10 [Report This]Date: August 11, 2009 10:01 pm Title: Getting There
Another wonderful chapter! Pam's interactions with Ellie were very sweet, and I love nervous-date!Jim so much! Looking forward to the next update :)
Author's Response: You're my 100th review eeep :)rnrnThanks so mucb for you're awesome review I_Still_Believe, I'm really glad you enjoyed this chapter and nervous date Jim :)
Date: August 11, 2009 08:46 pm Title: Getting There
Still with you and I'm loving the progress thus far.
Loved the ending to this chapter...
Hope to see an update again soon!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much for taking the time to review, it means a lot to me. I'm already working on the next part, and I hope to be a little quicker this time :)
Date: August 11, 2009 08:04 pm Title: Getting There
OMG I love this fic but TEASE! They were thisclose! I'm so glad Pam and Ellie bonded, they were so cute. Can't wait for more and hopefully a REAL kiss.
Author's Response: Mwahahahaa evil is my middle name - it's not really, but wouldn't that be sad and unfortunate if it was lol. rnrnSo glad you're enjoying this and that you're looking forward to the next chapter :) Your reviews mean so much to me, so thanks :)
Date: August 11, 2009 07:00 pm Title: Getting There
AWWWWWW
(that means YAY!! :D)
SO Adorable!!
Author's Response: Eeeep thanks babes, glad you liked it :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 11, 2009 06:56 pm Title: Getting There
Oh, how I love this chapter. Sooo cute. I love the banter between Jim and Pam, and Ellie's cuteness with Pam made my heart go splodey. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I couldn't do this without you and I can't thank you enough for like - not killing me :)rnrnGlad I made your heart go BOOM :)
Date: August 10, 2009 07:30 am Title: It's all about the woo!
I miss this story.... Do you think there is gonna be an update soon?
I don't wanna seem impatient, but I'm dying here wondering how the rest of this date went!!!
Author's Response: Hey - I'm almost done with the next chapter, so keep your eyes opeeeeeeeeeen :) I'm so happy you miss it, if that sounds weird I'm sorry lol <3
Date: August 06, 2009 12:14 pm Title: You're three thousand miles from the place you once called home
This story is developing so nicely. And even though Jim is nervous and awkward, it's those little gestures like not letting go of Pam's hand or unconsciously running his thumb over the back of her knuckles that shows us how his feelings are developing. And Pam...well, she seems more than ready to let Jim know how she feels. And oh, I really liked that whole exchange between Jim and Dorothy at Wegmans. You're definitely pulling me into this story. Great job!
Author's Response: Yay thank you so much for your lovely comments, I'm so happy you're enjoying it and being sucked in :prnrnI definitely think I might bring Dorothy back - Wegman's is his local grocery store after all ;)rnrnIt's nice to see you picking up all the small little things, like the hand holding and stuff. In my head I have written Pam as I think she would have been had she not have been with Roy. I definitely think we'd have seen a bravel Pam back then :)
9 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2009 06:17 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
I love Dorothy! Maybe she could pop up again in a few chapters, with some more advice? The banter and akwardness are great and really true to the Jim and Pam characters. It's like a little glimpse into what they could have been. Hope we are going to see Ellie next chapter!
(We do have a few mother/child spaces in the US, but it's just in front of specialty baby stores.)
Author's Response: I was actually thinking about bringing Dorothy back, I have some really cue ideas for her over the next couple of chapters :) Ellie is definitely back, I'm writing her now aw YAAAAAAY.rnrnSooooo happy you are enjoying this. I cannot express how much your reviews mean to me!
Date: July 27, 2009 07:12 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
How cute was Jim getting all worried about making things perfect for his non-date with Pam. And the fact that he thought of picking up Ellie's favorite food? Best Dad Ever!
My favorite part of this chapter was the awkwardness of their first date. I love that they're being honest with each other. It's both endearing and sexy. And you had to go and stopped at the good part!
As always...looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm so happy you are still enjoying this. Hopefully I can have the next part up in the next couple of dayssssssss :)
Date: July 25, 2009 05:20 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
This was such a sweet chapter. I'm looking forward to the rest!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much for taking the time to review and let me know you're enjoying this =) Writing the next part now yaaay!
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2009 02:21 pm Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
How cute was it when Jim refused to let go of Pam's hand? Too cute, lemme tell you! And their bantering? It's so obvious that they're falling for each other already! There's just something so sweet and sexy about how they're just sitting there and talking while holding hands. Loved it!
That's really funny about Pam being banned from the laundromat! What a troublemaker ;o)
I love the way their dynamic is subtly changing now that Jim shared his background with Pam. The way they're acting around each other, all flirty and cute, and of course, Jim asking Pam to come over!! Way to go!!
Oh yeah...since you didn't mind when I did it before...there's a typo in this sentence, "...walking over and throwing his messenger back over the back of his chair." Shouldn't it be bag instead of back?
Now I'm torn between reading the next chapter right away or wait until you're finished w/ the 7th one. Dang it, Sally!!
One last thing: I think it's so great that you're basing Ellie off on the two children of your friend. I can see why you're so attached to this character you've created. Thank you so much for sharing something so personal!
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2009 02:19 pm Title: As The Story Goes
Wow...that was a very intense chapter. Great job on giving us the whole story behind Chloe and Jim's history with her. You didn't skimmed on the details but instead giving the information that put the whole situation of why Jim is a single father into context. The scenario you wrote of Chloe and her severe depression sounds very credible and sad.
Another thing I loved about this chapter is how Jim finally found someone who he could talk to about his situation. While he has his family to talk to, it's not the same as having Pam to talk to, I'm sure. His anger and sense of betrayal at the fact that Chloe just left was also very well written, implied as he told Pam the story.
Also...yay to the hand holding already! Cute way to end the chapter :o)
Author's Response: Thank you Thank you Thank you! I did a lot of research on depression and I know a lot of people with it, so thank you for saying it was realistic, that really meant a lot to me!rnrnThat's exactly what I was going for with Jim finding Pam - he didn't realise just how much he missed having a best friend, you know? And he's found that with Pam already aw!!!rnrnThanks again <3
Date: July 23, 2009 12:44 pm Title: The Telling Of The Tale.
OMG...Jim giving Ellie a bath is one of the cutest things I've ever read. I was smiling as I read that part. Then I got excited when I got to the part about Pam being jealous because she thought Jim was married. Then I smiled again because I thought that's a good sign that she likes him more than that ;o)
Also, that part where Jim sang "You Are My Sunshine" to Ellie? That should come w/ a warning. Cuteness overdose!! It made me grin so wide!
I really love the way you're writing Jim as a single father. The loneliness he must've felt that he has no one to share the joy and the sorrow of having a great kid like Ellie but at the same time, struggling to be both her mom AND her dad to make sure all her needs (physically and emotionally) are met. I'm sure it's very hard to be a single parent and you wrote it so well!
I'm super happy to have Jim and Pam finally sitting down to talk and get the back story of Ellie's mother.
Can't wait til ch.4 when I'm home :o)
Author's Response: Eeeeeeeeee, I am so excited you're reading this and enjoying it so much. The part with Jim giving Ellie a bath almost killed me writing, so I'm so happy you ppreciated the cutness =)rnrnYour reviews are amazing and I want to squish you so bad.
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2009 12:09 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
Aww, this was so sweet. Jim was all nervous and self-conscious. I loved that pam was more sure of herself and what she wanted, and more blunt with him. It was a refreshing change! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much for your comments babes, means a lot!!!!
Date: July 23, 2009 06:54 am Title: It's all about the woo!
Ok, first, for the record, mother-and-baby parking spaces are very common at supermarkets in my neck o' the woods, too.
Now, down to business--such a good chapter! The awkward sexiness was awesome. Really looking forward to the next chap. Don't keep me waiting, missy! ; )
Author's Response: Ohhh yay. It caused a little bit of a row on my friend's list as to whether or not they exist in the US - so I'm glad you know what I meant lol.rnrnI'm already working on the next chapter right now eeep, so hopefully it wont be such a long wait =)rnrnSo happy you're still with me and still enjoying it :)
Date: July 22, 2009 11:11 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
I really love the story it's very cute! But just an FYI and it's not a huge deal...but you can't buy any alcohol in grocery or convenient stores in the state of PA, so Jim would definitely not be wine shopping at Wegman's lol.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Ohhh thank you. Do you know how hard I tried to research that, so weird because you can buy it everywhere here lol. But shhh that will be the only thing we'll have to pretend, mmkay? lolrnGlad you're enjoying this and tyso for reviewing :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2009 09:30 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
HOW CAN YOU END IT THERE?! lol It was just getting to the climax! (plenty of pun intended). haha Great job!
Author's Response: You cannot talk about evil I think that is your middle name hmph!!!rnrnGlad you liked it =) Thank yoooou!
Date: July 22, 2009 08:55 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
Wegman's! One of the best grocery stores ever! Glad Jim found some really good advice there. I am sure he'd need it, sometimes the beer selection blows my mind.
Aww... Super, super cute chapter. I loved the teasing Jim received, first at Weggie's, then his mom, and even Pam joined in. I am really glad that they put all their stuff out there though. They know they like each other and things may be awkward, but now they know what is important.
I really look forward to more. I do miss Baby Ellie and Daddy Jim time though, might she be included in another chapter soon?
Author's Response: I had so much fun writing Dorothy at Wegman's. I could just imagine this really cool old lady who thought Jim was cute and wanted to help get him laid lmao.rnrnI'm so glad you're enjoying this still and that you liked how awkward everything was between them both at dinner, but that they have at least both admitted how they feel about each other =)rnrnThat should now be the last chapter without Ellie. I miss writing her so much, and I seriously loved writing her and Daddy Jim just hanging out together aw! I have LOTS of cute stuff coming up (including a little someone's birthday ohhh) so stay with me =)rnrnThanks again for reviewing and letting me know you're still with and still interested. I can't say enough how much I appreciate the lovely comments!!!
8 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2009 08:45 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
No way, you're really going to stop there?
Ah first date jitters. Love it!
Author's Response: Mmhmm I am that evil =)rnrnI have SO much planned for the next one and I hope you all like it =)rnrnEllie will definitely be back then yay!rnrnThanks for the review, I appreciate it so much!
Date: July 22, 2009 08:45 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
Oh man I love this fic. The tension on the date is so palpable. I can't wait to see if they kiss :) Love Ellie's costume too!
Author's Response: YAAAAAAAAAY glad you're enjoying it :)rnrnDidn't you want to smoosh the little lion?rnrnThank you so much for taking the time out to review!!!
10 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2009 08:18 pm Title: It's all about the woo!
Love this. I love your awkward Jim. And I adored every bit of the awkward Pam too! And Jim's mom! Man, Larissa is entertaining! Love it as always!
Author's Response: Thank you so much babes. I honestly couldn't do this without you. You're amazing and I probably annoy you with all my talking about it, but you help me hash things out in my brain lol.rnrnGlad you're loving it. I'm having so much fun writing Larissa YAY :)
Date: July 22, 2009 09:23 am Title: You Complete Me.
I love this getting to know each other stuff between Jim and Pam. And of course they would be instantly drawn to each other! The last paragraph where Jim began to worry about his attraction to Pam was great. Made me want to read the next chapter now! (but need to go slowly ;o)
The way you've incorporated stuff from the show itself and tweaked it into your story was very well done.
My favorite part? Ellie. You're very good at writing children and the way Jim interact with his daughter, caring for her, his love for her and such. It's so heartwarming and sweet and all kind of adorable! Jim's worries and guilt about leaving Ellie to go to work is just so....him. Oh yeah...I'm loving the way Pam is in this story. So straightforward and cute right off the bat. And yay to Ma Halpert, prodding Jim like that. He needs to take her advice.
Umm...I don't mean to nitpick but there's a sentence that you wrote twice in this chapter. The part where Pam told Jim about his deskmate Dwight.
Overall...another great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much for reviewing. I LOVE how you caved mwahaha!rnrnIn my story Pam isn't with Roy and he was only an ex from high school, so they weren't that serious. I do think if Pam had left him sooner in the show, FNB would have been with us a lot sooner than she was, which is what I have tried to show her as here. rnrnI'm SO happy you are enjoying Ellie. I have to say she's my favourite to write. This story is so close to my heart and I just feel so protective of her. I have based Ellie on my friend's daughter, and her little brother has the hearing problems, so this story is all about them, and I love them. rnrnYAY glad you enjoyed the little things from the show I've thrown in, I just thought that could be a cute little twist on things!!rnrnThanks so much for pointing out the mistake. I never saw it and neither did my beta, so I always appreciate people pointing this stuff out so that I can fix it =)rnrnThanks again for your review, it means a lot to me that you have reviewed in general, but the fact you have left me such a detailed review is awesome. I love hearing what people think!!!rnrn
Date: July 22, 2009 12:02 am Title: You're three thousand miles from the place you once called home
First, I love the title. It's from Counting Crows, right? Second, darnit...now I'm addicted, Sally! Why did I give in? Why?
I've mentioned in my non-review a while back that I really like the premise of this story and reading the first chapter, I have to say that I love this new scenario for our favorite couple. The fact that Jim's a single dad is such a great idea and I cannot wait to find out what happened to Ellie's mother. And Ellie is such a cute character already! I didn't expect her to have a hearing problem at all! I'm very much enjoying the foundation you've laid out and cannot wait to read the 2nd chapter when I'm less sleepy :o)
One thing though: in the 3rd phrase by Larissa ("...it's the reason you can home after all"), I think you meant came instead of can,
Author's Response: Thank you SO much for your awesome reviews!!!rnrnYeah it's the title of a Counting Crows song, I got all creative when I was naming it lol. rnrnI'm so glad you're enjoying this and it's so exciting to be writing something new, you know? I have just always wanted to see Jim as a single dad and see how he'd cope in that situation.rnrnIf you keep going you'll find out all about Ellie's mom, I've already explained it, so you won't have to wait for that part!! I'm kinda glad the hearing problem threw you, that was my plan mwahaha!rnrnThanks again for pointing out my mistake, seriously if you see something just let me know -)rnrnI can't wait for you to read the rest now!!!!!rn
Date: July 08, 2009 05:03 am Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
I hope you are enjoying writing this as much as I am reading. I am on the edge of my seat waiting for their Wednesday evening date of two friends having dinner. I thought it was way too cute how both of them were nervous while planning out the upcoming evening. Pam, with her nervous habits that Jim has already noticed, and the way Jim first called pizza at his house a date, but then backtracked to 'friends having dinner' and then he had to make sure that they were friends.
I miss Ellie too. And I cannot wait for she and Pam to meet. I cannot help but wonder which type of kid she is: Does she love new people, and so she'll be happy to see the new pretty lady coming by to visit, or since it's been pretty much Daddy and me will she wonder, who is this I gotta share my DadTime with? Or will she be a combo... Look forward to this...
Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you. I just want to say thank you SO much for the review. It honestly means so much to me, especially when I know people are enjoying this story as much as me. rnHopefully you'll like the next update (which should be up tonight YAY,) but it's the one after that that I am so excited about =)rnThank you for sticking with me. Sorry I'm not as fast as some of the other authors on here, but it really means a lot to me that you're still here and still reading!!!!
Date: July 06, 2009 09:14 pm Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Cute chapter title! I like how you're taking your time in developing Pam & Jim's relationship. I like how your Jim and Ellie have a sweet physical relationship. (I remember cuddle time in the morning with my son when he was a toddler. So relaxing and ... emotionally fulfilling, I guess. Anyway, I'm glad you're letting Jim have that with Ellie. AND I think it's a cute dose of realism that his mom is having issues with it.) As everyone else says, can't wait for the big meeting between the two most important women in Jim's life. I'm really looking forward to seeing father & daughter through Pam's eyes.
Author's Response: Heee thanks. I was so proud of my chapter title, it usually takes me so long to think of them, and when this one came to mind I had to use it. rnThe most important thing to me with this fic is for it to be realistic. I want people to read it and know that this COULD happen, not just in The Office, but in real life, you know? rnWhat you have with your son is EXACTLY what I wanted for Jim to have with Ellie. He's a proud Daddy who is not only raising a hearing inpaired daughter, but doing it alone - plus being a daddy was something he has wanted for a while, so it's extra special for him. Like you, Jim looks forward to those early morning snuggles, so I'm so happy you can relate -)rnI didn't want to have it that his ex was dead, or that she just left, I wanted her to have a real reason to do what she did, plus bringing to the attention of people how bad depression can actually be. Jim's a decent guy, he knows Chloe was sick, but he's still human, so who knows what could happen next.rnI'm so glad you're enjoying this still, your opinion really means a lot to me.rnYou'll see some SUPER cute Jim and Ellie scenes soon, and some through Pam's eyes, so we xan all gush, and some through daddy Jim's eyes =)