10 [Report This]Date: November 05, 2011 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
You need to write more of these. There could be so many first times. First time they meet each other's parents would be really sweet. Jim would be so nervous and want to impress her family. This was both funny AND cute.
Date: May 05, 2010 09:25 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
wow i was reading the reviews i CANT believe i havent review this before, i've read it like a hundred times. and i cant get tired of it! i live this kind of fics. not so much story just fluff and sexy stuff...
your web fan..delia
Author's Response: Awww Delia. Thanks so much honey, that means a lot that you reviewed this :) xx
Date: October 15, 2009 04:32 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
hey, i am so eager for you continue the story i signed up for AIM! wow, i can't really believe i did that. anyway i'm: clairestar816. i'm ready to help now!
Author's Response: Hey. I'm still working on that story... I kinda got sidetracked with Ellie lol ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 14, 2009 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
okay, so i've read this before, but who cares. this was silly and sensual, what a great and challenging to write combination! great job, this is really well done.
okay, that was just to get you to like me. now what i really want is for you to follow up on your idea you mentioned in your author's notes about making this a series of firsts. PLEASE, i'm begging you keep going, this is awesome!
or at least consider it, i really am pretty nice. or at least most people think so. and i you want a beta for continuing this, or anything at all i'd be glad to help out!
Author's Response: I definitely would love to write more of these, but I need someone to run through some ideas with someone first, so if you have AIM or MSN then add me. I'd love to brainstorm :)
AIM: SnoWhiteSally
MSN: cowboyfriend@hotmail.com
9 [Report This]Date: July 03, 2009 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
I really like how they're both still are able to be playful with each other in bed. That last paragraph was really good, especially what Jim said at the end. It's both sweet and sexy! I have a suggestion: how about the first time Pam draws Jim naked? Or any scenario where clothing is optional ;o) I'm not picky.
Author's Response: Ooh I really like that idea. I bet he'd be all shy and Sexy. I may play around with that. Thanks for reviewing my older fics! Means a lot to me Xxx
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2009 01:08 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
Amazing! Wow! Incredible! So adorable and cutesy! I loved every bit of it! More please! ;)
Author's Response: Aw yay thank you. I'm really happy so many people liked this story, I was really worried about posting it, especially as so many first fics have been done before and I have loved every one of them. I didn't want to be the person to ruin that for everyone lol. rnrnI am trying to think of some more firsts we haven't seen -)rnrnThanks for reviewing!!!
Date: March 24, 2009 07:03 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
Well...you could do what happens when the pants come off...and then the underwear...and then the good stuff. Teehee! =)
Seriously, continue. Like, right now. I'll even beta for you, if you want one/don't already have one. But this deserves to be finished!!!
Author's Response: I'd love for you to beta for me. I've just started getting in to writing again and I have a super big fic planned, but am so nervous about it - I thought I'd start with the cute fluffy stuff hehe =)rnrnYour fics are awesome btw, having you beta for me would be AN HONOR <3
Date: February 12, 2009 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
This is so sweet-please please continue!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I have been trying to think of some cute firsts for them. Any suggestions :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
Hey btw are you going to continue this? I think you should because you have a very firm grasp on their dynamic and it would be interesting what you came up with.
Author's Response: I really want to yeah =) I'm trying to think of some other firsts to write =) Thank you so much, your comments mean a lot, especially for a newbie =)
9 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 05:34 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
Really like the idea. you should def right more. I can see where you're coming from with the hoodie, like I'm sure a lot of other people can...or have... in some cases :) Keep writing
Author's Response: Thanks so much JLFan =)
Date: October 11, 2008 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
There's things about this that I like, and things about it that I like less.
I think my favorite line is "her ridiculously-placed coffee table," which is a really good way to describe an awkward piece of furniture. My coffee table is also in a really ridiculous place, so I empathize with Pam on this one. :)
Some of the things I like less-- there's several places in this story that you make pretty big grammatical errors. Some sentences don't have periods at the end, for instance, and the way you use quotation marks is incorrect. Stuff like that really takes me out of the story, and it's not hard to fix.
Also, Jim said "Pam" or "Beesly" or some variation of that pretty much every time he talked. Maybe you could vary that up a bit more?
All in all, a good first attempt. With a little more polishing, it could be even better.
Author's Response: I appreciate your comments. I sent this to a few people who reasured me the grammar was correct, so I'll be having words with those beta's ;)rnrn
Date: October 11, 2008 01:16 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
I LOVE this! Ditto nandance's comment. The dynamic between them is so really and the awkwardness is very real.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Like I said, it's my first Office fic, and I was so nervous writing this, as there are SO many fabulous writers out there, so I appreciate all your reviews. I hope to be writing more =)
10 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 12:24 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
Well, I'm just going to write and rate one more time to hopefully cancel out flonkerton's comment, 'cause really? It's Pam touching the drawstring on Jim's hoodie. That same action probably appears in dozens of storys here.
Anyway... Again, thought the story was sweet. The innocence of it is very endearing :D
Author's Response: Thanks. I really appreciate it so much. I was shocked when she said I’d stolen a line from her fic, because I’d honestly been looking at this picture of John Krasinski (http://img210.imagevenue.com/img.php?image=70865_01269_122_515lo.jpg) and the idea of him in a hoodie got me all hot and tingly, so I just pictured Pam playing with the strings, like I would do if John gave me the chance lol. Thanks SO much for reviewing and rating though. It’s made me really want to try and write some more =)
10 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2008 12:03 pm Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
Very cute story. Looking forward to more :)
Author's Response: Thank yoooou. I hope to write more =)
Date: October 11, 2008 05:36 am Title: Chapter 1 - First Time Pam sees Jim naked
What an adorable fic this is! I love how simple and almost child-like you made their first time seem - I think it's very in-character with Jim/Pam. Really good job! I hope to see more from you
Author's Response: Thank you so much. At first I was worried it would seem too child like, but I can just totally see the whole fic played out in my mind and knew it was perfect for them. I think Jim would play along with Pam to help relax her =) Thank you again for reviewing, it makes me all warm and fuzzy inside hehe :)