Date: October 16, 2008 09:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome! I love to see what people do with challenges, and this was so much fun! Poor Toby, nothing ever works out quite right for him does it? I really loved your detail about Jim moving to Pam's side...a natural move, but it does suggest that he hasn't forgotten about Toby laying his hand on Pam's knee!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I like it when I get an idea for a challenge, and this one just popped right out at me. I'm glad you found it and enjoyed!
Date: September 22, 2008 03:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh man. After reading this I don't know how you could possibly do any other scenario. It's made for Toby and Michael. So perfect. I could actually see this filmed. It would be a spectacular way to bring Toby back for an episode. Kick ass.
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! It is sometimes fun to post a story without showing you first, just to see your reactions here! Heh. And, of course, thank you for commenting.
Date: September 21, 2008 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Nice job, and great Michael characterization.
(I have to admit I've begun to sympathize with Michael's view on Toby at least a leettle tiny smidgin since he "helped" Ryan screw Jim on the performance warning thing.)
Author's Response: Yeah, I know, but I'm inclined to cut him some slack. Pam just inspires that sort of craziness, apparently! Thank you so much for reading and commenting! :)
Date: September 21, 2008 06:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw, poor Toby. The proverbial kicked puppy dog. Nicely done, lis.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I had fun writing this (ensemble pieces are challenging but fun), but I guess I was pretty hard on poor hangdog Toby. Thanks, again!
8 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2008 06:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so... like something Michael would do. How sad for Toby to be so looking forward to seeing Pam again only to have that familiar stab of emotion as he heard Pam giggle at something Jim said. And that last line... Nice job!
Author's Response: You know, I didn't really realize how melancholy this piece is until I looked at some of the reviews, including yours. I was pretty mean to Toby, wasn't I? Ah, well, I think the show is at its best when it mixes the funny and the cringe-worthy, so maybe I hit it pretty close to the mark? Hee. Thanks for writing and commenting!
Date: September 21, 2008 09:37 am Title: Chapter 1
Aw, Toby. I like how you included a perfectly in-character little taste of the characters, in how they each reacted to seeing him. Dwight's was perfect, as was Creed's...and somehow, in Michael-think, telling everyone he was dead makes perfect sense ;-) Thanks for this bite-size snack!
Author's Response: Thank you! I think the characters are so well-drawn on the show that it is (relatively) easy to gauge how they would each react in various situations. Guessing how each would contribute in a group scene like this is one of my favorite writing exercises. I'm glad you enjoyed, thank you!
Date: September 21, 2008 07:56 am Title: Chapter 1
First off, perfect, realistic use of that prompt. Michael telling everyone Toby died, yeah, that seems believable.
And
“I do not believe you are allowed on company premises, being a former employee and also deceased.”
That line should be illegal its so funny!
Author's Response: Don't outlaw the funny! Thank you for the kind comments. Great challenge!
9 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2008 07:19 am Title: Chapter 1
Poor Toby. “I do not believe you are allowed on company premises, being a former employee and also deceased.” Great line and great job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I had a lot of fun writing it. And writing bizarre things for Dwight to say is always a pleasure. Thank you again!