Date: October 26, 2018 06:56 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh man... Canadian Roy is slick, I'll give him that much. Don't fall for it, Pam.
Okay, I thought that the flashback to Jim and Pam's coffee not-date was adorable but then, THEN I got to the last scene. And that last line. And now I'm screaming.
That's what big ass glasses of beer will do to you, Jimbo.
1 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2018 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 5
Toby looked uncomfortable to be alive. That's the best line I've read all night. Amazing.
The banter between Jim and Pam is really great and I love that they've managed to find a way to work easily together. And don't think I didn't see you slip Roy Anderson into this story and TWO Niagara callbacks...
1 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2018 06:37 pm Title: Chapter 4
"Bosses don't punch employees." I think Ryan could be the exception to this rule. Just saying.
This is so cute! I'm really enjoying it.
1 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2018 06:32 pm Title: Chapter 3
"I used your toothbrush" made me laugh out loud.
I really do love the use of the other characters.. Andy and Kelly are still great. And travel, you say? This could get interesting...
1 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2018 06:22 pm Title: Chapter 2
Daaaang. Drunk Pam is feisty! lol, until she's passed out at least.
I like this new setting instead Dundler Mifflin... This is about to get good and awkward isn't it?
1 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2018 06:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
I've finally got the chance to dive into this story! Oh boy, Drunk Pam sure seems like she's about to have the best night ever, huh?
Date: October 26, 2018 01:31 pm Title: Chapter 9
Always leaving me wanting more! Loved this chapter. I like how they are slowly but finally coming together. What fun shenanigans will karaoke bring?
Author's Response: Some fun dramatic ones 😉
Date: October 25, 2018 11:42 pm Title: Chapter 9
I like this chapter. After some of the awkwardness prior to this it feels good to see them slow down a tad. Canon Jim and Pam work so well since they're such good friends. I like that this version of Jim and Pam are following suit. Clearly they're attracted to each other which is lots of fun to see.
I also like how Jim is encouraging Pam's art here too. That's another staple from the show you've got working well too. And that's the thing, there are so many elements of classic JAM that are great. Seeing those elements in a new light in this tale is just as compelling.
Author's Response: You are like the greatest reviewer haha thank you so much for reading again! JAM is really the best couple I know of.
Date: October 14, 2018 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 8
I like that Jim and Pam are getting more comfortable with each other. Their friendship is growing even with a few hiccups along the way.
Roy is still a pain. The whole not listening to what Pam is saying or picking up on her non-verbals is in keeping with what we see in canon. To me, he just comes across as a sleezy jerk who still just wants to get in Pam's pants.
Date: October 06, 2018 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 7
Great chapter. To me this is a variation on the tension that is the early canon JAM relationship. Obviously they're attracted to each other, but early on in the relationship there's just something in the way. In the show it was Pam being engaged and then later Jim being with Karen. Here you've got the same feel but with the two of them being, almost to prideful, if that's the way to put it, to really talk.
Makes for a very compelling story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for always reviews with your awesome comments!!! That’s basically what I am going for and it just gets even crazier hahaha thanks again!
1 [Report This]Date: October 03, 2018 09:12 pm Title: Chapter 6
Let’s get rid of Roy!! And Iove the ending. Jim outing himself because he’s drunk. Why must you leave us in suspense? Can’t wait for the next one 😊
Author's Response: I love it when you comment :):):):) I just love love suspense. But trust me this is going to be a loooooooooong story so please stay around :)
1 [Report This]Date: October 03, 2018 06:59 pm Title: Chapter 6
Okay, I’m obsessed with this story, especially because it’s so un-Office but still Jim and Pam. You’re doing a great job with the characters, and I can’t wait to see how Jim and Pam get together!
Also, “This wasn’t bitch beer, Beesly,” made me SNORT.
Author's Response: I literally just screamed when I saw your comment. I had to read your pen name twice. I like love you!!!! You are an amazing writer and just omg I'm fan girling right now. You are just amazing!!!! And thank you so so much!!!! I'm glad I made you snort!!!!
Date: October 03, 2018 02:58 pm Title: Chapter 6
That's a very different take on Roy. You made it hard to not like him so there's that. Can't blame Pam for not enjoying the attention though. It's natural to feel good when someone says something validating to you. Still being the JAM lover I am, I'm still rooting for Jim and Pam to figure things out. Seems like it's going that way.
Author's Response: Right?!?! Always a sucker for the wrong men. Jam will definitely happen. I do plan on this to be a long story.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2018 03:33 pm Title: Chapter 5
You are too sweet!
This story is great and I’m having so much fun working as beta for you :D
Date: September 29, 2018 03:29 pm Title: Chapter 5
Good chapter. I liked their interaction on the plane. Good friendship building going on there. I also think it's great that Pam is starting to doodle sports sketches. Great new way to show her artistic side.
One thing I'd say is for you to remember your audience. While this is an AU it's also still an Office fanfic. Most people who come to this site are already aware of the various personalities of the cast from the Office. Also this was the second time you've introduced us to the cast. Yes that one was from Jim's POV and now this is from Pam's, but again we (the reader) already know most of what you've said. Unless there's a specific trait you want to highlight then maybe go into further detail.
Other than that I'm looking forward to seeing how the Toronto meeting goes. The mention of Roy sparked my interest.
Author's Response: Thanks for always reviewing means a lot! Hopefully the Roy spark lives up to your expectations!
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2018 12:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
Roy Anderson is coming into the mix??? Can’t wait to readwhat happens there. I hope he doesn’t get too much in the way. And it would be so much fun to see if Jim figures out a way to take Pam on his personal vacation. When is chapter 6 coming???
1 [Report This]Date: September 26, 2018 07:43 pm Title: Chapter 4
I like this chapter but it’s so short :( Will
We have the next one soon? You’ve got me hooked on this story
Author's Response: Super super soon and it's very long!
1 [Report This]Date: September 25, 2018 12:15 pm Title: Chapter 4
Very sweet. Obviously they're still a bit awkward about the previous night, but it's nice to see things starting to bloom.
Date: September 21, 2018 05:41 am Title: Chapter 3
Kinda cute little moment there as they got past their awkwardness. I do like that they both seem more mature afterwards. I'm sure there's still underlying tension, how could there not be, but you had them both handling themselves well after that first meeting.
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thanks for keeping up with the story seriously means a lot!
Date: September 20, 2018 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 3
OMG!! I love this story so much (I know I sound like Kelly). I really hope you post the next chapter soon. There are so many fun and fluffy things that can come from this story. I’m imagining Pam moving into Jim’s place since he has all those extra rooms and she doesn’t have where to live . And then shenanigans ensue
Author's Response: You're so cute hahah plenty of shenanigans will ensue it's just all that basic plot bs we gotta get through first <3
1 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2018 10:55 pm Title: Chapter 2
I really like it and am looking forward to chapter 3!
1 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2018 10:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
This story is so much fun! Please continue soon. I can't wait to read what happens next,
1 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2018 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oooo... this is going to be a fun one! Can’t wait for more!
Date: September 03, 2018 07:36 am Title: Chapter 2
I'll add to what another reviewer has said. There are a few errors that distract as one reads. Probably the biggest I saw was the line; "But nine bedrooms and seven bedroom its get's extremely lonely." More than likely you wanted to say something like; "But with nine bedrooms and seven bathroom it gets extremely lonely." A lot of times when I've finished writing a chapter I'll leave it alone for a full day. Get my mind off writing and go do something else. After a day has gone by I'll go back and start re-reading what I've written and I find I catch a lot of the errors I didn't see before.
Other than that we've basically transplanted Dunder-Mifflin here. It'll be interesting to see the characters bounce off each other like that. Of course it'll also be interesting to see the Jim and Pam relationship unfold with this kind of start.
Author's Response: Thanks for another review!!!!! I love that idea about leaving it alone for a day before going back to it. I think I will definitely do that. Thanks so much :):);)
1 [Report This]Date: September 02, 2018 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 2
OK, first off I really love this story and you've gotten off to an amazing start. It's intriquing that you've basically moved The Office to this setting and I'm excited to see how it all works. I love that you have Karen working there and as Jim's ex because I'm hoping that you plan on there being the romance and love between Jim and Pam that they have on the show and that there won't be a lot of obstacles to it. I really hope that we get to see Karen watch this happen and see that they are soul mates and that Jim is truly in love, unlike he was with her, and she gets to be jealous. Probably obvious but I kinda hate Karen. While it was, I don't know, for her I guess, how Jim ended things on the show (my sympathy doesn't run deep for her because let's face it, she really pushed Jim into the position he was in. She knew his deep feelings for Pam and could clearly see Pam's feeling for him yet rather than bowing out so she could minimize the hurt to herself she tried to force the relationship in a way that never felt comfortable or natural. she pushed Jim to do things he didn't want and to be a person other than who he naturally was. Pam wanted and loved Jim for who he was, accepted him as he was. Karen saw him as raw material and loved who she thought she could turn him into. Anyhow, I'd love to see Karen have to watch them and be jealous because we, and Pam, got cheated of that on the show with Karen leaving right away. When Karen realized Pam had feelings for Jim, and vice versa, she decided to mark her territory and did things to throw the relationship in Pam's face and make both Jim and Pam uncomfortable. Anyhow, wow... sorry about that side tangent. I guess I have more resentment for how Karen was than I even realized, ANYHOW...
I would suggest you think about maybe looking into a beta. While the story is fabulous, there are a fair anount of errors that takes the reader just momentarily out of the story. If not that, maybe read it over a few more times yourself with a more critical eye. I kinda hate even suggesting a beta because I know that adds time onto how long it takes to get it posted as you have to wait to get it back. Its just something to give a little thought to. Other than that I love how this has been set up. Really love the alternating points of view. I'm praying the updating will happen quickly. I hate so much when I fall in love with a story but have to wait and wait and wait for updates as I'm dying to know what happens next. I'm hoping this will be a nice long story as I believe you have it set up where there's a lot of story that could be told. I'll be waiting on pins and needles for more. Thanks for sharing this with us!
Author's Response: Wow this is amazing haha. I got really excited to see a review then I pulled it up and I was just like WOW. This is an amazing tangent ;) I have wanted to look into a beta just haven't known where to start exactly either. Update will definitely be on the way!