Date: August 19, 2008 10:33 am Title: Chapter 5 Smile
I've gotten caught up in this, too! You're killing me with this Jim/Emily thing. So touching. Hang in there, Jim!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review. Emily has done a good thing, I think. *grin*
Date: August 16, 2008 07:31 pm Title: Chapter 4 Well You Needn't
OMG great story!
Author's Response: Gosh, thanks. Y'all keep me writing.
Date: August 16, 2008 07:14 pm Title: Chapter 4 Well You Needn't
I'm so nervous. You really know how to crank up the tension!
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm trying. LOL
Date: August 16, 2008 02:43 pm Title: Chapter 4 Well You Needn't
Darn it! I can't believe Pam is not even considering that Jim is acting this way because of her, or at the very least because of a bout of depression.
I hope her Mom clues in, or Pam's going to be too late. You won't let that happen, right?
It was really sad to read his phone call with his Mom. The fact that he actually thinks that she would use his nest egg to go on a cruise is more evidence that he is very deeply immersed in a well of darkness.
Author's Response: I kind of agonized about whether Pam would consider that he would be depressed about her, but I decided she wouldn't be that self confident, if you understand what I mean. She made need a little help to really entertain that as a possibility. rnrnYes, Jim is in a dark place for sure.rnrnThanks so much for your thoughtful comments and feedback, and for reading, much appreciated.
Date: August 15, 2008 03:36 pm Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
Ok, now that Pam knows he's in trouble, I feel better about it all. But she better get a move on!
A nice twist, usually it's Jim to Pam's rescue...
Author's Response: Yup jkfan, she had best get a move on. A guy like Jim shouldn't be taken for granted, do you think?rnrnI appreciate the heck out of the comments, thanks for reading.
Date: August 15, 2008 08:47 am Title: Chapter 3 Feeling Good
great story!
B
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, I truly appreciate the encouragement.
Date: August 15, 2008 07:36 am Title: Chapter 3 Feeling Good
You're killing me, jazzfan. This is so well written, but it hurts!
Author's Response: Yeah, Jim is doing it kind of tough. Thanks so much for reading and hang in there, I really appreciate the review.
Date: August 15, 2008 07:27 am Title: Chapter 2 A Child
I'm feeling so anxious and a bit broken-hearted, but I'm riveted by this story. Lovely imagery in this chapter with Jim's interaction with Emily and "Dwight."
Date: August 15, 2008 06:43 am Title: Chapter 3 Feeling Good
hmmmm very interesting...
Author's Response: I hope it gets even more interesting, thanks for reading! (love your nic, btw)
9 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2008 05:24 am Title: Chapter 3 Feeling Good
OK, now I feel a bit relieved. Gotta leave for work so no time to leave a detailed review. You're doing a really good job with this, Jazzfan.
Author's Response: Thanks very much for reading and reviewing, Vampiric Blood, but I wouldn't take a deep breath just yet. *grin* rnI appreciate your comments, (either positive or negative) I'm trying to learn. I was just introduced to The Office this summer, btw, and these great characters have really dug into my gut.
8 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2008 05:17 am Title: Chapter 2 A Child
Oh my God. Was this the thing that prevented Jim from using the pistol? Now it's been taken care of? Pam better get her ass in gear!
This is a wonderfully different premise. I really like it. Love how he names the squirrel Dwight! And how sweet he is with Emily. That seems very Jim to me.
Date: August 14, 2008 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
There's nothing I hate more than sad Jim, and yours is way beyond sad. But I can't see him doing anything with that pistol because, somewhere deep inside, doesn't he still harbor some hope that it's not over with Pam?
Author's Response: Well, there's no denying there's a sad Jim in this story. But the story isn't over yet. I really do appreciate your comments. You might try the second chapter and see if you feel any better about it. Thanks a bunch!
Date: August 13, 2008 08:23 am Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
OMG - this is scary. Wow -- way to take a risk! More soon, we hope?
Author's Response: Thanks for your comments, MCC,it's so great to get feedback. I hope to have this complete in by next week, and I've submitted chapter 2.
Date: August 12, 2008 07:19 pm Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
Well, I see why you chose your pen name!
You're right – listening to the song definitely adds to the mood of the story. I read it first at work (I didn't really say that, did I?) where I can't get to websites such as that. Lord knows why MTT isn't blocked. Sometimes I wish it was!
Anyway, I digress. Your premise is really interesting. You certainly got my attention with the cold steel of the pistol! I'm looking forward to seeing what is the one thing that holds Jim back from using it. Looking forward to seeing how your Jim digs himself out of this dark, dark place. (He WILL, won't he?)
Author's Response: I'm shocked, I tell you shocked, Vampiric Blood. I'm sure you're the first person to ever read this forum at work. For shame. LOLrnrnThanks very much for your comments, it's great to hear feedback, I figured the gun might be a surprise. I never quite bought that Jim just picked up and moved on so well in the series. rn(Are you sure Jim is going to dig out? 'Cause Jim's not sure.) {{suspense}}
7 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2008 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
WOAH! Loved the song but you really freaked me out with the pistol.
Please don't go there.
Author's Response: I'm not sure where I'm going, to tell the truth. Maybe it depends on what songs I'm listening to. *grin* rnrnPlease keep reading.
Date: August 12, 2008 04:38 pm Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
Very dark, but I liked your writing style. I'm adding this to my favorites so I'm sure I don't miss your updates.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading, I really appreciate your comments. I think story will fall out fairly quickly.
Date: August 12, 2008 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 1 - In the Wee Small Hours
Wow...most definitely dark but really well written, jazzfan. The last few paragraphs were shocking to me, so heartbreaking. Very interested in where you take this.
BTW, thanks for the music suggestion. Listened to the first link, and it's lovely. Off to explore Kurt Elling's music...
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the encouragement. I was listening to "You Don't Know What Love Is" the other day, and it hit me, Gawd, this song was written for Jim Halpert after Casino Night. I started writing and this was where it lead. I'm glad you like Elling, he's amazing. rnrnI have a lot to learn about writing, and I really appreciate the review and the forum.