1 [Report This]Date: April 26, 2019 06:46 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
I'm so happy this is the episode you decided to work with for this story!
The vending machine prank is one of my favorites, so I love that it's included here; and I'm curious to see how it plays on loop.
Poor Pam. I feel for her, that her day to day routine is already a bit dull and she's stuck in a rut...the more I think about this Comfect, the more excited I am at the possibilities of how the next chapters can go -- the options are truly endless, and I can't wait to see what you come up with!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm planning to do a lot with the vending machine prank because it's the open which means it's sort of my equivalent of Bill Murray's alarm clock. Let me know as you go how you feel about the chapters!
Date: April 25, 2019 09:12 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
I thought of one more thing. So many of our fanfics are just telling the same story over and over with different endings. This story does that by design.
Author's Response: This is a really good point, and one I'll keep in mind as I go along. This is basically just me playing different fanfic authors along the way ;)
1 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2019 04:26 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
This is fantastic! Great idea and great writing. Pam's life is so routine and dull before Jim. Looking forward to chapter 2.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate hearing all of that.
1 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2019 12:11 am Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
Hooray new story! That was my first reaction. The second was, "Over 5,000 words for the first chapter? Comfect, you've outdone yourself!" In a good way of course. Glad you're taking up the torch for the "Booze Cruise" repeating time loop idea. I was quite frustrated when I got to the last chapter of the other Booze Cruise time loop story and it wasn't finished. Knowing you, I'm sure this one won't be left hanging.
Lots of great internal thoughts here. Setting things up in the non-AU realm first was wise I think. Make sure we have a base to start from. Pam's delight in all things with Jim was wonderful to see. The prank, skulduggery with Stanley, meaningful nods in the conference room, and of course the moment she shares with Jim on deck. There was enough internal thoughts to keep things interesting while summing up and moving through the episode in a good way. Nicely done in that regard.
Can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
Heh. Yeah, that was my single longest chapter ever, I think. That or V-J Day. I promise to at least get past chapter 2 (which is how far the other one got) and yeah, given my obsession with not leaving WIP unfinished it'll probably get finished too.
Thanks for the feedback on the story itself. You got exactly what I was trying to do, and I'm glad it succeeded. Thanks for the review!