1 [Report This]Date: April 05, 2020 02:22 pm Title: Chapter 8
“I bet that’s a game I’m better at than you. Want to find out?”
Ya OKAY BT, I SEE YOU.
Author's Response: Narrator: And in fact, he was better. At least, up until that point. 👀
1 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2020 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 8
Yeah, I think Pam's got some new memories to take over that first initial shower. Jim too. I mean holy smokes that was hot.
Glad to see them fit so perfectly together like this. I'm sure there will be more ups and downs as this story goes on, but for now at least it's lovely to see them enjoy each other for a bit.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! There definitely will be some ups and downs coming soon...
1 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2020 06:04 pm Title: Chapter 8
Holy cow. Wow.
First of all, this story is amazing. Who knew that Jim and Pam being teachers in the 60's and Jim having a dark, secret, dangerous past would be this thrilling. I can't wait to see what comes out of this, it's so good.
Author's Response: 😊😊 thank you so much! I am so happy that you’re pleased with it. It’s been so much fun to write and I hope you keep enjoying!
Date: April 03, 2020 04:47 pm Title: Chapter 8
“She didn’t want to compare Jim to Roy, because there was truly no comparison.”
This. This is it. This is the whole damn thing.
Oh boy, how did you turn the whole casino night/misinterpret conversation around, tip it into its head and have it land on its feet so smoothly?! Wow. Seriously. Wow.
Rating well and truly earned in all the best ways. Another wonderful update!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It’s been really fun to reuse dialogue from different episodes put them somewhere new. I’m glad you are enjoying it!
1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2020 09:35 am Title: Chapter 7
I was excited to see an update for this fic!
Good to get some backstory on how Jim ended up at the school and his "secret " life. The dialogue between them is just perfect- I forgot I was actually reading!
And this:
“I like that job.” Jim met her eyes and their gazes locked. It felt significant."
Oh, it was significant alright!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Thanks for writing
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I enjoyed filling in the backstory for this version of Jim. I hope you keep enjoying!
1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2020 07:22 am Title: Chapter 7
"You serve, if you don’t mind,” she requested. “I managed a can opener with my left hand, but I don’t trust my ability to ladle.”" I don't know why, but this sentence made me laugh.
I love the entire backstory you've created for Jim. It's so rich in details, and real, and it makes sense that he would end up where he is now.
"I like that job." I was so busy swooning over that moment that I almost missed the part where you brought in the name of this story as dialogue and I love it all so much, because now I just want to sit around and solve puzzles with Jim.
And then you brought in the dialogue from Casino Night and this entire chapter is so damn good, I keep going back and rereading sections I've just read.
So looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Coley! The ladle line also made me laugh so I’m glad someone else thinks it’s funny! And I appreciate the comments on Jim’s backstory. I have worried that it would read as being too “out there” or not believable, so I’m happy to see that that’s not the case! I hope you continue to enjoy it!
Date: March 25, 2020 07:03 am Title: Chapter 6
Oh, BT. I've missed your writing so much. Are you sure you aren't the third member of Subtle Sexuality?
Jim cutting her out of her clothes was a scene I did not know I needed in my life, but I'm here for it. And then the whole shower scene itself? It's fine. I'm fine. And on top of the Desire That Shall Not Be Named, you've got poor Jim and his guilt and his need to make everything better for her and I just really appreciate all of it and I'm too excited to get to the next chapter to say anymore.
Jim stayed in the bathroom for a very long time. I bet he did.
Author's Response: Thanks for leaving a review on both chapters! And I’m glad you are totally fine after the shower scene 😉 I think in chapters soon to come things maybe won’t be so subtle...stay tuned!
Date: March 23, 2020 03:59 am Title: Chapter 7
I shouldn’t laugh, but of course Roy was all over the old school equivalent of “send nudes” during the war. Of course...
I don’t know how you managed to pull the heat from the last chapter back into this sweetness, but you made it work, and you made it work SO damn well. I love this version of them so much.
Author's Response: Right? He’s totally a “send nudes” guy. He’d probably ask for them to be chiseled into stone had this been an Ancient Greek story, I bet. 🙄 Thank you so much! After the shower scene I was like “oh am I actually ready for them to get hot and heavy? I don’t actually think so...” so I felt like I had to write myself out of the (shower) corner I’d written myself into. So thank you for saying so! I hope you keep enjoying!
Date: March 22, 2020 09:38 pm Title: Chapter 7
I love this story!!! What a great chapter. More please!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope to update again within the next couple of days!
1 [Report This]Date: March 22, 2020 07:20 pm Title: Chapter 7
Awwwww. So sweet and yet I think what you did with setting up this Jim's backstory was really strong. It gives us an idea of why he'd do this kind of work, but also that doing it isn't actually his passion but his distraction. Which means that when he finds something new, like, say, Pam, he is still open to it. Good writing!
Author's Response: That means so much coming from you, Comfect! Thank you so much!
Author's Response: That means so much coming from you, Comfect! Thank you so much!
Date: March 22, 2020 05:48 pm Title: Chapter 7
Ok, I'm going to review as I read otherwise I get the feeling I'll forget what I wanted to write. So without further ado;
Love Pam's after effects of the shower. Yeah, got a feeling that will stay with her for awhile. Until other memories replace it. ;) Love the descriptions of the meal. Simple, mismatched, but perfect.
Grrr. I'm reading this at work and we just got a call. Back to reviewing as soon as I'm able.
Ok, an hour later and now that that's all done, back to this chapter and back to reviewing.
No bearded Jim anymore? Ok. Nice to see the start of real honesty. Keep it up. Yeah, I agree with you there Jim, Roy's an asshole. Glad that's all out of the way before any of this all started.
A little heartbreaking to hear about Pete. However if there is a silver lining it's that through that Jim got into his current job and eventually met Pam. So that's a good thing, right?
D'awww what a great use of that line from Casino Night. Very different feelings with this setting. Very nice.
Oooh! There's a twist! Josh as the potential bad guy? Looking forward to seeing where this goes.
Good on you Pam. Not running away or anything. Not that she could go anywhere really. Still I love that she's still there to support him. Also that she's not scared to want his support too. Her asking him to lay down next to him was just all sorts of sweet.
Great chapter. Hope to see more soon.
Author's Response: I have to admit that I was inspired by you and “Silver Wings” to try and find ways to incorporate pieces of dialogue in ways that maybe change what they mean or the impact they have. So much good stuff is there for us to use, you know? And I know, I know. Bearded Jim is one of the best Jim’s but I just loved the idea of her being able to see his whole face while he was being so vulnerable with her. The beard will come back, lol. Thank you so much for another great review!
1 [Report This]Date: March 22, 2020 05:48 pm Title: Chapter 7
This is so great! The story and dialogue are excellent. I also like the image of Jim in his Jack Ryan (season 2) style clothes. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I’ve put more work into this one than into any other, I think, so I’m so glad to hear that you are enjoying it. I hope to deliver a new chapter soon!
Date: March 22, 2020 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 7
Ah. You did the thing where you say the title in the story. Am I berating myself silently for only just understanding it now? Maybe.
This was so sweet! I love that Pam sees the kiss as more of something to break her than the shower (because the shower almost broke me, chick, let me tell ya).
I also loved all of the little callbacks to the show. “The Paper Salesman.” I will laugh about that one for a long, long time...
Author's Response: I’m a sucker for the “put the title in the story” lol, but also I wanted to really drive home what the title means, cause it’s kind of abstract? Or maybe I’m just into it that trope. 🤷🏻r05;a92;a039;
Thanks friend! I’m glad you are liking it. I got kind of worried about writing myself into corners but I think I made it make sense without backtracking too much or messing with the character development that I’ve been working on. Does that make sense? Anyway, as always I appreciate your reading and reviewing and let me tell you can’t wait to read that 45 chapter fic you’re working on! 😉
1 [Report This]Date: March 20, 2020 03:54 am Title: Chapter 6
Oh man, I'm really getting into this! You always write the physical tension between them wonderfully.
Author's Response: Thank you! One of the most fun things to write, for sure. I hope you keep enjoying it!
Date: March 16, 2020 04:35 pm Title: Chapter 6
Very, very steamy! And I can see you're going to draw it out, but please not for 2 years. This is a great story.
Author's Response: I’m watching The Office right now (because when are any of us not, lol) and Angela said “I DON’T WANT GARBAGE, I WANT SPRINKLES!” right as I read your review! I thought that was funny. And no, I have no plans to go another 2 years without updating. Cross my heart! Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2020 12:05 am Title: Chapter 6
Oh. My. God. You’re killing me in the very best way. I can’t with this story. It’s so good. That description of the desire intertwined with everything else was incredibly well written. Please know that I will be anxiously awaiting the next update...
Author's Response: 😊 thank you so much!! I am looking forward to writing more soon and hope it keeps you so excited to read! Thank you for your kind words!
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2020 09:49 pm Title: Chapter 6
“Jim stayed in the bathroom for a very long time“
Hi I’m 12 years old and even after a steamy shower scene this made me laugh out loud.
Ya did good, kid.
Author's Response: Hi I’m also 12 and giggled for a long time after writing it. What’d he do in there, I wonder?
Date: March 15, 2020 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 5
“She just wanted her grilled cheese sandwiches and Coca-Cola, not bandaged shoulders and a stranger she thought was her best friend.“
Wow okay WELCOME BACK HERES A GUT PUNCH. Kidding. I love it. I missed this story so much. Glad to have you back :)
Author's Response: So glad to be back! You were an integral part of the bullying 😂
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2020 07:23 pm Title: Chapter 6
So that was a very nice opposite of social distancing. Although I suppose you're allowed to do that with the people you're isolated WITH. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Who needs social distancing when you’ve got a tiny shower and Jim Halpert? 😉
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2020 06:57 pm Title: Chapter 6
Ok - I'm all caught up from chapter 1! Wow! I'm hoping that there won't be a 2 year wait for an update- you'd be killing me not so softly there...
Like Pam, I have a lot of questions. And Jim, what self control you have-a perfect gentleman there (well, minus the almost getting her killed)!
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: I’m hoping to have Jim exercise a little less self control very soon. 😉 thanks so much for reading it all and letting me know what you think!!
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2020 03:52 pm Title: Chapter 6
Uh, yeah, steam. In more than one way. Jim the gentleman here is nice to see. Like I said last time he's taking care of her needs. I just wonder how long it's going to be until he starts taking care of her wants. Or maybe she'll be the one who moves forwards for more of those wants.
Great update. Looking forward to more as ever.
Author's Response: You I sat there thinking “this entire chapter takes place in the shower, should I add some substance?” And then I thought “nahh, I can do substance later!” 😉 Glad you enjoyed! I have some thoughts on how other things will get taken care of in later chapters...can’t wait for you to see! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2020 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ok - this is my first time reading this one (where was it hiding ?!)! Fantastic and sucked me right in... and that shirt, the definition, the setting- so fun! I will be binge reading the other chapters tonight!
Author's Response: Lol! It was hiding in the little known “I had an unplanned almost two year absence” section of MTR! 😂 thank you so much for your kind words! I hope you enjoy the rest!
1 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2020 06:36 am Title: Chapter 5
I really love the way you describe the cabin because I can see it perfectly in my head and it’s very cozy and good. Even better that it’s Jim’s family’s place.
Oh. Oh man. They’re stuck in this cabin alone for a week? And Jim has to help Pam undress and shower? Be still my trope loving heart. This is everything we could ask for!
Please don’t disappear on that cliffhanger! ;)
Author's Response: Thanks for mentioning the cabin description as one of the parts you enjoyed! I love a good descriptive paragraph about a character’s surroundings. It makes it seem more real inside my head. I also love a good trope! I hope to mix it up some later, probably also with some more tropes, haha! And I can promise no extended waits for cliffhanger resolutions. Thanks so much Coley!
Date: March 11, 2020 06:32 am Title: Chapter 4
Oh, I’m so glad you’re back! True story- as I started reading this chapter and before I figured out it was a nightmare, I thought ‘did BT forget that Pal was shot? Why are they in the library again?’ I’ll never doubt you again, lady. This was a great chapter to ease back into the story with, but mostly, I just really appreciate that even while injured, panicked, and disoriented, Pam still knows enough to take a few minutes to check out Jim at the phone booth. Love that for them. And me.
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2020 04:54 am Title: Chapter 5
Don't even joke about leaving that s long cliffhanger! But seriously I love that this is Jim's family place not a government one and I'm intrigued by a week of isolation. Should be fun for them both, injury aside.
Author's Response: I know, I know, it was a mean joke. I promise I’m not abandoning this story again! I’ll see it finished. I have some fun things planned and some maybe not so fun things planned...I can’t wait to hear what you think!