1 [Report This]Date: January 03, 2021 11:57 am Title: To You
This was so soft... I'm emotional.
1 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2020 09:37 am Title: To You
This is a good depiction of Jim’s post-setting a date mindset – how isolated and disconnected and crushed he is, and how that’s playing out as he’s going through the motions of dealing with other people (and not just Katy). Well-written, too – almost poetic.
I choose to believe that subconsciously, Pam didn’t want to ask him for a ride because she thought this might be a painful moment for him, but oooof. That line about him being her last resort… ouch. (And yet in the middle of this pain, you squeeze in some fun Jim-Pam banter, which I like. So fundamental to who they are together.)
I love the exchange about the jukebox. It’s a great example of how much Roy invades even the innocent moments with them.
I think you’ve portrayed this particular slice of their relationship well – Pam’s just-barely-contained-and-under-the-surface recognition that something is happening, trying to push its way through and force the issue, and the way she ends up restraining herself; Jim not quite having the guts to speak up; and the way Pam automatically reverts to best friend status, albeit in a way that demonstrates she’s sublimating some of her feelings into a very intense sense of that friendship.
The toast is one of the deleted scenes I most wish had actually made it on air, so I’m thrilled to see you realizing its potential and exploring its impact on Pam, because of course it was special to her.
Anyhow, I know you haven’t written for this site in a while, but if you see this, I wanted you to know I really enjoyed this one, and that if you ever have more ideas for this fandom you’ve definitely got at least one person who wants to read them!
Author's Response: Thank you for going back and reading this! The toast scene is such a heartbreaking one, and while I completely understand why they cut it out, I had a lot of fun unpacking the emotion they managed to pack into such a short scene.
1 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2018 10:27 am Title: To You
So, so interesting, how things are flipped here, and I love it. So much attention has been given to how Jim often makes decisions on his own, even though they affect his life with Pam. But here Pam is making all the decisions, right down to ordering milkshakes, which Jim sees as affecting his life and happiness. That was clever.
Oof, and that line about him being her "last resort" for a ride. Oof. Love it.
You really wrote the tension of this scene nicely, making Jim just a little argumentative and less willing to play along with her teasing, his short responses--all great.
Aaah, and the "I thought I could, but I couldn't" line! Niiice.
The end is fabulously brutal. It's the last thing he wants in so many ways. I love stories that leave you with a quick punch in the gut. Great job all around.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! This was entirely based off Jim’s toast in the deleted scene, because it didn’t seem fitting that Pam would hear it and not respond. Also, we never see Pam find out that Jim and Katy have broken up, so it’s now my personal canon that Jim and Pam saw each other again that night.
While writing this, I wanted to be very intentional about displaying the role that Pam came to play in Jim’s emotional well-being. It’s very clearly shown that Jim stays in Scranton at Dunder Mifflin soley because of Pam, meaning that she is a part of most decisions he makes, often going as far as making the decision for him without actually making it for him, so I made that a bit more literal in this story to draw attention to the way she’s become part of his very thought processes without ever realizing it.
I think Jim is often portrayed as a bit too much of a saint, in that he has no limit when it comes to tolerating the emotional turmoil that Pam puts him through, so I’m glad to know that the way I wrote Jim’s responses worked for you. I wanted him to be walking that line of pushing her to say what he is almost sure that she feels while still trying to maintain their friendship.
1 [Report This]Date: April 04, 2018 04:17 pm Title: To You
This is so incredibly in character and could easily be a missing scene from the show. I can so easily picture them, Jim putting on a smile with his heartbreak right underneath, Pam aware Jim is hurting but unaware just how much. Amazing work, dwangela!
Author's Response: My goal with this story was ultimately to capture the delicate balance of their relationship in season two, so I’m relieved to hear that it went okay. The raw emotion of Booze Cruise is so heart wrenching, and this story was begging to be told. Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: April 02, 2018 01:53 pm Title: To You
Did you write this in 15 seconds?
Author's Response: 15 seconds? Do you really think so little of me? 14 seconds.
Date: April 02, 2018 07:19 am Title: To You
Wow. This is amazing. Pam touches, shapes, re-shapes, handles and compounds Jim's pain like a lump of clay in her hands. And Jim just lets her. Wow.
Author's Response: Do you have some secret writing skills hiding there, Clover? Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2018 11:38 pm Title: To You
Wow! So simply, but so lyrical at the same time. And so, SO season 2 Jim and Pam. Especially because I just want to him them both. Which means it MUST be season 2 Jim and Pam ;)
Well done!
Author's Response: The relationship between Jim and Pam is so realistic and fragile, so I’m glad you think I captured that. Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2018 08:49 pm Title: To You
This is so well written and so heartbreaking! I love the angst stuff and you definitely delivered. Great job!
Author's Response: There was so much raw emotion in Booze Cruise, so I figured why not lengthen their suffering for the sake of fanfiction? :) Thank you for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2018 07:35 pm Title: To You
Great penmanship and character dialogues, as always! Love the Jim & Pam angst.
Author's Response: I always find myself gravitating back toward the angst of season two when it comes to writing. Thank you!
Date: April 01, 2018 06:59 pm Title: To You
Oooo, I love this! How heartbreaking!
Author's Response: Thank you!