Date: September 17, 2006 01:04 am Title: Chapter 1
I think your work shows great promise, please keep writing and submitting!
I'm sorry, I know this isn't the right place to comment on this, but since there's nowhere else, I just have to make the statement: Winky, if you were to read every single other review on this entire website, you would find that yours was the only unkind and sarcastic one. This is a place of support and creativity for everyone else. You are alone here.
Date: September 16, 2006 08:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nomadshan, my comment was meant to be sarcastic. "Shakespeare" has come to describe the entire genre, which, clearly, you know nothing of. Get a life.
I'm convinced this author is just one of those giggly teenage girls who writes poems to see what reactions can be illicited.
I like how you changed the formatting
Author's Response: Ya know wut, thanku winky for ur honest comment. I won't say it didn't dampen my spirits, but only for a second, because i wrote that poem for me, and i felt like sharing it, so everyone please stop being upset at winky, cuz his comment helped me to improve, and without mistake and judgement, there can't be any improvement. :P
7 [Report This]Date: September 16, 2006 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
I don't know if it's because I just watched a tape of my aunt speaking at the 9/11 Ground Zero memorial, but this made me tear up. I think the lightness of the phrasing (it is reminiscent of Dr. Seuss or a childhood prayer) belies the depth of the message. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: I think thats wut I was going for. To make it light and rhyme, and never really mention anything in particular, but still be real, and true, and deep. It actually made me cry when I read it over myself. I can't imagine that ever happining to me. Thanks and much love! :D
Date: September 16, 2006 04:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
I found this very touching. I loved it. Honestly. Sad yet beautiful.
Winky - Your comment made no sense considering this had nothing to do with Shakespeare aside from it being in verse. But good job on criticizing someone in a non-constructive way![/Sarcasm]
Author's Response: Thank u! That means so much to me that u not only read my story, but made the effort to comment. I know that I totally sound like a dork, saying thanks and stuff, but no one ever comments me on this kind of stuff, so thanks! :D
Date: September 16, 2006 03:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Whoa, I hope I didn't set a bad precedent with the Green Eggs and Ham comment. That was meant in fun.
Winky, I don't see any signs that bloomsgirl is trying to be Shakespeare specifically. Keep the snark in check, please.
bloomsgirl, I hope you post again soon! Please don't let my remarks or Winky's keep you from writing more.
Date: September 16, 2006 03:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
This makes no sense. Try formatting it like a poem, and stop pretending to be Shakespeare. You can't compete, darling.
Author's Response: I'm sorry, I didn't mean to try to be Shakespear, I just like poem and rhymes. If I offended u, I totally didn't mean to.
6 [Report This]Date: September 16, 2006 03:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Consider adding line breaks that emphasize the "verse" aspect of your fic.
Also, sorry, but I giggled at "could not, would not". It reminded me of Green Eggs and Ham.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, u have no idea how special this makes me feel, and it makes me want to write more on here. No one ever compliments my writing, probably cuz I never share, but this makes me think I might have to start. Much love! :D