite everything...I like that!
Author's Response: Thank you! It felt like something Jim would say. Thanks for sticking with me, LoveFool :D.
10 [Report This]Date: May 25, 2008 11:13 pm Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
Jim is so adorable.
Author's Response: No argument here, haha. Thanks so much for taking the time to review :D.
Date: May 25, 2008 10:38 pm Title: And You Can Have this Heart to Break
Another great chapter! It would be so like Jim to promote Pam's talents to Wallace. So many little details that add to the mood of the story. Pam's shriveled fintertips and the tepid water ... the silly who would you do game ...
Just loved this:
...he finished a little sadly, “You need to tell me what to do to make you stop questioning this, because it’s killing me that I can’t make you see it.”
Author's Response: Vampiric Blood, you always pick up on my favorite details :). Thanks for being such an awesome reaser and for taking the time to review!