Date: December 27, 2009 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh my goodness, that's awful. But thank you again for being so honest to the situation, and not dancing around the truly serious subject. I'll be waiting for the next chapter(!) - it just doesn't seem right to be exclaiming things after reading about this subject, but I really do want to know what happens next.
Very well written, and thanks for considering my suggestion from chapter 1, this looked even better!
Date: December 21, 2009 01:10 am Title: Chapter 2
I could see a story with Pam as a spouse-killer/woman pushed too far...
Date: December 21, 2009 01:06 am Title: Chapter 1
Im thinking Pam puts a little crushed glass into Roy's dinner here...
Date: December 20, 2009 12:19 am Title: Chapter 2
wow, i really want to see how this continues! keep going!
Date: December 18, 2009 01:10 am Title: Chapter 1
omg thanks for listening and upload this here. i know you gonna love mtt welcome!!!!...
...and for those who havent read the story yet is REALLYYYYY GOOOD!!!!.
Author's Response: I totally already love this site, thanks so so so very much for telling me about it! Yeah, I was going to tell you I was on here once my story was approved by the site administrators and posted, but you already found it! And thanks so much for the review too—that's so sweet of you, I'm glad you liked the story. Have a great evening. Thanks again! : )
10 [Report This]Date: December 17, 2009 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow - I can't wait to see how you keep going.
I'm kind of at a loss for words here, this was pretty intense stuff - yet I like that you're not leaving anything to the imagination. So therefore, very good job!
One idea, I would suggest not having the final line 'this would be a long weekend'. I think it might be better to stay in the moment, finish the scene with Pam handing Roy the beer and then the next chapter starting however you'd like it to be.
That's just my thoughts - but you don't need to incorporate them if you don't like them.
Great chapter, very well written and keep going!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm so happy you liked the first chapter....you're right, it is pretty intense stuff but I'm glad you appreciate that I'm not skipping over or just alluding to the scenes—I wanted to make it as real as possible to the reader. And thanks so much for your suggestion—writing critiques and suggestions are always welcome! Anything that helps improve my writing. Hope you like the next chapter too. Thanks again!
Date: December 17, 2009 06:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
I would like to keep reading this. The subject matter is touchy but I am game.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I'm glad the rather unpleasant subject isn't going to keep you away. Hope you enjoy the next chapter too!
9 [Report This]Date: December 17, 2009 11:44 am Title: Chapter 1
so, i read this whole story on FF and i can't remember if I commented or not, but i really LOVE this story.
it was intense,sweet,empowering, everything (:
the jam was perfect.
Author's Response: Awww, thanks so much for the comment even though you've already read the story! That was so sweet. I'm happy to know that you enjoyed it on FF. Thanks so much for the review! Have a wonderful evening! : )