Date: October 02, 2009 08:27 am Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
Very nice job with Toby - this is an interesting take on him and quite believeable. This line totally cracked me up:
"She gives his hand a squeeze when Michael asks if she’s his cousin."
Date: September 30, 2009 02:39 pm Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
Oh Toby. This is why I love you. You may be pathetic bitter Toby, but every once in a while you do get Optimistic Toby... awww...I loved it!
Date: September 30, 2009 07:57 am Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
Aww, I hope Bitter (& Creepy) Toby is gone, too. Nicely done, bash!
9 [Report This]Date: September 30, 2009 07:27 am Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
Excellent job writing Toby, bashert (as if I had any doubt). You can't help but feel bad for the poor guy, so it's nice to see him with his own (possibly) happy ending.
Date: September 30, 2009 05:08 am Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
This is great, bashert. I've always liked Toby and I love how you portrayed him here. Sad, full of regret, always thinking himself pathetic. He seems like a guy who can't ever seem to catch a break so the many missed chances with Pam just feels so... appropriate. Great job. :)
Date: September 30, 2009 04:22 am Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
I really like this too. On the show, Toby is such a mystery to me most of the time. Sometimes I do think he's pretty disturbed individual, if not necessarily a bad person. But I agree with the way you seem to write him: as a somewhat lost soul, who has made some pretty awful judgement calls, but probably capable of happiness in the end. I also like that he has a great deal of self-awareness here.
I wouldn't worry about too much Jim and Pam in this. They're still written very much from Toby's POV so they don't upstage him in his own fic. And if you want to write an understanding piece about the things Toby has been trough lately, it would be hard to completely overlook things such as Thee Knee Incident and Ryan's Minion Affair.
Date: September 29, 2009 11:16 pm Title: I'll go all the way as long as you go first
I really enjoyed this. As of the few members left on Team Toby and someone who really enjoys writing him (Toby really fascinates me too), I always like stories where he isn't painted as some horrible, horrible person and where he has the possibility of a happy ending. Very well-written!.