10 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2010 06:17 pm Title: window by window
Such a lovely story. I loved the quietness of it, the little slice of life of this lovely family. The intimate atmosphere of the two of them making love was so well written and made me sighed.
Thank you for sharing!
Date: April 19, 2010 09:50 pm Title: window by window
Oh this is quite lovely. Thanks for writing it!
Date: April 18, 2010 08:32 pm Title: window by window
i been waiting for a while for a first-time-after-baby sex....it was a good version of it =)
9 [Report This]Date: April 16, 2010 06:12 pm Title: window by window
Extremely pleased to meet you, unravel! This was a pleasant surprise. How well you've catured the the wonder and monotony of new parenthood.
He kisses me all over my face and says "You are mine and you are everything, Pam." He tells me I am in fact not a differnt person, just a better version of the receptionist he fell in love with all those years ago. And he says that makes him love me even more. Lord, that's beautiful and perfectly Jim.
Hoping this is the first of many!
9 [Report This]Date: April 16, 2010 05:19 pm Title: window by window
That was so beautiful and well done! Great job, unravel, I loved how you were able to convey the love that Jim and Pam have both for each other and their daughter, quickly moving from intimate moments together to moments with the baby so seamlessly. Lovely, lovely, lovely.
Date: April 16, 2010 04:02 pm Title: window by window
I read this over at fanpop and almost registered just to review and tell you to bring it over here. I LOVED it. I feel like this is what the moments are like for Jim and Pam. Welcome and thank you for bringing this wonderful story over.
8 [Report This]Date: April 16, 2010 03:43 pm Title: window by window
Re reviewing because I re read my review and realized I didn't welcome you! Sorry. Having one of those days! I really liked this fic a lot! Hope to read more soon and if you ever need a beta I'm an email away! :)
Date: April 16, 2010 03:23 pm Title: window by window
Welcome, unravel! Love the quiet tone of this piece, made real with little details like Jim not calling her name and taking off his shoes. (I have friends with two-year-old twins. They only recently removed the "DO NOT RING DOORBELL" sign.) Pam's exhaustion and sense of isolation are well realized here. And I love the visual of Jim singing that Doors song all 'tone-deaf and happy.' :)
And for what it's worth, I don't find the paragraph length distracting.