Date: January 31, 2010 10:10 am Title: Salt
I am so glad that you continued this story because it's such a fascinating glimpse in the childhood of two of our favorite TV characters. And you're so great at giving them personalities that aren't too far from what I would think Jim and Pam were like at those ages. Does that make sense?
My favorite parts of this chapter: the salt in the lemonade (poor Joan & Larissa!) and the double dare (so funny!).
Great job!
Date: January 28, 2010 07:58 pm Title: Go west, young man?
Thank goodness! I'm so glad he isn't going to San Fran. And I don't know why they don't just SEE that they're in love with each other. Hopefully NYC will bring that out finally!
Author's Response: Well, New York can be a very romantic town... or it can make you want to punch people in the face (I grew up there).
Date: January 28, 2010 06:50 pm Title: Go west, young man?
=] yay!
Date: January 28, 2010 04:07 pm Title: Smelden and the Muffin
I love your story, but I have one complaint with it. I wish you would update more! haha! It makes my day one billion times better when I click on the 'most recent' tab and see a new 'In My Life, I Love You More.' They're absolutely wonderful!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I usually wait to write the next chapter until I've gotten a decent number of reviews, because I've made some tweaks based on feedback. For example, this last chapter originally (intentionally) a lot more ambiguous about whether Jim decided to go with Karen to California (in fact, it was going to end with him not having made a decision), but people seemed to really want her out of the picture, so I let him decide that he needed to stay, even though he knew he'd lose Karen and it would hurt. So basically, the faster I get reviews, the faster I update. But honestly, not in the annoying "I won't update until I get 10 reviews per chapter" thing. Of course, there are some things that I have pretty set in stone but there have been a lot of minor tweaks based on feedback. Thanks so much for reading and I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Date: January 28, 2010 03:28 pm Title: Go west, young man?
You did GREAT with this version! I didn't get to see the prior one but I really like this one. Loved the Dunder Muppets and that Pam is taking care of Jim in your version. Liked the internal thoughts. Looking forward to New York!
Author's Response: Thanks! The previous chapter got lost in the hardware breakdown but it's back up now and I'd love to know what you think of it.
Date: January 28, 2010 06:23 am Title: She was on fire and wild and American
the story got lost with this chapter, too. :o(
Author's Response: Okay, it's back up, along with the one before that! Three of my chapters got lost, but they're all reposted now. I'd love your perspectives.
Date: January 28, 2010 01:57 am Title: Go west, young man?
I think you definitely did ok with this one! Having said that, I can't wait until these two kids realise that they lurrvve each other and we get to the fun stuff :D I'll keep avidly checking for updates :)
Author's Response: Yeah, they're a little dumb, aren't they?
Date: January 27, 2010 09:14 pm Title: Go west, young man?
Where the story? I don't see it hhmmmn weird
Author's Response: I don't know what happened, but it's back up. Hope to hear your thoughts on this chapter!
Date: January 26, 2010 07:28 am Title: Go west, young man?
You made me cry! He's going to California! You're killing me! :( LOL Such a great chapter, I don't like to cry but seriously this was really good.
Author's Response: You're the second person to say Jim's going! I must have really messed up because I thought it was so clear that even though it's a tough decision and there's no win win win here, he decided that going to California wasn't right for him. So I went back and put in a few changes that will hopefully clarify things. I wouldn't have known it was confusing without the reviews, so thanks!
Date: January 26, 2010 12:17 am Title: Go west, young man?
I usually don't like AUs that are so...AU! And yet, I'm not sure why, maybe because you're characterization is right on the money and the development is perfect but I'm hooked on this. I love it. I can't wait to see where it goes. And it may even convince me to read other AUs. So yay!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I know people often have mixed feelings on AU's but I'm trying to make it as believable to Jim and Pam as I can, so I really appreciate the compliment.
Date: January 25, 2010 08:34 pm Title: Go west, young man?
Aww, that was sweet, yet I'm confused. Did Jim go with Karen? I think he did, yet I'm not sure and I don't really want to believe it. GET JIM AND PAM TOGETHER, PRETTY PLEASE WITH A CHERRY ON TOP! Thank you, andtheivy... in advance...
Author's Response: Did I screw up somewhere? I thought it was clear that Jim decided he was not going to go with Karen. Yes, it would hurt to lose her, but...
“…but,” continued Jim, “I can’t go. I just…I can’t.”
It was too far. Not just too far from Scranton, but too far from…home.
Home, in this case, mostly meaning Pam.
And Pam waits to tell him about her job in NY because she doesn't want him to make his decision to go there because he feels like he has to look out for her. So she tells him after he's decided that he's not going to go to California. As she says to him, the decision had to be about him.
Jim struggles here, for sure. There's no win win win situation. But no, he is not going to California.
The one chapter I make no attempt to cryptically cliffhanger and it still comes across as mysterious....
Date: January 24, 2010 05:54 pm Title: Jimmy Pammy Boat
Went back to read this because it's just so cute, the image of Jim and Pam as toddlers, playing together. You did a wonderful job writing the way baby Jim and baby Pam interacted. There's the way babies tend to hoard all the toys and not share, the way if one cries, the other tends to do the same. I was smiling the whole time I read this.
So good! And the last two sentences gives me hope that this story will end the way I want it to.
Date: January 24, 2010 05:11 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
love this...and pam's reaction omg so funny. =]
Author's Response: Thanks! My favorite line to write was Jim's "you were surprised that I have a penis?" I was totally picturing the look with the cocked head (no pun) and slight squint, like "really? really?"
Date: January 23, 2010 07:38 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
Sh*t, so close. I'm not at all surprised that tension between them exploded, even if nothing happened (and please god why not???). Ugh I really hope they get together, the waiting is killing me.
Author's Response: That's coming. And when it does, it is going to kick your ass. So...stay sharp.
Actually, I have no idea whether any asses, or other body parts, are going to be kicked. I just wanted to say that. And in lieu of actually meaning "stay sharp," I'll say "please keep reading and reviewing."
I hope I can leave you smiling and satisfied.
Date: January 21, 2010 06:00 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
you. are. a. TEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
and i love it. *sexy eyes*
Author's Response: So I've been told. *Flutter* Though at times there's been another word that prefaces the word "tease" and it's generally not meant as a compliment.
For the record, I don't believe I am one.
Date: January 21, 2010 12:32 pm Title: She was on fire and wild and American
Nooooooooo!! Pam!!! Why did you run away?? Go back and finish what you started!!
*shakes fist at antheivy* See what you've made me do? Yelling at a fictional character in a fictional story. *sigh*
Another great chapter. I am very much enjoying the way you're writing Jim and Pam's relationship. The way they're navigating through this best-friends-but-feels-like-more thing. And it's becoming apparent their attraction to each other. Also, please get rid of Toby and Karen stat! Stat means now. Do it! 5-4-3-2...
Although this chapter didn't leave me smilin' & satisfy (I blame Pam!), I will keep coming back for more.
Author's Response: Yeah, she didn't really leave Jim smiling and satisfied either. He had to take matters into his own hands.
Date: January 21, 2010 11:26 am Title: She was on fire and wild and American
OMG!! The 'incident' part was just ... OMG! This is a great chapter! I really heard the jealousy in Pam's voice when she spoke about Jim loving Karen. You've captured their characters so perfectly here, it's such a great read! And ick, Toby. Good stuff, can't wait for more!
Date: January 21, 2010 10:55 am Title: She was on fire and wild and American
Lol, lol. I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this! I loved this!
That was funny, um... interesting... and did I mention hilarious??? I LOVED that last bit on the roof, "it's... it's... BIG!" I seriously almost dropped my computer, that was hilarious!
Okay, really, I promise I'm not that sick, but that was just hilarious.
Can't wait for the next chapter, and go away Karen and Toby! and Meredith, too. YUCK YUCK YUCK!
Author's Response: Oh no, I like good JAMporn too. No shame in it.
Date: January 17, 2010 07:12 pm Title: Smelden and the Muffin
When you update, I get a warm, fuzzy feeling. haha Not joking. These are fabulous. The first few were okay, but these last ones (teen years and up) are making me laugh, and aw at how cute they are.You should update more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I admit I have a tendency to not update until I get a fair number of reviews, because I keep hoping to see how people are liking it. There have been some outline adjustments based on reader wishes. Nothing too major, but some little tweaks here and there. Hope to hear from you again. Thanks for reading!
Date: January 17, 2010 01:05 pm Title: Brownie Mix and Bathtubs
ha. i used to do the "shaving" thing with my dad! and i'm a girl.... and i loved the whole "why does jimmy have funny stuff?" part. ohhh the innocence of kids.
Date: January 17, 2010 07:25 am Title: Here's to propriety: may it rest in peace
Oh man! Poor Jim! Update soon, now that I found this story, I can't wait to see where you take it. I really like that they were both thinking Angela and Dwight would be good together, I thought that was really funny! Really like it, for me, even though it's AU, I still feel like it's very much in character.
Date: January 15, 2010 06:10 pm Title: Here's to propriety: may it rest in peace
Awww shoot. I had a feeling Karen would be introduced and Roy would make another appearance. Of course, I'm still holding out that they could be each other's firsts but this obvious tension building will combust at some point right?
Author's Response: I'm still deciding! Several possibilities of how it could all play out and I'm not sure yet which I'm going to go for.
And keep in mind that each chapter takes place in a different year. So there could be a lot that happens between them that we're not seeing...
Hey, maybe they already slept together.
No, I wouldn't do that to y'all!
Date: January 15, 2010 05:24 pm Title: Here's to propriety: may it rest in peace
'Fuck.' Seriously, "fuck" is how you end this wonderful chapter! With the pepperoni pizzas (which made me incredibly hungry! arg....). Wow, that was a great chapter, but the last line just made me start laughing so much because I wasn't expecting it. At. All. To. Quote. ish. Jim.
And really, Angela's first line just made me practically drop my computer. Hilarious! And I definitely thought at some point they would think to introduce Angela and Dwight to each other. Good thinking! I can't wait to read the next chapter and thanks so much for the prompt updates lately. It's great!
Date: January 15, 2010 05:24 pm Title: Here's to propriety: may it rest in peace
Good Chapter. I love AU stories that bring all the characters in, especially in funny ways. I love the protection they both have for each other with a hint of jealousy from both. Please update soon.
Date: January 15, 2010 05:21 pm Title: Here's to propriety: may it rest in peace
omg they need to have sex already!
and it's true, picking off meat does taint the rest of the pizza.
Author's Response: Yep, agreed. I've been a vegetarian for 17 years and people telling me to "eat around the meat" makes me want to smack them.
Also agreed on them needing to have sex. Just haven't decided yet...