10 [Report This]Date: May 24, 2008 07:41 pm Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
Life isn't all fluff & banter. I like this chapter just as it is. I especially liked the bit about the bed and this:
She’d gotten tremendously better at expressing herself and standing up for what she wanted, but there were times when he still had to gauge her moods carefully and watch for tiny details to try and figure out what was going on in her head. It drove him crazy that she tended to go silent during fights, and that there were times she still hesitated to confide in him when she was upset, as though he’d be disappointed in her.
“Hey,” he said softly. “We talked about this. It’s me, remember? I don’t care if you whine or complain or whatever. Just…just let me in, ok?”
Very much in character. I like it!
Author's Response: Oh I'm so glad you liked the part about the bed - I almost left it out because it felt so clunky. I'm doing my best to make the conversations natural and believable. Thanks so much for the review!
Date: May 24, 2008 07:01 pm Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
I trust you with my fragile reader's heart, Kestrel, and I have absolutely no problem if your chapters get even longer!
Author's Response: Haha, I am totally dedicating the next chapter to you, NanReg.
Date: May 24, 2008 04:10 pm Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
Gosh, I could really see this phone call happening. You really captured the characters. I really want to read more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm trying as hard as I can to make these conversations sound as true to the characters as possible.
10 [Report This]Date: May 24, 2008 11:00 am Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
"He could probably get a good night’s rest in chair as long as he had her soft and warm in his arms."
Is this supposed to be "in a chair"?
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Loved this chapter, very real, very sad. Love the Pam vulnerability. Favorite quote: "You could have told me you’d bought Dwight’s beet farm and I probably would have reacted the same way.”
“Actually, I’m pretty sure that would have been an appropriate response.”
Keep writing! Fluff makes the world go round!
Author's Response: Haha, oops. Thanks for catching that. And for the review! I'm so glad you liked that particular line, because I simply cannot resist Dwight jokes.
9 [Report This]Date: May 24, 2008 10:15 am Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
I'm really happy that you decided to continue this piece because I really love it! You seem to encapsulate them in these little conversations that have all the right characterizations plus the reality of being in a long-distance relationship. Just really great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm having a lot of fun writing it, and it's interesting to try to think of what sort of issues they might really be having. Thanks for the review!
Date: May 24, 2008 06:18 am Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
serious stuff is ok as long as they stick together through it ;o) loving the ride nevertheless!
Author's Response: Thanks! If I can keep you reading, then I'm doing my job :).
Date: May 23, 2008 11:51 pm Title: And This is Why My Eyes are Closed
I'll forgive you no matter what chapter you put up. I thought this one was great. And by the way, the whole, "chapters keep getting longer" thing... really doesn't bother me.
Author's Response: Oh Ellie, you make my heart happy.
Date: May 23, 2008 08:35 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes. That shouldn't even be a question. Just keep going.
Author's Response: Will do :).
Date: May 23, 2008 08:27 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes. That shouldn't even be a question. Just keep going.
10 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2008 07:54 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Awww, that's so cute. Please write more. Pleeease? *uses puppy-dog eyes*
Author's Response: Sigh, i don't think I can resist puppy-dog eyes.
Author's Response: Sigh, i don't think I can resist puppy-dog eyes.
Author's Response: Sigh, i don't think I can resist puppy-dog eyes.
Date: May 23, 2008 12:37 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes yes yes yes yes keep going. This is even better than the first chapter, just so brilliant in character that I could practically hear their conversation in my head. Wonderful :)
Author's Response: Oooh, that's just what I was hoping for! I hope I don't disappoint with next chapters.
Date: May 23, 2008 12:03 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
I really like that way this is going... Cute, funny, casual, just like Jim and Pam, but you know more is comming up!
I have burned every meal imaginable at least once, I am easily distracted.So the hamburger helper bit was funny to me! I will be waiting and watching for the next installments!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! And I am so with you on being easily distracted.
Date: May 23, 2008 07:46 am Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes! You keep writing, and I promise I'll keep reading! Keep going! Chapters, chapters and more chapters!
Absolutely loved Jim's description of why Pam is distracting.
“Besides, you gotta make a choice, Beesly. It’s either my cooking skills or my loving skills.” Could the choice be any easier when it comes to Jim Halpert?!
Author's Response: NanReg, you are totally going to spoil me if you keep responding so enthusiastically to everything I post. I'll have to dedicate a chapter to you :D.
10 [Report This]Date: May 22, 2008 09:58 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes, keep going! These are great. Sweet but real.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: May 22, 2008 09:55 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
These were wonderful little conversations! I love the image of Jim's laughter setting off little sunbursts in Pam's stomach. This conversation reminded me of Billy Joel's You're My Home. The room Pam draws is indistinct. It's their co-mingled effects that makes it home. It could be anywhere. Jim makes it home. I like that.
Author's Response: I went and checked the song out after I read your review - I have a soft spot for Billy Joel :). Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: May 22, 2008 09:15 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
The answer is: "Yes, I WILL keep going!"
This banter is totally Jim and Pam and really captures their characters well. I love Jim's explanation as to how he burned the hamburger helper, and the imagery of Pam sketching is really lovely. Continue...please?
Author's Response: Thanks for sticking with me, honeypioneer. You're giving me the motivation I need :).
Date: May 22, 2008 06:36 pm Title: So I Would Choose to be with You
I enjoy the cheese. Such a sweet conversation.
Author's Response: Cheese it is, then. Thanks for the review!
Date: May 22, 2008 04:52 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes, keep going -- but I think you have the title backward -- seems more like Jim is the one doing the waiting.
How pathetic that I have started to hate the summers because I want to see what Jim & Pam are doing!!
Author's Response: Haha, yeah that occurred to me after I posted. Obviously I'll just have to come up with a few more chapters where Pam gets to wait a little :D.rnrnBut I know what you mean. How awesome would it be if they did webisodes of Jim and Pam over the summer?
Date: May 22, 2008 04:14 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
i loved reading about what she was drawing!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really enjoyed writing that in.
Date: May 22, 2008 04:10 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
so sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks! You're awesome for reviewing :).
10 [Report This]Date: May 22, 2008 03:32 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
Yes! Keep going!
Author's Response: Haha, thanks for sticking with me, Ellie. You're a rock star.
Date: May 22, 2008 03:09 pm Title: I Will Share this Room with You
"Maybe I'll keep going?"
Oh... no two ways about it. This is easily one of the cutest post finale fics I've read. I simply adore everything it chooses to be. =)
Author's Response: Thank you, ma'am!
Date: May 22, 2008 01:15 pm Title: So I Would Choose to be with You
Aww, no worries; it was cheesy, but just in the right amount. Great job :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
Date: May 22, 2008 11:39 am Title: So I Would Choose to be with You
Ahh...Halpert babies. Makes me smile...like an idiot.
Author's Response: I know exactly what you mean. Thanks for the review!
Date: May 22, 2008 11:03 am Title: So I Would Choose to be with You
Cheese is good. I don't know how I'm going to get through the summer, so I'm pretty sure Jim will be going out of his ever-lovin' mind. Loved the detail that the velvet box is getting a little worn out -- heck, he's had it a freaking year!!