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Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 13, 2018 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 10

There most assuredly needs to be a Halloween chapter. Going out trick-or-treating as a Freshman in college was the best. Especially when some of the houses we visited were out profs.

Author's Response: Oh that would be fun! And a good way to get more of our supporting characters in the mix. Jan, David Wallace, Phyllis, Creed...who knows!

Reviewer: agian18 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 13, 2018 06:21 pm Title: Chapter 10

Oh my god, don’t wrap it up! Please no! Lol. I vote “drunk Halloween Jim who talks a lot about how much he likes Pam when he’s drinking and Pam has to take care of him after” but that’s just my preference 😉

Author's Response:

I like that idea very much *grins evilly and flexes typing fingers*

Ooh, and it would give me a chance to incorporate Jim's lame Halloween costumes and Pam's adorable ones. 

Niiice. <---please read in Kevin's voice. Thx ;)

Reviewer: BecauseOfYou Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 13, 2018 02:02 pm Title: Chapter 8

Oh man :( Poor pam And jim... and it was such a lovely day too!
One thing I feel is very important with an AU like this is for the author to show us why jim and Pam are they way they are... Why they’re feeling like they’ve been best friends forever after knowing each other after only one lunch together, why that connection is what it is…and not rely on what we know from the show to back up the story. And I feel like you’ve really done well with that so far.
I’m really looking forward to the next chapter to see how jim gets his butt of his mess.
(Sexual assault is not ok Katy!)

Reviewer: agian18 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 13, 2018 04:10 am Title: Chapter 8

I thrive on conflict 😬 I love how you’ve been incorporating little lines from the show, but in tour own context. I see a lot of authors try this and it just seems forced or way too cheesy, but you’ve done it seamlessly. I also liked when Pam realized that she might be overreacting. And making the first move! I like modern day Beesly. I can’t wait to see how Jim digs his way out of this one!

Author's Response:

Oh yay I’m glad those are working haha. It’s one of my favorite things in fic, when done right. 

I have two more chapters almost done! Gosh, teenagers are a pain.  But never fear, our babes will work it out ♥a039;

Reviewer: Merria Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12, 2018 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 8

Cliffhanger!!!! It’s always something with these two, isn’t it. Either Roy or Katy or Karen.
I really like how you’ve written the interactions between Jim and Pam. Hope they resolve this Katy thing soon. Can’t wait to read more

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12, 2018 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 8

Ah yes, tension. I for one do enjoy quite a bit of fluff, the fact that things don't go quite right makes the characters more relateable. So good on you for that.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 12, 2018 06:27 pm Title: Chapter 7

I like how you're adding scenes from the show in new ways with this. Great way to keep a hold of where the characters come from by doing that.

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 12, 2018 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 6

Still all very cute and sweet. I like how you're setting up this romance. It doesn't feel forced, just Jim and Pam (in college granted) being themselves.

The thing I think this story could use would be some tension or conflict. Now those words can mean a lot of different things. Be it either Roy or Karen trying to get back in the picture, family drama, Prof. Michael Scott being insane, medical emergency, the list can go on. Not that I want this version of Jim and Pam to break up, because they're very great together. Something that would cause them to come together even closer through shared experience.

Author's Response:

I think so too, I’m just deciding how to do it right without derailing their journey TOO much. I’m thinking either Karen or Katy would be a good speed bump to throw at them (& I actually kinda like Karen, despite how I portrayed her at the party, so I’m leaning towards Katy.) my next chapter is still pretty damned fluffy, but with a tiny twist of angst/misunderstanding that might help with that balance. 

Thanj you for the feedback, as always :)  

Reviewer: Merria Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 11, 2018 08:28 pm Title: Chapter 6

I like that you’re taking your time exploring how they get to know each other. I think that their interactions are really fun, well written. Hopefully they’ll get together sooner than later :)

Author's Response: That’s the plan! Haha but getting there is half the fun right? ;) trying to decide our lovers’ next move now! 

Reviewer: agian18 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11, 2018 07:32 pm Title: Chapter 6

It was a classic “oops we fell asleep and now we’re cuddling” but, but I love how you did it—all clothes, and Pam actually jumping out of bed before Jim had a chance to realize it. It gave them this sense of innocence that don’t ishally see. I love this story! I can’t wait to see them finally fall for each other :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I’m glad that played well. I really want them to fall for each other in an organic way, although for plots sake there will be a few speed bumps! But would it really be JAM if there wasn’t? <3

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11, 2018 01:52 pm Title: Chapter 5

Lots of fun seeing everyone from the office bounce off each other in this context. Jim and Pam are still being very adorable.

Reviewer: BringingTheJam Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10, 2018 05:54 pm Title: Chapter 1

I love this story!!!!

Reviewer: agian18 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 10, 2018 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 5

You have everyone written so seamlessly into the college life! I love it. I also love how you incorporated Karen and Jim having a history back in high school, and how Pam is already jealous. Awesome work!

Reviewer: Merria Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 10, 2018 09:32 am Title: Chapter 4

Can't wait for the party

Reviewer: agian18 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 10, 2018 03:43 am Title: Chapter 4

Wow, yup. If Facebook was around when Jim was figuring out his feelings for Pam, he definitely would’ve been the Facebook stalking kind. I love seeing this new present day element added! Can’t wait for Darryl’s party!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I’m relieved and happy to hear it’s coming across as true to the character haha. 

Darryl’s party is in the works! Hoping to have it posted tonight, and it will be a longer chapter than the previous ones! Looking forward to introducing Drunk!Pam, a la The Dundies episode :D

Reviewer: Pan_cake_Cats Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 09, 2018 11:29 pm Title: Chapter 4

College AUs are always have a special place in my heart (the first fanfiction I read was a JAM college AU) and having just started college my self, this is especially poignant. I can't wait to see what happens next! Thank you

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 09, 2018 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 4

Short and sweet. Still a very fun tale you've got going here.

Author's Response: Thank you! I’m glad you’re enjoying it, the feedback is invaluable! :) 

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 09, 2018 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 3

Still all very sweet. I was grinning the whole time I was reading it. Can't wait to see where this is going.

Reviewer: SadParallel Signed [Report This]
Date: September 09, 2018 04:00 pm Title: Chapter 3

Okay, I'm loving this so far, but please, I'm begging you, don't make Roy a thing in this. I always find Roy angst just drags everything down into the gutter and just fuckin'... ugh. Anyway, as I said, loving this, loving just wrapping myself up in this fluffy blanket of relationships that actually work and this doesn't sound very heterosexual for a late teens guy so I'm going to go ahead and stop now.
Please continue.


(and please no Roy okay thanks)

Author's Response:

I feel you on that, I honestly can’t stand Roy so if he is in this at all, it will probably be a footnote or a reference to a high school relationship that didn’t end well! I like to write Pam more like she was towards the end of the show, funny and more brave but still a little insecure at times. 

Thank you for reading and for the feedback :)  

Reviewer: Merria Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 09, 2018 09:59 am Title: Chapter 3

I’m loving this story! I can’t wait to see what happens at the party. I really hope you post a new chapter soon. Love college AUs

Reviewer: DoctorCinderella Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2018 09:46 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is just too cute! They still have that funny/dorky/romantic dynamic with some added awkwardness that comes from being a college freshman. I’m excited to see where this one goes!

Reviewer: agian18 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2018 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 2

It will be interesting to see Jim and Pam in a more present-day world (I'm assuming, anyway, since there is an emoji keyboard). Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I figured since I was doing an AU anyway, I might as well set it more present-day. I was in middle school when the show first aired! And it’s whole new set of challenges that come with today’s media-saturated world! I think I’ll probably have the emoji thing come up again, but that’s about it. Maybe have Ryan trying to get Jim on Tinder ;D

Reviewer: BecauseOfYou Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2018 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 2

Love this so far! I’m definitely looking forward to more!

Reviewer: warrior4 Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 08, 2018 04:27 pm Title: Chapter 2

Very sweet. I like how their relationship is just developing naturally. Jim and Dwight as roommates. Oh sweet merciful crap the pranks that Jim and Pam could come up with! That could be a fun angle to explore.

Reviewer: Pan_cake_Cats Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: September 07, 2018 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 1

I am always up for a good college AU. This is super cute, can't wait to see what comes next.

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