Date: October 01, 2009 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 3
keep going, keep going! this is so suspenseful! i need you to continue. great job, i love the plot and the flashbacks, but please try to read through this before you publish so you can catch some errors. you've switched around some words a couple times.
great job, and update soon!
10 [Report This]Date: September 28, 2009 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 3
Great chapter! I love your story! Update soon! Please!
Date: September 25, 2009 06:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
Okay, now I'm confused. Who are the bolded people? (I assume that will become clear in the next chapter?)
Date: September 01, 2009 09:12 am Title: Chapter 2
This is awesome. I finally figured out who it was when he said, "boss". But what a different and interesting idea for a story. Oh, yeah, and hurry up with the next one, okay?
Author's Response: I always thought that Devon deserves his "revenge"...after all he was fired with no reason... Thanks for keep reading!
Date: August 31, 2009 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 2
YES! I guessed! lol. About two paragraphs in I guessed that it was Devon! Woohoo! Oh wait...this is about you - not me. lol. What an interesting idea for a story. I guess not everyone there is extremely gruntled huh? ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I am glad that you like the story!
Date: August 31, 2009 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 2
I really do like the concept of this story, but little spelling/grammatical errors--like and began to dressed, he call her to be sure that she is fine--take me out of the story. Maybe glance back over it and correct some of those little errors--other than that, it's really suspenseful. And I do love suspense. :)
Date: August 27, 2009 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Attention grabbed. Now... Do we know this mystery gunman? Ooooh, update soon!
Author's Response: Yes, we know him... Thanks for reading and commenting!
Date: August 26, 2009 10:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
oooh suspense!
Author's Response: I love suspense!... Thanks for your review!
Date: August 26, 2009 06:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok, I'm very intrigued. I wonder what you have up your sleeves! Update soon?
Author's Response: I very happy that you're intrigued... It's a good sign!!!... Thanks for reading and commenting!
Date: August 26, 2009 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, awesome. *rubs hands together in glee* I love thriller/mysteries, and this sounds great. Please continue.
Author's Response: I always wanted to write a suspense story and I very happy that you like it so far!...Thanks for reading and commenting!