Date: January 03, 2010 06:24 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh Toby. Its rough. I wish Costa Rica had gone better for him. Dundr Mifflin is just not the place for him to work. I'm glad he has Sasha, she can't grow up to fast, he always needs his baby.
9 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2009 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
Spot on characterization! This was a great read!
10 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2009 04:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow, this was great. i loved the descriptions and paused you've given the reader, this was so realistic and you truly helped me to feel like i was watching this on the show. nice job!
Date: October 19, 2009 02:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw, this was sweet. Poor Toby. Very nice, and a great idea for a fic.
9 [Report This]Date: October 19, 2009 06:55 am Title: Chapter 1
What a great idea for a fic, SlumDunder, and you did such a good job executing it.
She walks away, a nervous spring in her step. He follows a few steps behind her, even as she walks through the kitchen and as he stops to pour himself a fresh coffee, he notices her fingers as they brush past his back as she walks past him, the sly nod and his big grin. He tries not to hate them for this. Wow. That's just great.
10 [Report This]Date: October 18, 2009 11:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
I read the summary first and saw 'Pam tells Toby she's pregnant' and I was went "What? A fic where Toby gets Pam pregnant? What???!!!". Don't worry - I very quickly realised what you were referring to, just thought I'd tell you that...
But me being a complete idiot aside, I thought this was a great moment to explore from Toby's POV and the characters were perfect. Almost made me feel sorry for Toby (sorry, I'm yet to completely forgive creepy Toby)! Good stuff :)
Date: October 18, 2009 10:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome. Spot on characterizations....Toby, Pam, and even a voiceless Jim was PERFECT. Also - best line of all time "This isn't a Friendlies you know!" lol