Date: June 01, 2008 10:30 am Title: make me believe you mean this
I'm really enjoying this story, carbondalien, and shame on me for not reviewing sooner. I love the idea of these two communicating this way - old-fashioned letter writing. So intimate, so romantic - regardless of what is written, but I also think you have the tone of what these letters might be down perfectly! Chatty, friendly, newsy - but with so much more bubbling underneath. Loving the quick updates, too, and hurray for Roy splitting town for a week!
Author's Response: There's just something about letter writing, isn't there? Whatever happened to love letters, anyway? Email and text messages killed romance.
Date: June 01, 2008 09:36 am Title: make me believe you mean this
I've really been enjoying this story. I love the back and forth with the letters and you really have their voices down. The little hints are so great, like Pam saying she's told Maddie all about Jim, how she worked really hard on his painting. I can't help but hope that he does go visit her, Pam kicks Roy to the curb and they live happily ever after in CA. But I'm just a sap. Anyways, keep up the good work and I look forward to reading more!
Author's Response: The letters were tough to do. I wanted to make sure I had the proper tone and subtext going on in each one, so each one took a few edits to get right, even if it was just swapping out one word for another. I'm glad people are liking them (and the whole story overall). :)
Date: June 01, 2008 09:18 am Title: make me believe you mean this
I need more STAT..realy great stuff here. I really hope Jim's bound for the coast.
Author's Response: I've been updating pretty regularly and I don't see that stopping any time soon. I'm glad you're enjoying my little story here. :)
Date: May 31, 2008 09:14 pm Title: am i still your charm, or am i just bad luck?
Really enjoying this. Waiting patiently for Pamela to come to her senses...
Author's Response: Glad you're liking it. I'm waiting for that too. Oh, Pam.
Date: May 30, 2008 11:37 am Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
I wanted to review this story earlier, but I didn't have the time. But I'm really, really enjoying this! I love how Pam asks his opinion on her paintings, because I think that really shows how much she cares about him, and that she knows how much he cares about her.
Keep up the great work!! Your writing's really good!!
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm all blush-y. I'm glad you're enjoying it. :)
Date: May 30, 2008 10:48 am Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
A little bit of plot development, and a little bit of Jammy goodness. All good ingredients in a fanfic chapter.
Author's Response: Why thank you very much. There will be more Jammy goodness coming soon. And, hopefully, plot development. :p
10 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2008 01:56 am Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
yes yes yes, that is EXACTLY what Michael would do in this situation. Also, kudos for using one of my favorite Rilo Kiley songs... going to see them in concert tomorrow, yay!
Author's Response: One, I am insanely jealous you got to see Rilo Kiley. And B, I'm having so much fun with Michael in this story. :)
Date: May 29, 2008 10:24 pm Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
So, I would like to say that I love Rocky Votolato, and I also love your stories. You write Jim's emotions so well. Especially how much him and Pam hold back in their letters. Keep it up!
Author's Response: Rocky V is amazing. Simply amazing. It's been a challenge getting the right mix of revealing/holding back in the letters, but so far I think I'm doing okay. I don't want too much to get through too soon. Thanks for reviewing. :)
Date: May 29, 2008 09:29 pm Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
Getting really good, Mikey Likey!
Author's Response: The ball really starts rolling in the next couple chapters.
Date: May 29, 2008 08:02 pm Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
With love? Now THAT is interesting. Can't wait to see Jim's reaction to that! I am so glad that I have become a devoted reader of this story, because it is definitely worth it! Maybe one of these day's I'll work up some courage to write something of my own, so far all I've posted on here are one challenge and like, 100 reviews. xD Anywho, keep writing, please!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying this little story of mine. I've been plugging away on it for a while, so updates should be regular. :)
Date: May 29, 2008 07:00 pm Title: let's not forget ourselves, good friend
Wow! I can't wait for the next next letter (chapter). :)
8 [Report This]Date: May 29, 2008 06:59 pm Title: please remember all of the things i never got a chance to say
Please tell me Roy is gone and Jim is on the next flight to CA!! j/k.
Great story!
Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it. :)
Date: May 29, 2008 08:11 am Title: they pour out to paper, it's all for you
I needed some good old-fashioned angst this morning. I think it's a great idea for a story. These two obviously don't do well talking in person, so I'm anxious to see what they're able to convey in letters. Hopefully they'll both be able to read between the lines.
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I tried hard with the letters (these two chapters and others as well) for certain spots to have the subtext. Whether Jim or Pam chooses to figure out what the other really means is another story.
Date: May 29, 2008 07:50 am Title: they pour out to paper, it's all for you
This is a really great idea for a fanfic, carbondalien. Of course, it's all about the writing, and you are clearly great at what you do. Keep up the good work. Jim totally writes letters like guys would. You could tell that Jim was trying not to say too much, or reveal too much in that first letter. He didn't want to put his heart on his sleeve for fear of outing himself emotionally. I liked that touch. Well done.
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you very much. Jim's letters are hard to write because you know he just wants to write "OMGZ I LUVS YOO!" (well, sort of...) but he's pretty sure what kind of response he'd get to something like that, so he holds back. It's more about being subtle with him while on the other side Pam likes to be cheery and pretend no tension exists even though she certainly knows better.
Date: May 28, 2008 09:13 pm Title: they pour out to paper, it's all for you
More please! And quick! Sorry...is that too bossy?!
Author's Response: Haha, bossy can be good. More will be coming soon. I already have a few chapters written, but it's the editing and the talking to myself saying "I know you can find another way to say that. A way that's better!" Thanks for reviewing. :)
Date: May 28, 2008 07:28 pm Title: they pour out to paper, it's all for you
Jim, you are NOT falling out of love with Pam. Sit. Stay. Good boy.
The way you had him cross out what he really wanted to say almost made me cry... I will sit here and twiddle my thumbs until the next chapter. =]
Author's Response: Thank you. :) As I was writing the letter, there were parts that I was editing out and I was just like, "Wait. Jim would probably crossing out this stuff, too."
Date: May 28, 2008 07:25 pm Title: i'll do everything i can to keep you by my side
This actually sounds like something that Jenna Fischer would write, lol! Good job, I can't wait to read the next chapter...
Author's Response: It was a little surprising that getting a character's voice in a letter is so much more different than getting a character's voice in dialogue. I hope I did okay with it. Thanks for reviewing. :)
Date: May 27, 2008 07:57 pm Title: everything that keeps me together is falling apart
I am so sad for Jim, but I do like this story. Very good!
Author's Response: I feel bad for roughing him up. I'm glad you like it, thanks for reviewing. :)
10 [Report This]Date: May 27, 2008 02:37 pm Title: everything that keeps me together is falling apart
Even better than the first chapter! As another reviewer said, you have Michael down to a tee/T/tea. Actually, you made every character believeable. He'd never admit it out loud, but I think Jim misses Pam's laughter, heart, and ample bosom even more than Michael.
Author's Response: I'm really glad people are enjoying Michael. He's always a challenge. I'm glad you like the characterization too. That's the one thing I really try to get right, especially with Jim and Pam.
Date: May 27, 2008 02:25 pm Title: everything that keeps me together is falling apart
Cannot wait for more! Write, write, write!
Author's Response: My muse seems to be sticking around, so updates should be regular. Glad you're liking it so far. :)
Date: May 27, 2008 02:22 pm Title: let's not forget ourselves, good friend
Aww, the end is adorable!
LOVE the Michael in this. That is probably the most real Michael that I have read on this whole site. Amazing job! I am reading on...
Author's Response: Thank you! Wow. I'm glad people are enjoying my Michael. He was incredibly fun to write.
Date: May 27, 2008 12:53 pm Title: let's not forget ourselves, good friend
He sniffled. "I'll miss her so much. Pam was more than a receptionist to me. She was also my assistant. The office has lost its heart and the ample bosom that covered the heart. Maybe also the lungs. I'm not really sure where the lungs are. Definitely not the appendix, because that's useless. We still have the appendix - Toby. Useless and full of poison, waiting to explode and kill your happiness.
I loled. A lot.
Author's Response: Haha, I'm glad. I won't lie - I had a lot of fun writing Michael here. Thanks for reviewing. :)
Date: May 27, 2008 04:34 am Title: let's not forget ourselves, good friend
Don't you dare give up on this story. It has all the makings of a great fanfic. You have Michael down to a tee. T? Tea? Whatever, you write him well. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response: Thanks! Michael is always a challenge and I have to really think about his "voice," so I'm glad to hear you think I have him down to a tee/T/tea. :) Thanks for reviewing.
8 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2008 11:11 pm Title: let's not forget ourselves, good friend
This reminds me of the British version, where Dawn and Lee moved to Florida. Good job so far.
Author's Response: I didn't even think of that. Now that I realize it I feel a little silly haha. Anyway, thanks for reviewing and I'm glad you like it so far.
7 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2008 07:45 pm Title: let's not forget ourselves, good friend
Can't wait to see where you take us with this.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. :) Hopefully you'll enjoy the ride.