Great job with the characters, again. I could really hear Ryan's voice during the obnoxious break-up speech, and I don't know if that was the reaction you were going for, but I felt a real urge to punch him in the face. But that's the way I feel about the "real" Ryan too, so it just goes to so you nailed him.

I still kind of wish that one day we'll see Kelly coming to her senses and kicking Ryan to the curb, but meanwhile this was great consolation for my sadness over the fact that the Ryan and Kelly thing keeps happening.

And seriously? Whorephan? So, so inspired. How did you come up with that? It's so funny and wrong and Kelly to a tee.

By the way, did you notice that Kelly was totally absent during the latter half of Murder and Toby was nowhere to be seen as well? You should do something with that. ;) Just a thought, I hope you don't mind.

Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to write Ryan being as obnoxious and douchey as possible so I'm so glad you were able to hear him. And I wish that Kelly would come to her senses soon too and if she has to date someone else in the annex to get over him then that's what she has to do. Also glad you liked the Whorephan. I just came up with it and it seemed like something Kelly would say to poor Erin. And I did notice about Kelly and Toby not being around - wonder what they were up to. And I never mind getting possible story ideas.

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I really enjoyed this. Your Kelly was spot on and I chuckled at "whorephan".  Very creative!!