1 [Report This]Date: June 24, 2019 08:16 am Title: Chapter 3: You're the broken one but I'm the only one who needed saving
Loving the story! Can’t wait for a new update
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2019 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 3: You're the broken one but I'm the only one who needed saving
So you've given us a real treat here. I've said for a while that one of the biggest problems Jim and Pam ever had was that they had a hard time really communicating with each other. It kept them apart S1-S3 and reared it's head again in S9. But here we have something different.
They're really talking to each other. Yes, they're scared and nervous, but they're talking. Great job in writing out those feelings too. I really liked how Jim finds a balance between being her friend, but still making sure she knows he's very interested in her. I like that Pam did come to him. That her first thought was to talk to Jim rather than Roy I think is very telling. She's trusts Jim with her feelings more than the man she's engaged to. Hopefully she figures that out and thinks about what that could mean for her relationships.
Then that kiss at the end. Great image. Can't wait to see where this one goes.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind comments. I probably have them talking more than their characters would, but I can't stand the way they don't just speak!
Date: June 23, 2019 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 2: It's Not Much of a Life You're Living
Nice set up here. Lots of good introspection on what they're thinking about. Roy is in normal Roy form and I loved that Pam yelled back at him like that. Good for you Pam, stand up for yourself!
Onto the next chapter to see what all the hub-bub is about.
1 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2019 08:32 pm Title: Chapter 1: Not Really Sure How to Feel About It
I like that you used more of a light touch ;) there at the beginning. That Jim says "like" rather than love. I'm writing this before heading onto the next chapter so there could be more I'm not reading yet, but I do get the feeling that Jim wanted to say love, but used the work like here. Seems to have worked in his favor too. It got Pam thinking about him in a more than friends way. A lot more than friends based on that last sentence, but I digress a bit. Using "like" rather than "love" was nice because rather than the huge bombshell like in canon Casino Night where Pam panicked, here, yes she's shocked, but she also seems to stay in control a bit more rather than completely shut down.
Nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you for the reviews and the comments. Yeah, wanted to see what would happen if Jim was a bit less dramatic.
1 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2019 11:10 pm Title: Chapter 3: You're the broken one but I'm the only one who needed saving
Oh Jim. It’s a fine line he’s walking, trying to be her friend and so much more at the same time, without overstepping anything. I love this. I love the premise, of Jim actually speaking in that moment on the Booze Cruise. It’s probably the hardest time for Pam to hear it in a way, because it’s the most enthusiasm Roy has shown for their relationship up until this point. It would make it so much trickier to leave him I would think, to actually feel like Roy is in this in this moment... Any other time it would be so much easier to cast Roy aside and move forward with Jim - not easy, but easier. I’m looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yup, Jim knows how to pick his moments.
1 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2019 11:01 pm Title: Chapter 2: It's Not Much of a Life You're Living
I love the inclusion of Jim being concerned about Pam’s health & not realizing at all that it’s a reaction to him. It’s very sweetest!
Author's Response: Thank you! He's a bit oblivious.
Author's Response: Thank you! He's a bit oblivious.