10 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2008 11:32 am Title: Chapter 1
I just got a chance to read this story, and I request a sequel please! I love Happy!Toby, so please write some more Kelly/Toby!
Author's Response: Thank you. I love Happy Toby too. I posted the sequel a few days ago and it's called Many More Cupcakes. Hope you enjoy that one as well. Thanks again!
Date: July 21, 2008 05:15 am Title: Chapter 1
I can't believe I missed this... it was great. off to read the sequel!
luchy
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: July 14, 2008 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story is wonderful! Like one of the reviews above me said, it made Kelly (and Toby) into a real person, and not just a collection of girly shrieks. Also, Kelly/Toby? Honestly, a great pairing, and the development of their relationship here (and in your other Kelly/Toby stories, which I also enjoyed) is fantastic. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think they're a great pairing too and I really enjoy writing them. I'll post the sequel in a week or so.
Date: July 14, 2008 11:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Nice job. I like how Kelly went into this relationship more in stages and with more than thought than we've ever seen her do anything. It was nice to see some happiness for Toby, too. It was sad when they had him cross the line into creepy; it's nice to read an alternative to that.
Author's Response: Thank you! I think if Kelly were to put a lot of thought into anything (besides shopping or celebrities) it would be winning over a man any way she knew how. rnrnAnd about Toby. I'm sure it's pretty obvious from my writing and everything, but I still love the guy. And until I learn otherwise I'm fanwanking that the poor guy's having some kind of mental break rather than just being flat out creepy. But it's very nice to write this alternate happy ending for him. Makes me happy.
10 [Report This]Date: July 14, 2008 12:38 am Title: Chapter 1
That was awesome! I'm awestruck! Thanks for writing Kelly like a human, for once. She's more than the sum of her awesomes and totallys, and writers (probably because she's hardly ever the focus of stories) hardly ever get that. Your Kelly sounded more like Mindy sounds in the "things I bought that I love" blog. (Which makes her seem really real to me since the Kelly character is an exaggerated version of Mindy and arguably her shopping blog is an exaggerated version of that side of her too.)
Your Toby was also right on. Sadder and older and higher brow than Kelly but not mean or judgmental at all.
And I love that you showed how smug and snide Jim can occasionally be towards Kelly without making him so condescending that you can't stand him. Also the bar conversation definitely redeemed him.
I appreciated the way that you focused on dialogue and action without getting too caught up in overwrought inner monologue type stuff. The timeline flowed nicely and seemed natural too. I feel like there wasn't any excess here.
Anyway, it's clear that I really liked everything, I'll stop. Thanks for posting! More would be very welcome.
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so, so much. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I love writing Toby and Kelly and am very happy that you think I was able to do Kelly justice. And I'll post the sequel within a week or so. It's even longer than this fic.