Date: May 16, 2021 11:42 am Title: Epilogue
Ah what a wonderful way to wrap up this story - and I can't believe you never told me that we used the same song - guess when you directed me to this story you were in a small way were.
Well I guess you know I agree how perfect this song is for them - and so happy to see I'm not the only one. And it's not the first time we had the same thought when it came to these two. You know what they say about great minds...
The last bit about calling her Beesly was just so sweet - but what really touched me was the line about marrying your high school sweetheart.
Anyway this whole story was delightfully entertaining. Thanks for sharing it.
Author's Response: Where would the fun be if I told you that about the song? But seriously, thank you. It was fun to put this topper to this story. I had a lot of fun writing it and wanted to keep that same kind of thing going with the final bit. It's probably the romantic part of me that had Jim say that line about high school sweethearts. Thank you so much for all the reviews you left for this story. I'm very glad you enjoyed it so much.
Date: May 13, 2021 06:12 pm Title: The Hunt
Well you've done it. You've created a wonderland out of their history both from canon and what you created that was entertaining and whimsical and moving and musical and the perfect culmination to this story of their life thus far.
I have to admit I missed the significance of the rain check at the very beginning so I'm so glad you brought it up near the end.
Full circle, just like their life and their relationship and all the moments were perfectly represented in the drawings, mementos, places and songs. Seeing familiar people along the way was also fun.
I think my favorite song here was I hope you dance...really love that one and it works here.
Pretty remarkable feat to get everyone together so that he could thank them for his life. That was actually quite the gift she presented him there.
The arcade was good fun especially to the tune of Pinball Wizard (the loudest Broadway show I'd ever been to btw)
I was thrilled to see Coach Weller again even if he had to do his wind sprints again but it was here he started to get closer to learning about their real history but how she revealed it was just so delightful as was the reveal Larissa had rescued the box and she had found it and finally The Party to follow. But the end when Jamie and Morgan finally tell each other they love each other that was just a perfect ending to this story.
Except there is an epilogue which I'm sure will provide a beautiful button.
Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked this penultimate chapter. It was a lot of fun to bring everything to fruition. All the pain and angst they went through was only pointing them straight to each other. I had a lot of fun coming up with all the new bonus gifts and getting them to retrace their steps. I had a lot of fun bringing in previous characters too. Glad you liked seeing all of them too. Jamie and Morgan finally being together was a build up I'd had in my head for a long time so I've really glad it was so well received. Thanks as always for your great feedback.
Date: May 09, 2021 07:18 pm Title: Memorial Day and Beyond
At last they figure it out. Well one of them does. But getting ahead of myself.
Once again I feel your joy in writing things like the whiskey lesson, things that really reflect on you. But it's how it's the set up for link of small to memory that makes it good writing. When the rascally older brothers (who themselves seem a little stunted in their growth) start in with the stink bomb she gets her first clue. But then she when accidentally found the box It brought a real smile to my face.
Pam you feisty thing using the bomb on Pete, good girl. But now what are you up to? A folder full of plans. I see how long the next chapter is. This is going to be good.
Author's Response: Like I've said to others, there were a bunch of reasons to include the whiskey lesson. I know about it, so it's easier to write. It primed Pam for scent triggering memory. And a fun call back to the the mini-golf chapter. I remember writing when she finally finds the box and really enjoying that moment. It's been a long time coming so it was a joy and relief to get there. I also really liked turning the stink bomb back around on Pete as well.
Oh yeah Pam's got plans. Hope you've been paying attention. Thanks as always.
Date: May 07, 2021 04:45 am Title: Clearing the Air
So you call this a filler chapter but a lot happens for a filler.
First off, they do go home together and I like that you had them have the important conversation including going as far as having him stop at a drugstore.
Now I'm sorry, but I'm not one that would think he had a half year relationship with Karen and never had sex but it since it meant that he was not with Karen the day before and Pam the next I'll accept..plus it lets them have the same number. And the line that it was the first time she made love was strong.
So since I'm reading this much after the fact, I notice a pattern in your break-ups - how they don't always take on first go. Which was instrumental in setting up the spin on who reams out who. Having Jim be the one to tell her off is something new and I like to get a new perspective in fics (reading the same break-up scene over and over isn't quite as exciting) so well done there.
Other notes:
Nice Parks & Rec nod.
Call back to the shirt with his name on back.
Jim - how can you forget the raincheck?
He gets to read the shredded letter after all.
Thee two question talk at end, very mature and necessary as these two embark on the rest of their life.
Nice job with a "filler" chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for the detailed review as always. Yeah, they go home together and so it makes sense Jim would want to be prepared.
I was still kind of new to the fandom when I was writing this and hadn't really gotten as good a bead on Karen's character, which is my reasoning for portraying her the way I do here. Thanks for indulging in my take on their relationship, even if it's against the normal grain.
Having Jim ream out Karen was another one of those choices. I'd read a lot of fics and it's kind of in canon that Karen reams out Jim. I wanted to try and do something different.
Glad you caught the Parks and Rec nod. The t-shift nod to the past was also a lot of fun. Yeah, Jim forgot about the raincheck, but to be fair it's been a long time since high school and to the best of his knowledge he threw out his Morgan box about a year ago. Yup, he gets to read the letter. I also wanted them to have a solid framework to heal some of their emotional wounds, so when other big things come up they're in a really good place.
Date: May 03, 2021 03:47 am Title: Refining Fire
That was a pretty intense chapter. With your knowledge and history you must have been spinning when you caw the episode with the pepper spray but like you say here they don't always get things right on TV.
Speaking of which and we've discussed before - your job is intense and tough to take sometimes. it was interesting to get the perspective here from the Ethan character.
Somehow I remember them being couple friends and was wondering how they would become that was - I take it you don't often befriend subjects of calls so it was really good Pam ran her cart into his wife (yours a social worker too?). Befriending them was better than therapy.
I enjoyed getting the glimpse into Karen's reaction at the beach. You know she had to be pretty mad about that and clench down harder afterwards.
Good times ahead -this should be fun.
Author's Response:
Date: April 28, 2021 04:19 am Title: Visitors
There's one hugely implausible thing about this chapter - that you would ever write a story where Whiskey gets poured down the drain.
But I do appreciate his family coming out because they were worried about him even if they were a bit pushy.
I enjoyed seeing his first day - nice to see him pulling himself together enough - it was really tough to see him in the state before his family showed up.
Larissa saving the box for him framed against how he shredded the letter has a kind of balancing - he'll never get back that letter (see as I have stated Jim is too impulsive- had he taken a moment) but at least the box is not off to the dump.
Ending on a bit of a sad note I'm interested to see how far we jump next.
Author's Response: It was just Old Crow, a cheap bottom shelf bourbon. But my view on alcohol what I wrote for Gerry. Better to dump a bottle than let a bigger problem develop. I've personally seen where that road goes to many times at work, no thanks.
Jim's at one of his lowest points of his life here. Tough love can sometimes be kind of pushy but that's the way it goes from time to time. Yeah, he pulled himself together, but he's still reeling which is making him act as impulsivly as you see here. He's putting on the Stamford Jim facade, especially after he shreds the letter and can't get it back. Which was tough for me to write too.
Glad you liked that Larissa kept the box. As I've said before, the sisters are fun characters.
Sorry about the sad chapters. I've got a feeling you'll like what's to come though.
Date: April 27, 2021 05:44 am Title: Choosing to Move
Roy, Roy, Roy - the writing was on the wall, too bad you were stuck in the past and couldn't see what was clearly coming.
Pam had a real strong moment here- the first of many as she breaks free of her own past and moves on.
Particularly moving when she asks him about yogurt, tea and art. Time to go, Pam.
She's lucky to have such a close bond with a sister who has good taste in and insights on Disney movies.
Yes, Jim loves cheesy so this letter, while not really cheesy was beautiful and moving. Got to wonder what happens to it because if that didn't affect him and send him back to her arms I'm not sure what could have.
Author's Response:
Date: April 23, 2021 05:36 pm Title: Aftermath
What do you do when your sister shows up at your door in a state weeks before her wedding, call for reinforcements. Nice job bringing in all the important women in her life to not only comfort her and give her advice but lay into Roy as well.
But what I really liked most here was the addition Shakespeare and where it came from. Pastor Dan seems to have reached her in way that even the women couldn't. I think my favorite part of this chapter was:
“I understand,” Dan nodded at her. “That’s a nice thought, you’re right. But personally, I think it’s better if you marry your best friend.”
Second only to : "This will always be yours".
Now I know this story is based in canon and so I know where it's headed but this ending still pretty much broke my heart.
Author's Response: Kinda figured Pam would need some friendship at that point in her life. Also some much needed perspective on Roy. I've always kinda got the feeling she never really asked anyone if Roy was right for her, especially with the long engagment and the fact he only set a date because he was drunk. Glad you liked Pastor Dan. I saw that play while I was writing this story and those lines stuck out.
Sorry to break your heart there a bit. We all know the levels of angst Jim and Pam went through so it's kind of unavoidable.
Date: April 21, 2021 06:06 pm Title: Bonus Gifts
Been looking forward to this chapter and seeing what the letter would or wouldn't say and I was really surprised that Jim was putting it out there the way he did complete with calling Roy and asshole...but you got me.
I love his relationship with Larissa in this story and she really is a good sounding board for him and like you say - a straight shooter. Everyone needs someone like that in their life (at least that's what I tell my friends and family when I am brutally honest).
The real note was so heartfelt and touching - could totally see it saying that.
As usual the little bits of their inner monologue really adds to the enjoyment of this story. Like at the start of the day of the holiday party when he has to tell himself not to get scared. Nig moment - understandable.
Now the way you frame the teapot as a reminder of the day Jim got hurt really adds a layer to why she might go for the ipod.
You got Roy pegged here. He's such an oblivious blowhard (I was going to say-- still, even after Darryl had a talking with him until I realized that I'm mushing up two different of your stories- focus Max -this one is the on canon one.)
I feel like I've seen or read that they show a later in the season scene with Jim having the key chain so I do like how you incorporated it here.
But the way you describe them and the scene when she finally gets all her bonus gifts and the inner dialogue just make this chapter really special.
Well done - I think I'm out of the jelly beans already but if I weren't I'd throw a whole bunch at this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you. I remember this one being a lot of fun to write, especially since I'd written the backstory for all the Teapot gifts. I had wanted all those earlier drafts of The Note to be crossed out, but couldn't get the formatting right. The multiple false starts were a fun way to explore all the ways he could have gone, but probably shouldn't. Glad you continue to like Larissa. She's a fun character to write. Also really glad you liked The Note. I wanted something that would feel genuine to the moment, yet would still garner the reaction Pam gave when she finally does get a chance to read it.
Pam going for the iPod rather than the teapot always struck me as odd. There's no way she wouldn't know who her Secret Santa was, especially after the look she gave Jim when she got it and his question she take it when she had the chance after Yankee Swap was put in effect. So thus initially she has the reaction to go for something else. However clearly she makes the right choice in the end. Yeah, don't expect to much from Roy.
The scene where she finally gets to gush over the Teapot and the gifts was just a ton of fun to write.
Thanks as always for your detailed comments.
Date: April 20, 2021 06:25 pm Title: The Party
Dancing Queen - cheese for sure but the best kind.
As with every chapter it is nice to get the added insight of what is going on in their heads throughout the scenes we already know, especially in this bedroom scene.
Man in black and Blue Angels -like seeing those references here.
She sleeps over - how did Jim sleep at all knowing she was just downstairs (oh and how did he not give up his bed for her?)
Oh - one thing and not a big deal but you might want to edit - the song is Islands in the Stream - you have in the Sun (which is a Weezer song) - again no big deal but easy enough to fix - unless they sang a Weezer song too.
Excited for the next chapter -will we get to see what the letter says?
Author's Response: It was fun to put in those internal thoughts and add in the things like the Blue Angels and the Man in Black. I'm sure Jim was all sorts of restless. She did ask to crash on the couch and Jim was already discombobulated enough (and happy to be spending more time with her) that offering her his bed would have been even more awkward.
Stream, Sun, chalk that one up to I was still fairly new to the fandom and might not have done all proper research.
As for the letter, well, you'll just have to read and see. Thanks as always.
Date: April 14, 2021 04:54 am Title: Mixed Up
So sweet that he calls it Butterfly day.
He's excitement at getting her in Secret Santa is a joy to read. The inner monologue in his head really enhances the chapter, the thinking of the gift and the thinking about that kiss...
I like how they set up the prank together and very clever how the mixed tape comes together even in the age of CDs...now we know a CD would not fit into a teapot but I like your explanation for why its a tape even better.
Oh and who doesn't love a bit of drunk dialogue - as fun to read as it is to write.
Author's Response: Butterfly Day is a reference to the script from this episode. The scene directions had it that Jim acting like a butterfly landed on his shoulder when Pam rested her head on him in the conferance room. I couldn't let something that sweet not get a mention. It was a lot of fun to bring in everything else here too. Writing drunk IM's is really easy and fun. Type really fast and don't worry about typos. Glad you liked this one.
Date: April 12, 2021 05:45 am Title: Recovery
Another wonderfully written chapter where you really brought us into the recovery room(s) and had us feeling all the emotion of the situation.
The way you keep teasing them finding out about their being Morgan and Jaimie, only to have the something prevent them really finding out is a great device you seem to be weaving throughout. What a reward it will be when they do learn.
Author's Response: Thanks about the feeling of realism in the recovery ward. My area of expertise lays in the pre-hospital setting which is why here in the hospital the medical stuff isn't nearly as detailed. So I'm glad you liked that.
It was a lot of fun writing all the close calls about them being Morgan and Jamie. We'll run into a few more before it's all said and done. Glad you're still enjoying this.
Date: April 05, 2021 04:33 am Title: ROSC
Another view into the world of Warrior.
I like how you also gave us the not as successful call and the uneventful one.
But it was the description of the post call reaction. letting out the adrenaline that you had to hold back. having a self fist pump moment for a great save.
Glad you clarified how rare the hit causing the commito cordis.
I can sense your pride in these chapters and it an honor to read.
Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. It's been like that for me for a long time now. I'll be (mostly) calm and collected on scene and while transporting. It's after I turn over a patient that I will feel the adrenaline. Like I've said, it's still there, I just know how to control it for the most part during a big call. Not every call is as dramatic as a cardiac arrest to be sure. It was a lot of fun to bring in this arc. I'm really glad you liked it so much.
1 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2021 03:05 pm Title: Class 1
Wow Warrior - this was intense and you do this kind of thing all the time. Wow.
I do like how you clarified how it is not quite like what we see on TV - that you have your plans down as best as you can so you can be calm in the face of the incident, so you can give and get information as you work and provide something to the people that are with the patient.
You did a great job describing the scene and sharing what a day in the life is like - from the way you set your uniform to missing your wife, training new students and responding to a call and interacting with a panicked friend/loved one.
Well done.
Author's Response: Thank you. I did enjoy bringing this chapter to life. Most of the time it's not quite that dramatic, in fact as I write this reply I'm on my way to a call for a lift assist. Someone fell and just needs help getting back up. Then again, sometimes it is kind of like how you see on TV. I call those As Seen On TV calls. I'm really glad the descriptions worked well for you. I wanted to give an accurate depiction of how a call like this is run from the paramedic POV. Glad you liked it. Still a little more to come with Ethan and Medic 4 so I'm looking forward to hearing your thoughts on that too.
Date: March 31, 2021 07:55 pm Title: Shot to the Heart
wow this chapter was a heartstopper. Pun intended. Now I'm pretty sure he survives but I'm still feeling very anxious right now.
Now before you hit us with that shocking bit I was having fun getting a little background on the teapot and enjoying the first meeting of Pam and Larissa as well as another Halpert prank gone wrong tale (thanks to Pete and Tom) that sounds a little bit real?
I was totally not expecting what came at the end of this chapter but I could feel the panic Pam was going through via the writing. So good and suspenseful even knowing he'll make it (at least he better). I think I know who's coming in the ambulance.
Looking forward to what's next.
Author's Response: Thanks. It was a lot of fun to write this chapter. We get to see Jim and Pam being cute. Larissa makes another appearance, and of course the first sighting of the teapot. Jim's head injury as a kid was based on a real life experience of mine. My older sister and I were playing long jump on my little sister's 4th birthday I think, and yes I unfortunatly hit my head like that. It was an accident rather than an intentional prank though.
I know it's a bit of a shock there with the ending. The next few chapters were some of my favorite bits of writing. Looking forward to seeing what you think of them.
Date: March 31, 2021 04:17 am Title: Murals and Marriage
Well I almost feel bad for Roy here, he is obviously still grieving over his loss. Oh and here comes the doc crew. I like Pam's line about there not being anything special about the office. Isn't that kinda the point?
And away we go....
Author's Response: That's probably the closest I wrote Roy as having a redeeming moment. As another reviewer said, it gives context for why he is the way he is. He hasn't really processed his feelings after his dad dies and thus is stuck in the high schooler in a man's body kind of thing. Yup, here come the cameras. I don't play with them to much, but we'll at least be skirting in and around things from canon from here on out. Thanks as always for your comments.
Date: March 31, 2021 04:10 am Title: The New Jamie
Packer, always a joy. Gotta say, didn't think he could get any more crass but in your version he might.
Roy is also in rare form here. Don't know if you're planning any redeeming moments for him coming up, but right now I'm with Jim, hard to understand what she sees in him.
I did enjoy the hot sauce origin story- are you planning to go through every item in the teapot?
Author's Response: Yeah Packer and Roy seperatly aren't great. Together they're even worse. Glad you liked the bit with the hotsauce though. That part was a lot of fun to write.
1 [Report This]Date: March 28, 2021 05:11 am Title: The Zone
Poor Jim - we knew he would find out but to find out this way - poor Jim. Roy seems about right here too. Yeah, Pam being engaged to him making you happy, keep telling yourself that. Then wake up.
All the easter eggs in this one were lots of fun...the future stick lessons, the French Onion chips, the photo of Jim and Dwight, Phyllis being nosy or receptive (depends how you view it) but most of all I enjoyed the origin of the jellybeans.
Good stuff as I always expect from you.
Author's Response: Yeah, the shoe had to drop at some point. So now he's stuck in the pining phase of life. Glad you liked all the Easter eggs. There's actually quite of bit of backstory one can find from pre-camera days if one pays attention. It was fun to bring some of that to light.
Date: March 28, 2021 05:04 am Title: New Beginning
Nice to see how Pam comes alive when she is bored and annoyed by Dwight (and meets someone who she instantly connects with).
Nice call back to The Merger with the orientation video, fun stuff at Cuginos with the hand stuff and really clever writing for the meeting with Dwight.
Friend at work, yeah that's nice...wink wink.
Well done.
Author's Response: It was a lot of fun to write this one. I wanted them to have at least one angst free day. Really cement in why Jim was so head over heels for her. After all he did say Plan A was to marry her pretty much from the day he met her. ;) Glad you liked it.
1 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2021 09:36 am Title: Epilogue
This is such a wonderful story and idea. I really, really wanted it to go more AU at times (like getting them back together sooner!), and I felt like Karen was a little out of character (but I don't really care much about her, so oh well 🤷🏻r05;a92;a039;😆), but the payoff was so so so good! I loved how they kept ALMOST realizing they were Jamie and Morgan, so clever and cute and made my heart skip a beat!
I thought for SURE it would be when Pam saw his yearbook at the BBQ, but I forgot that she never actually SAW him, ahh!
I also loved Pastor Dan and the religious aspects of the story. I thought that really fit with Pam's character and the fact that we know they had Cece christened.
Altogether, this is one of the most incredible JAM stories I've ever read. Thank you so so so so much for writing it, and for making me both laugh out loud and cry. Fabulous job. d84;a039;d84;a039;d84;a039;d84;a039;
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I've very glad you enjoyed it so much. I was still getting a feel for the characters while writing this, so that may explain some of the out of character moments. It was a lot of fun bringing them so close to finding out about each other but not quite there, until the end at least. It was a labor of love to write it, so I'm really happy that people continue to enjoy reading it. Thanks again for your review.
Date: March 23, 2021 03:50 am Title: A Lot of Reasons
Interesting twist on how Pam and Roy wound up engaged and why for so long. Seems to fit with him just sorry she doesn't feel she's worth more than what she'd have with him.
As for the porn - not surprised by that either.
Glad she got her sketch back and good timing too as she's about to get the real life version -even if she may not realize it. Next chapter I expect will be very exciting
Author's Response: Like Pam said on the beach, there were a lot of reasons to leave Roy, but she didn't care about them. So that's kinda of what I was going for. The doldrums of the Pam/Roy relationship have kicked in and it's tough to get out of those. As always Roy's not the best. Glad you liked her getting her sketch back. You're right the next chapter is a lot of fun. One of my favorite pieces of Office fanfition writing I've ever posted.
1 [Report This]Date: March 22, 2021 03:56 am Title: Looking Ahead
Oh Warrior I just adored this chapter. For one the in-depth look at the idea behind Athlead - now I like your spin on what it was meant to be - there's an idea. (I wasn't sure what made it so unique in the show). And it is true - big players aren't doing it all on their own - a little recognition to those behind the superstars - that's clever twist.
It was a little sad that Jess ended it but as Larissa makes him see she wasn't the one - oh and I love Larissa as the voice of reason. She gives great advice (and once again I smiled as we both used a similar pop culture reference - with Lucy and her 5 cents psychoanalysis - mine for Vanessa in New years - wonder if you thought of this when you read in mine)
Fun prank with the hot wings and the interview was a hoot (even though it was at Chili's not Hooters) love that the server knows him, references the upcoming dundies awards and he gets reprimanded for jumping on table) and the whole Wallace Shawn princess bride bit you had going on was good fun too.
Well done on this chapter - seems like it may have been a little bit of a wait for the readers at the time - not so for me since I'm reading a year or more later - but I'm glad you took your time with this chapter - it shows in all the details.
Really looking forward to the first day of work.
Author's Response: Thanks Max. It was fun to formulate all those ideas about the start of Athlead. Start small and work big. I included Jess because I wanted to make sure that when Jim and Pam finally to get together he doesn't have to go through the awkward how to be a good boyfriend phase with her. Not that he would have that problem mind you, but still. Larissa is always fun to bring in. In fic she's often portrayed as a great sounding board for Jim and I saw no reason to change that. We'll see more from her as we go on. I did have a few flashbacks to this part when I read about Vanessa in New Years.
The stuff in the resturants was fun too. I actually pulled that hot wing prank once to wonderful results. Michael at Chili's is always fun and it was a chance to prove how quick witted Jim was even at this early stage. Glad you liked it.
1 [Report This]Date: March 19, 2021 04:52 pm Title: Fractured
So as I read this I'm already thinking of things to write in the review - like for instance Kenny really has to learn better ways to deal with his anger. This throwing things is really childish.
But later this chapter actually struck me as super super dark, not only because of the death of Roy's father but what happened later. So much so I had to read other reviews to see if it struck anyone else the same way. Not sure if it's just in my interpretation of it (I read it twice and still felt it) but even in reviews everyone felt almost a little sad for Roy and sure well he lost his father which is tragic, but, and I hope you don't take this wrong, I felt so much anger and hatred towards him because what I felt happened could be seen as rape. (I hope that you don't take this as a criticism, it is actually the opposite - the way you portrayed it and the visceral reaction I had is actually the sign that you wrote this so well as is my uncertainty about whether it was or was not a violation - and if I'm feeling that confusion then Pam would be as well.)
So dark - but well, well done, Warrior. - Roy you are just a sleeze.
Author's Response: Yeah, there's a reason I titled this chapter the way I did. You're right in that it's probably one of the darkest things I've written that's for sure. I can see why you might call that rape. I think I was mainly going for Pam was also in a bad head space because she's feeling guilty she wasn't there when Roy was first calling her about the accident. So she's trying to make it up to him by being the comforting girlfriend and well one thing led to another. Not ideal to be sure. I think I was trying to go more for Roy was feeling lost and Pam was one of the only sources of comfort he could find. Did he take things a bit to far in a compromising position and situation, probably.
Anyway, thanks as always for your well thought out reviews. Nice to know the writing is still able to bring out feelings in the reader. Also don't worry. There will be brighter times ahead.
Date: March 18, 2021 05:00 am Title: Nights to Remember
I was a little confused at the beginning of this chapter - I thought I accidentally clicked on SW. I figured it was a video game a few paras in - I wasn't much of a gamer and not familiar with either game mentioned - itake it they were big at the time.
So I now see how short-lived the connection between Jaimie and Morgan were and liked how they both became Jim and Pam - a great time to reinvent and make the change.
Now I do know how/why Pam may not recognize Jim when they wind up at DM together. I am curious will Jim remember Morgan/Pam?
Very sweet that Jim takes his sister to prom. And you know how I love a good origin story - so the story of how Roy and Pam's song became their song was a nice touch. Roy doesn't seem so bad her but his brother is a capital L.
Nice job as always.
Author's Response: Star Fox 64 is still a great game. Sorry for the confusion about this one and SW (kind of). As for if they'll remember each other when they get to DM, well, we'll get there. Jim taking his sister was a fun thing to put in there. Roy probably had his good moments so yeah we had to put a few in there from time to time.
1 [Report This]Date: March 17, 2021 08:24 pm Title: First Meeting
My bookshelf is full and I've got four of my own stories in the works but I've been anticipating starting this one for so long and since there hasn't been a new Chapter of SW in a while (no pressure - none at all - take your time by all means ((hope you can read my levity)) ) and I miss reading me a little Warrior style writing so I finally dove in.
Right off the bat (I know wrong sport) this fic is delightful. Interesting twist with the names - wondering if there is some significance later since we already know it is Jim and Pam. I like how you made it so she really hasn't seen him - although I was surprised how much interaction they already are having with the chat room - oh and how I remember chat rooms like that - funny how even though we don't have to wait for the Pshhhhhhhkkkkkrrrrkakingkakingkakingtchotchotchochhhhchhhh*ding to connect any longer we still love our chat rooms (only now we call it Discord).
I got really swept up in the scene with the coach and the wind sprints and Code of Contact.
Never, for one instant, forget that the name on the front of your jersey is more important than the one on the back!" This was my favorite of the mantras.
Nice to see the Jim qualities we admire were there even from high school - honor and leadership - and that his goofy brothers were also the same - funny though how they reminded me of Fred and George a bit here. And you know how I love a good jixing - but in this case ugh had it not been for it she might not have ever dated Roy, that hurts. (JK)
Looking forward to getting into this one.
Author's Response: Glad to have you here for this one. Ah 90's era internet, such a wonderful state of ignorant bliss we lived in back then. I also really liked the wind spring and code of conduct scene. I bascially took the wind sprints and that quote from the movie "Miracle" about the 1980 US Olympic Hockey team. Great movie.
Hope you were paying attention in this chapter. ;)
Looking forward to hearing the rest of your thoughts on this one.