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Woo hooo!!! Lovely from start to finish!
I really like that they had a reason for the tension and it could totally fall in canon. Bravo! And, the baby artist in me adored all the colors and artistic visions, all very apropos!

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for reviewing this old thing! I am very fond of it even though I was a little scared about writing so much lemon.

Cheers! 

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Thanks for the Birthday wishes Kuri.

Great chapter here. I liked that scene there where Jim said he didn't want to be her rebound before they got into anything really heavy. Good way to make sure they're on the same page. I'm really glad they're being honest with each other like this too.

Very steamy and detailed after that scene. Lots of vivid images that make it clear how right they are for each other. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks very much! It still feels weird to venture into MA territories... but it's also fun. ;)

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Ok, great use of the flashbacks (and of italics to separate them out). And I'm pumped to see where we go from here (and the balance of angst and romance from here on in). Great chapter.

Author's Response:

Thanks a lot!

I am not 100% sure where to take this from here. Not much further, I think. 

Interesting take on Pam's reaction. Clearly Jim is still forefront in her mind. That she wants to get things done quickly with Roy to move onto better things with the thought of Jim seems to be telling as to her state of mind. Still wondering why he didn't call though.

Author's Response:

Thanks a lot! 

I was going to explain that in the next chapter (this one), but this idea came out of the blue and I decided to go for it.  

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Chapter three was so very sweet and just lovely.
So I was really surprised by chapter four starting up so many years later, I wasn’t expecting this to be a “prior meeting” story. I love it though :) So well done!

Author's Response:

Thanks very much! This was the main idea from the start: having them meet in high school and then lose touch for a very long while so the jump was necessary.

Also, I love to write them this awkward. Thanks again! 

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A cute chapter with a bittersweet ending here. I did like it as the whole Jim and Pam dynamic came across well even with all the added tension. I do wonder if Pam is going to screw up enough courage to ask him why he didn't call way back when.

Nice job

Author's Response:

Thanks very much! It took me a while to decide how much tension was ok for this, so that they will still feel like Jim and Pam.

I wonder the same thing 

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Great way to slowly build from fluff to steam here. Don't really know what else to say other than well done.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot, w4!

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Great way for Jim and Pam to meet. Kind of fun that it was a quick meeting like this but they still had a great connection right away. Lots of great detail and good internal thoughts too.

Author's Response:

Thanks a lot! The idea is that everything happens fast, and has to be intense like that.

Chapter 3 is almost ready. 

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This is very well written in terms of the showing us and not just telling us how Pam is feeling and why. I enjoy Pam meets Jim moments and this is well done, plus I'm a sucker for Pam having broken up with Roy pre Jim. But it's not just context; you do a good job writing the specifics too.

Author's Response:

Thanks very very much!!  

It's a bit of a struggle to show and not to tell, but I'm glad it's working.  

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Oh, you had me from the description! I love the idea of titling the chapters after paintings and I can’t wait for chapter two!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Next chapter is almost done (I just want to revise it once more). If you're curious, the painting will be one by Hopper :)

I like this! Looking forward to chapter 2.

Author's Response: Thanks very much!