Date: May 11, 2019 06:19 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
Your writing is so easy to read. The story just flows. I like how Pam is focusing on herself and what she feels, and not getting caught up in what other people feel. Looking forward to the next round of booze cruise!
Author's Response: Thank you! I tend to write Pam (and most other characters, if I'm honest, except Kelly and Michael) as fairly introspective, so I'm glad that's working for you here!
Date: May 11, 2019 05:39 pm Title: Chapter 6: I'm Game if You Are
Good on Pam this time around. I do like that she's using the not booze cruise time to reflect on things like this. I think its giving her a lot of perspective on the life she's led up to this point. That she's used that perspective to figure out what she feels about Roy and to crystallize how she feels about him was good to see.
Now she need to start thinking about what she does really want. Of course I think we all know where that eventually ends up, but seeing her figure that out will be fun to see.
Author's Response: Thank you! I think Pam is very hesitant to think about what she actually wants, both here and in the series, especially when it comes to deeper wants than "do some art" or "kiss Jim." So it will be a gradual progression, but I do indeed think we all know where she's going eventually (hint: see above under "kiss Jim").
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 06:13 pm Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
The beginning of this, when Pam is contemplating that she isn't special enough for this insane metaphysical experience, is so beautifully and heart-breakingly in-character. Well done, there.
But I laughed out loud at "get rid of the cheerleader"! Very nice moment, upgraded when you brought in Jim's sister (what a great characterization you gave her!) as the replacement. Again, you left me laughing out loud with the way Pam offered her a bridesmaid spot.
COmfect, this just keeps getting better and better. I have that great mix of dying to know what happens but thrilled with every creative way you keep stringing me along. I am HERE for it. :)
Author's Response: Aw, DC, thank you so much. I'm afraid this will be longer even than my usual (the chapters are all longer, for one thing, but also I feel like the concept requires a slow build) so I'm really glad to know you're still on board!
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 05:58 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Day Alone
This is my absolute favorite chapter so far because I love Healthy-Selfish Pam. That moment in the library where she pulled at the brochures was so quirky and beautiful and I love it and I'm not at all secretly going to beg for there to be some sort of link back to that Stamford, CT brochure.
Really, just Pam doing what PAM wants to do is lovely and I 100% believe this is how she would show herself some self-care. Well done, man. I can't wait to see where you take this story.
Author's Response: There will be a lot of healthy-selfish Pam and yes, the Stamford brochure 110% will make at least one reappearance. Thank you for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 05:54 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
First of all, genius to make Groundhog Day her fifth film choice AND for making it her playbook for how to survive the predicament she's in. (Wouldn't we all do that?)
Hurray for Michael being the (brief) word of wisdom. Granted the bar is low with those clowns, but I like that Michael said what Pam was thinking. Oh, and poor Pam to see and hear that THAT was how her very (seemingly) happy moment was bred.
Comfect, will she see Jim dump Katy? Will she hear Michael say "BFD. Engaged ain't married."? WILL SHE HEAR JIM SAY HE WOULD SAVE THE RECEPTIONIST?!?! Sorry, I'll sit down and stop yelling now.
Author's Response:
Thank you thank you! I saw an opportunity to integrate with canon there and I grabbed it with both hands, thanks for noticing ;)
I think those suggestions may just make it into the story. Possibly. Just possibly ;).
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 05:47 pm Title: Chapter 2: Once More, Without Feeling
So so so incredibly wonderfully gloriously good. Amazing little ways to capture the absurdity of this without it BEING absurd. That ending is So Wonderful and appropriate and makes absolute sense.
But can we talk about this little gem for a minute:
"He turned away, and then turned back before taking a step. “But just so you know, I’m not so sure Roy’s that good at noticing a really pretty face..”"
Is your goal for me to die when reading this because I DID when I read that so in-character subtle moment of Jim's?!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you DC! That is exactly what I intended except that I want you alive so I get to read the rest of Hello My Old Heart. ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2019 05:34 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
Oh, you. I have been waiting for this since you mentioned in a chat that one time. And you picked the Perfect episode and gave great canon insight to set up the following chapters. I am So Excited about this story. Seriously, I can't wait to see where you take it.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review waterfall! I'm so excited to have you read it.
Date: May 09, 2019 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
I was thinking that she could try kissing Jim...knowing or at least thinking she knows that the day will reset and he won't remember.
Author's Response: I think that is likely to happen one day, but it may take a little longer because I'm not sure those two can kiss without her realizing what she needs ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2019 12:15 am Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
The description of Pam’s life as boring and her weighing up what was “fair” with her unlimited time felt spot on to me. I’ve never really met a fandom version of Larissa that I didn’t like and this one is the same. I’m keen to hear what else she could potentially have to say to our sweet (slightly oblivious to the love of her life) Pam.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! We'll hear more from Larissa as this goes on (I'm afraid I've committed to a very long fic here, so it may take a while, but it will happen) and I'm really delighted to hear that you like her. And thanks specifically for the feedback on Pam's reflection about her life--that was important for me writing this so I'm so glad it landed!
Date: May 07, 2019 09:24 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
She's avoiding Jim. Some part of her knows that the key lies with him but she's avoiding it. Which makes for great reading. Thank you for this update.
Author's Response: This is exactly correct, I think, so thank you for noticing :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2019 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 5: Exeunt Cheerleader
Thanks for the follow up. Definitely a different dynamic with Larissa rather than Katy. Again you're being subtle with Pam and Jim, and to a degree with Larissa here. Which makes things good.
Weird analogy time here, but bear with me. Most of the times she's thinking about Jim it's almost as if she's striking flint to steel hoping for a fire to start in order to break the cycle. But the sparks haven't landed yet for the fire to start because she's not quite holding the flint and steel correctly yet. She's close, but not quite there. Since the flint and steel hasn't worked I get the feeling now she's figuratively going to try to rub two sticks together to get something to spark, but I think we all know that will end up being a dud as well. So she'll go back to flint and steel, which is causing sparks. She just needs to examine that a bit more closely and adjust how she strikes and the fire will catch.
Still doing a great job with this and thanks for using my idea.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I enjoy any reason to include Larissa, and I felt like it was a good build up towards Pam's eventual realizations. I like the analogy!
Date: May 05, 2019 12:06 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
Hmmm...Jim, have you ever thought about Pam's panties?? I love this. Very fun and dialogue of all characters is true to them. Dwight with the holster in his armpit is perfect!!
Author's Response: Thank you! And wouldn't you love to ask Jim that? ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2019 02:37 am Title: Chapter 4: A Day Alone
I can’t get enough of this, honestly.
At the end of each chapter I’m always thinking “Okay, what’s Pam gonna do next?” And in each chapter I’m pleasantly surprised
It’s really interesting to see the way you’ve interpreted Pam, and how you’ve shown her discovering what’s going on.
Another really great chapter :)
Author's Response: I hope you keep being pleasantly surprised! Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2019 02:06 am Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
Comfect! I really love this, I never knew I needed this until now
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! I love hearing this.
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2019 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Day Alone
I’m loving that she’s doing things a little differently with each re-do of the day. That line in Ch 2 from Jim about Roy not seeing pretty faces was just perfection - I’m still thinking about it after reading two more chapters. I’m glad Pam has gotten a glimpse into Roy’s true colours. I’m loving all the subtle ways that you’re revealing that Pam is very in love with Jim, even though she doesn’t realize it in those moments. Can’t wait to see how her next re-do pans out!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm hoping to be at least a little subtle with this even though we all know where it's going, so I appreciate hearing that it's working!
Date: May 03, 2019 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Day Alone
That was a different take on what I thought Pam would do. However I do like it. To her mind she's got all the time in the world, so why not make the most of it? I like she's figuring out just how much she let Roy take over and how much she doesn't want it to be like that anymore. She wants to start exploring who SHE is rather than who Pam and Roy or Pam and Whoever is. Great to see. However I think she'll have to head back to the Booze Cruise at some point. Still this was a nice break.
Author's Response: I didn't want to be too too predictable, but I'm very glad this worked for you. I'm interested to know what you think going forward.
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2019 05:55 pm Title: Chapter 4: A Day Alone
I liked a lot how Pam got to be herself - and discuver herself - in this chapter. And it got me wondered, what would I do with a Groundhound day (I haven't seen that movie). Thanks a lot for a great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I recommend the movie (some of it has aged not so well, but it's done better I think than most 1980s comedies...and it's a great story idea).
Date: May 01, 2019 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
This is so fun to read. Very unique idea for a story. Thinking of ideas...she could have a big conversation with Katy about Jim where Katy tells Pam that she feels like Jim is holding back. Almost like he's in love with someone else.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate it, and I will make use of your idea, which I also appreciate!
1 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2019 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
So far my favourite chapter. Since you're taking suggestions, maybe make one iteration in which she tries to interact with Jim as much a possible?
Thanks for posting!
Author's Response: I am taking suggestions, and that one will come true. Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: May 01, 2019 02:15 pm Title: Chapter 3: A Woman with a Plan
I liked how you skipped through the first parts of the day here and got right to the Booze Cruise, since that's the salient point of this story. She's making progress for sure here. See what happened with her relationship with Roy first. They've been together so long it makes complete sense that trying to figure out that relationship would be the first place she goes to.
I also like how she's now aware of the time loops. The first one was yes a shock, but now that she knows whats coming it's time to start experiment. As a reader we know she's coming to the first part of the situation. Roy isn't right for her.
You've been subtle about her interactions with Jim, but what is there should hopefully clue her in. If in the next round she realizes that a bit more I think it might be interesting if during the day she asks Jim if he's bringing Larissa on the boat and seeing how the effects of not having Katy there. But again this is your story not mine.
Author's Response: Thank you as always for the detailed feedback. We will definitely get a loop like that, and thank you for the suggestion!
Date: April 30, 2019 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 2: Once More, Without Feeling
LOL! I really liked this second chapter. Pam's confusion is spot on, and so is Jim. Also the line about the really pretty face made me awww aloud.
Looking forward to chapter 3!
Author's Response: I'm glad to hear it! Thanks for the feedback :)
1 [Report This]Date: April 30, 2019 11:26 am Title: Chapter 2: Once More, Without Feeling
Interesting!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: April 30, 2019 10:49 am Title: Chapter 2: Once More, Without Feeling
I was wondering how she'd react to the first loop. You really made it seem realistic. With her waking up thinking the previous night had happened. I really liked how with her there to buy the pencil cup, Dwight starts going off the deep end. That her presence is a calming influence that keeps things from getting to far out of control. Or at least her "normal" presence. Now that she's into the loops, it makes a lot of sense that things get a bit discombobulated. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm going for realism within the absurdity of the premise, so I'm glad that's working so far. And yes, good catch; that's exactly what I was thinking of "normal Pam" as, a calming presence. Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2019 04:41 am Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
Very nice setup. I enjoyed the before work scene that can be woven into the Groundhog day theme so well. Looking forward to the next chapters You are such a talented writer.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I look forward to hearing what you think of the chapters as I build the various AU days Pam lives through.
1 [Report This]Date: April 27, 2019 06:04 pm Title: Chapter 1: Day 1
I wondered which day you’d be groundhog-ing after reading the synopsis, & I was not disappointed! I definitely guessed wrong though, my first thought was Casino Night.
I loved that you turned Michael into a verb, very apt. I also loved the description of the prank on Dwight. I’m really looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
Author's Response: I strongly considered Casino Night, but it seemed too obvious for Pam to figure out what she should change. Booze Cruise is a little more subtle, I think. Thanks for the feedback!