Date: February 19, 2010 06:38 pm Title: Smiling like a crazy monkey
This was a nice insight to Jim's thoughts. Nice read!
Date: February 19, 2010 06:35 pm Title: Loss of circulation
This is nice. Poor Karen, but really, she just isn't Pam
Date: November 10, 2009 07:05 am Title: Smiling like a crazy monkey
"Why did I try to move on if I knew, really knew, that I'd end up here again? In this same position. Ready to throw caution to the wind, to give up everything. All because I have another chance to have her." Niiiiiice!
We're all so glad Jim got the answer right. Nice job!
Date: November 09, 2009 05:20 pm Title: Smiling like a crazy monkey
yay. can't wait for more =]
Date: November 09, 2009 07:51 am Title: Smiling like a crazy monkey
Glad you decided to continue this, TopSecretMission. I enjoy reliving The Job and the beginning of Jim and Pam's relationship--such thrilling, happy times. I think you capture that sense of excitement and frenetic energy well here: I turn the handle on the door, thanking the cool smooth metal for offering my sweaty palm a reprieve. I open it quickly like ripping off a band-aid. Looking forward to reading more.
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2009 10:56 pm Title: Smiling like a crazy monkey
oh my god (yes, again) - you are a genius! i totally forgot that this was the second time jim was putting everything on the line with the whole pam situation until i read your description of him sitting in his car at the parking lot. great job, this is so well written. usually i'm not the biggest fan of short chapters, but this is great, i love all the description so much! i can't wait to read the first date chapter, i'm sure you'll include a lot about their looks at one another and ecstatic inner emotions. or at least i think you will... if not there's an idea! what a great story! you really have me thinking here. my latest thought:
the title of the show is the office. most people (and up until 2 minutes ago, myself included) just thought 'oh, they work at an office, that's all'. then i realized now 3 minutes ago that so much of the plot has happened there, and (yes i did already realize this part) the office is how so much of the characters' lives came to be. so i'm not really sure how to explain what finally clicked for me, but all i know it came as a result of your writing. so win-win-win situation. hey, i love quoting them too!
10 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2009 10:50 pm Title: Loss of circulation
oh my god, TopSecretMission, this is so realistic! what lovely, lovely description you have, too! i absolutely love all the metaphors and similes, they're great, especially the foot falling asleep and the crazy italian! great job. and also, i realized that this title was really familiar... i guess i read this and didn't leave a review before! so sorry, i was probably reeling at how good this was (wait, do people use reeling for throwing up??? i don't mean to, i mean reeling as in being shocked at your cleverness and brains! just to clear that up...). great work! on to the next chapter which you have conveniently posted!
Date: November 08, 2009 08:33 pm Title: Smiling like a crazy monkey
Well America, here it goes...
Indeed, Jim.
Can't wait to see what comes next in your version of what must've been a GREAT summer. :-)
Date: October 29, 2009 10:11 pm Title: Loss of circulation
I really liked the metaphor you used about when your foot falls asleep. That's brilliant. If you've got more up your sleeve it'd be very nice to read it!
Author's Response: Believe it or not, it actually came to me when my foot fell asleep after sitting on the floor for a long time... creative, I know! More is on the way...
Date: October 29, 2009 07:19 pm Title: Loss of circulation
I really liked this! It was simple and sweet, the metaphor was perfect and I can just imagine that the whole time he was having 'that conversation' with Karen, he would be totally distracted thinking about what was going to happen next. My favourite bit though was his response to Karen's lovely expletive: Well that wasn't very nice. :D
If you feel the inspiration to do more, I would strongly encourage you acting on that! Great work.
Author's Response: Thanks! Hehehe, that line made me laugh as I wrote it, and I can totally hear Jim saying that in his head.
Date: October 29, 2009 02:51 pm Title: Loss of circulation
Really nice job. I'd love to see more...
Author's Response: Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2009 01:57 pm Title: Loss of circulation
I love the metaphor to the limb falling asleep! Great little piece! I for one would love to see some more added to it!
Author's Response: Thanks! I think I'll definitely continue.
Date: October 29, 2009 12:17 pm Title: Loss of circulation
I have been wanting someone to write about this time in their lives - so yes please keep going!
Author's Response: I know! It seems like all the fic right now is about the baby and the wedding, which is AWESOME, but I really miss reading about those first couple steps into their relationship because there are so many ways to approach it. Glad you appreciated it!
Date: October 29, 2009 11:52 am Title: Loss of circulation
Ooh, I really liked this. I thought the analogy with the fallen asleep foot was especially good.
Author's Response: Thanks =]
10 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2009 08:52 am Title: Loss of circulation
I really enjoyed reading this! Please continue!
Author's Response: Thank you! Absolutely I will.
Date: October 29, 2009 08:51 am Title: Loss of circulation
More. Moremoremore.
Please.
Author's Response: Haha... glad you liked it!
Date: October 29, 2009 08:29 am Title: Loss of circulation
How great is season 3 now that they are happy and past all the crap? What I've really been wanting in a fic is for someone to tackle what Karen said to Jim when they got back to the office... so yeah- crazy Italian temper should continue :)
Author's Response: I know! It adds so much dimension to their relationship, as does season 2. That's actually a good idea... I hadn't thought about writing that, but now that you mention it, I just might have to.
Date: October 29, 2009 07:32 am Title: Loss of circulation
I really loved this, and these two paragraphs were especially great:
"You know that feeling you get as your foot falls asleep? It hurts at first and then, nothing. That was last May. This weight, it settled in my chest, I couldn't breathe, couldn't find words to express what was slowly consuming me- I just let it. Because once it did... nothing. I. felt. nothing."
"But it doesn't last long, your leg starts to hurt as the blood flow stops there too. You want to get up, but you can't. You're dreading what's next. But something Pam someone Pam is telling you Pam you should Pam because it might go numb Pam forever."
Nice work. I'd love to read more from you if you are so inclined.
Author's Response: Thank you! And I am so inclined =]
8 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2009 07:31 am Title: Loss of circulation
:) really funny, I liked this piece a lot. I don't think it's cliche at all, in fact, I really enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it, and noticed some of the humor :D
9 [Report This]Date: October 29, 2009 07:17 am Title: Loss of circulation
TopSecretMission, this was a delight--and that's coming from a full-blooded Italian...with a temper ; ) I felt the foot-falling-asleep analogy was very clever. And heartbreaking: This weight, it settled in my chest, I couldn't breathe, couldn't find words to express what was slowly consuming me- I just let it. Because once it did... nothing. I. felt. nothing.
While I think it's perfect just the way it is, I could definitely read more of this.
Author's Response: Haha yes! I am Italian as well, so the temper thing is a given. I'm glad you liked that passage... I was really trying to capture Jim's desperation in season 2, which is a main source of inspiration for me. Thanks!