Date: March 28, 2011 06:39 am Title: Chapter 3
Am I the only one who thought TWSS after Pam said, “Is it supposed to be this hard?”
I loved the Chuck Norris/Dwight switch. Very Jimesque. This is an interesting premise - please continue.
10 [Report This]Date: March 22, 2011 04:04 am Title: Chapter 3
Aww, Jim and the Dundies. No, you're not alone. I agree completely, that Dundie drunken kiss was a sign for him.
Just wanted to mention one thing - in the beginning you mention deer urine, and as odd as this may seem, I just wrote a chapter that's with my beta that mentions the same thing, so I didn't want you to think I'm taking the idea or anything. It's in a different context completely but I just wanted to mention that, I didn't want you thinking that I took an idea of yours.
Hope you'll be able to update soon, I'm enjoying this.
Author's Response: Deer urine (I THINK) was mentioned in an episode, so it's not even my idea, so don't worry about it! Those cruel writers left us to fill in the blanks about what ordering deer urine over the internet would entail, so I'm eager to see your interpretation :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 22, 2011 03:59 am Title: Chapter 2
This is developing nicely! I love the inclusion of the CIA thing, makes that awkward scene in Benihana all the more meaningful.
Author's Response: Thanks! I like the idea of her reaching out to him with the prank they'd always planned to do but never pulled off before he left.
Date: March 20, 2011 06:01 pm Title: Chapter 3
‘Dwight Schrute does not believe in Germany.’ ::snort:: Oh, that was funny.
Author's Response: Thanks :) I figured Dwight would be happy with 90% of the Chuck Norris facts and not mind the other 9%, so it was hard to find the one that would trigger his outrage. When I saw Germany, that was it :)
Date: March 20, 2011 09:25 am Title: Chapter 1
Sorry for the delay in reviewing this. I like this premise and look forward to Jim and Pam's story from this guys view.
Author's Response: Thank you! It'll be a little while before I have another update, but hopefully it won't disappoint when we get to the end.
Date: March 19, 2011 07:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh, Ken gets sneaky! I'm not sure that I'm going to like Len... but I have the feeling that, in your story, he'll be instrumental in getting Pam & Jim together.
Nice build up of your plot.
Author's Response: Thanks! I majored in creative writing in college but haven't really done it in years so this is my way of dipping my toes back in. And yeah, I didn't like him very much either. Let's hope he eventually behaves himself.
Date: March 19, 2011 01:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very interesting premise. I like your take on Len. Do you have your story arc worked out? Len could be a manipulative prick, a soft-hearted guy, an analytical guy... So many ways you can take this.
Author's Response: Thank you! I do have an arc planned out for this, though I haven't outlined it, I know what I want to happen and about where I'd like it to happen. And I do agree, there are many ways you can take him right now. I don't see Len as a one-dimensional person, and without giving too much away, I see room for some character development with him.
Date: March 19, 2011 07:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Normally I don't like when lines are lifted right out of the show but I did enjoy this, it's dofferent - I like your interpretation on how the camera crew got them to answer the questions. I forget that they used to be more closed off to the camera crew. Looking forward to seeing what you have in store next. I'd be happy to beta if you're interested/ feel like you need some advice. Djyankees@gmail.com. Either way I'll be looking forward to more of this.
Author's Response: Thank you! I may take you up on it as I go along.
8 [Report This]Date: March 19, 2011 07:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Clever idea-- I agree that they all seemed quite reserved in the beginning, and only gradually became less guarded around the cameras, until eventually Jim seems to look at them as a sort of confidante as things get more stressful. Should be interesting to see where you go with these.
One thing you might want to fix: I noticed that in your categories, you list 'Angela/Andy' as the characters. ??
Welcome to MTT! :)
Author's Response: Thank you the warm welcome and for for catching that; hadn't realized I'd clicked it!