Date: March 18, 2020 09:51 pm Title: Chapter 9
Ah, I am quite loving this. The transformation of Dwight finding Pam was particularly well done: "'Your idea of duties and your loyalty to Sir Michael do you honor,' he said cautiously, yet solemnly. 'I realize how painful it could be to let the guests encounter regrettable imperfections, but I truly believe that the unbaked biscuits are not your fault.'" Just a perfect transformation of that moment into a Regency-appropriate response. And I quite like the choice of Toby to come join the throng, and to excite Jim's jealous eyes. Wonder what Sir Michael's response to him will be. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review! It means a lot to me.
I am glad I could keep believable the Regency stylization. Perhaps, this is partly why the thing goes a little bit slower than I'd like them, but, I hope, I'm not dragging the story. The next chapter is ready :)
Date: March 18, 2020 06:29 pm Title: Chapter 9
Ooohhhh.... is Toby our Mr. Elliot?! Perhaps we are at a turning point for poor Pamela. I like the friendship that you have created between Miss Flax and Pam. I always liked Holly - reasonable, yet silly.
Thank you for sharing the poems - I can see Pam and Karen in both of those, though I especially liked the Wordsworth poem.
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading!
I tried to mix characters a little, so... yes, here is some part of Mr.Elliot in Toby (but only a part!).
Date: March 18, 2020 11:40 am Title: Chapter 9
Nice way to incorporate Dwight finding Pam alone there. I do find it interesting that thus far Jim and Pam have had no serious interaction since his return. I get why, he has Karen on his arm and she's trying to avoid him. Looking forward to the inevitable when they do find themselves directly face to face.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!
Though Pam and Jim are good at avoiding (both in the show and here), I do promise they find a way to interact - one or another.
Date: March 16, 2020 02:41 am Title: Chapter 8
You know I love this story, but it’s worth repeating that I really love this story. This chapter was utterly heartbreaking.
You blend Austen and The Office worlds so well. I could never have imagined Michael taking on Jan’s financial issues in this world, but you made it work so seamlessly.
I wasn’t expecting Holly’s appearance in this. It’s nice to see her as kind of a friend for Pam. I’m curious to see how her storyline plays out - especially if she ends up with Michael...
I can’t wait to see what you write next!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Your reviews are the best encouraging to write more :)
I like the idea of Pam having female friends (and friend aside Jim in general) and I quite like Holly, so... Miss Flax appeared. I guess, she's both Lady Russell and Mrs.Smith to Pam - Anne Elliot. Hope it was fit well :)
Date: March 15, 2020 10:28 pm Title: Chapter 8
:(
Author's Response: It'll be better, I promise :)
Date: March 15, 2020 07:32 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oh my. Yes, this makes sense as who we'd meet but poor Pam. Poor poor Pamela. Still, a little heartbreak is necessary for growth, I suppose. Still well done on the Regency imitation, very enjoyable.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
I hate to see Pam suffers, but for both canons' sake, it has to happen. But that state will improve soon!
1 [Report This]Date: March 15, 2020 02:53 pm Title: Chapter 8
Oh, my heart is hurting for Pamela! I see that nod to "Persuasion " here...
I feel like I can't read your updates fast enough - looking forward to the next!
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading :)
The next chapter is almost done, so... stay tuned!
Date: March 15, 2020 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 8
Quite a few references to the show here and there. Jan's financial woes, the appearance of Holly, and of course Jim's return with another woman on his arm. All wrapped around the time period. Great to see an update. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!
Update will be quite soon.
1 [Report This]Date: February 16, 2020 01:14 pm Title: Chapter 7
Somehow, I have missed seeing your updates... these past few chapters were such fun. You are doing such a fantastic job weaving JA, TO and your own touches into this story. I have been very pleasantly surprised! Thank you for writing! Looking forward to the arrival of the guests!
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words! They mean a lot for me :)
Date: February 14, 2020 12:05 am Title: Chapter 7
This is Persuasion all over! Thanks for sparing us the full eight years of separation.
You’re right (about my last review) - Jim is not really a Mr Darcy at all, he’s far too affable and personable. Mr Darcy was definitely not a people person. That said, I still stand by from that line from the last chapter sounding so much like his conversation with Elizabeth when they finally communicated. Jim as Captain Wentworth is far more fitting.
I’m very worried about your endnote because I’m assuming that one of them is Karen... There’s angst to come... But it’s going to be so great...
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!
Yeah, Mr.Darcy's confession is one of the most passionate things in the whole Austen's bibliography. I'm glad I was able to recreate the hint of it here...
Karen will appear, for sure, but some things just have to happen. But, and I can promise, I won't let them all suffer for a long time ;)
Date: February 13, 2020 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 7
Karen and Andy? I feel like we are due for some Stamford nonsense (not that I feel the need for more angst!). You're doing delightfully with the Austenite tone and nuance.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!
Well, Karen's presence is unavoidable, but Andy, in my opinion, doesn't fit well in this setting. I hope he won't be missed :)
Date: February 13, 2020 11:24 am Title: Chapter 7
So Penny married Roy in quite the scandal. I've got an inkling now of why Jim may have stayed away so long. I'm sure it'll come to light in the next chapter.
I see what you mean by an interlude chapter. It serves its purpose to advance the plot to be sure. I wonder if the same might have been accomplished with maybe a conversation over afternoon tea between Pam and Angela. Pam staring off into the distance while Angela tells her of all the things she's done. Rather than just telling us, have it as character interaction.
Now, as I have never read any Jane Austin, and have only having seen snippets of the various movies of her works, this could also be in keeping with the inspiration material. If that's the case, no harm no foul.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comment!
Jane Austen used reviews to describe briefly the events before and after the main plot (and sometimes in between). I guess, I did the same thing because it was easier for me to just fill the blanks with sketches than to deep into angst and discussions. I'm not sure if it worked out smoothly, but... oh well.
I return to the usual narration style in the next chapter.
1 [Report This]Date: February 04, 2020 11:57 am Title: Chapter 6
Oh this was a really good adaptation of the angst into the setting. So glad you chose to give us Pamela's and not Jim's POV because the Regency setting really makes her rationale for not accepting him pop. Great work. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thank you :)
To be honest, I cheated a little - I chose to write only Pam's POVs because I have no idea how Jim could react on this or that (and all Austen's novels also was from women's perspective). But I'm glad you like it!
Date: February 04, 2020 02:50 am Title: Chapter 6
“but all this time I spent thinking of you and you alone,” has the strongest Mr Darcy vibes & I can’t even begin to tell you how delighted I was to read it!
This story is so, so wonderful. My Jane Austen & JAM loving heart is full. I’ve said this before, but your Michael is such a great fit for both the period and in terms of character. Those last few lines of his dialogue - amazing and utterly heart wrenching...
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
I like to write to Michael. It's a challenge - how many grieve and happiness he could cause unintentionally to his surroundings.
By the way, I've always considered Jim as Mr. Tilney (with a vast amount of Captain Wentworth) and never as Mr. Darcy :)
Date: February 02, 2020 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 6
And there's Casino Night raising its head in all its angsty angstyness.
Anyway, I did like the earlier interaction between Pam and Jim here. Him not caring about the rumors, she does care about them. I also like how she doesn't back off from him. She let's him know what's on her mind. i get the feeling she wouldn't do that with Roy. She wouldn't feel that Roy would care nor would she feel comfortable enough to speak up. However she can talk like that to Jim since she's come to trust him. At least that's my take on it.
Looking forward to seeing how the rest plays out.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review!
Unfortunately, this angst was inevitable, for both 'The Office' and Austen parts. But I don't enjoy it, so I try to move to happier times as quick as it's possible.
And yes, Pam definitely wouldn't talk to Roy that way. This Pam doesn't have any attachment with him (well, except the engagement). On the other hand, with Jim, she has a connection, based on similar views, tastes, and, yes, trust so that she would share her doubts with him. I hope that was believable.
1 [Report This]Date: January 29, 2020 06:51 am Title: Chapter 5
This is lovely. A delight to read. I might point out that traditionally two dances would not be consecutive--but I think Dunder Mifflin could easily be so eccentric a manor as to make that reasonable. Roy especially would want to get his out of the way (and yes, he should dance three with his fiancee so he has definitely failed poor Pam). Lovely as always.
Author's Response: Aww, thank you for your kind words! And I think Roy just wanted to be done with his responsibilities as soon as possible... well, his loss :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 27, 2020 01:29 pm Title: Chapter 5
It's been a while since I've been read and I think that your writing improves with each chapter! I think you are doing a fantastic job weaving The Office and Jane Austen together. I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I do my best and I'm glad you noticed improvements :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2020 02:18 am Title: Chapter 5
I loved this chapter so, so much. The way you seamlessly wove moments from canon into it in a way that both keep the heart of the original, but also fit with the period was wonderful. The Dundies without them being the Dundies was so great. Of course Michael would manage to accidentally insult everyone by meaning to compliment them. Typical Michael.
All the Pam and Jim moments were just lovely. The way they bounce off each other feels so natural. All the references to Pam’s dorky dancing were a lot of fun.
Bring on the dancing!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! I appreciate every bit of it, and I'm very glad you like the story :)
Date: January 06, 2020 08:13 pm Title: Chapter 5
Lovely chapter here. Shades of Casino Night, The Dundies, and the Booze Cruise if I don't miss my mark. They all blended together seamlessly here so well done for getting that through. I really like how Jim and Pam are collaborating here. That they just have the easy rapport with each other like in canon.
Looking forward to seeing how the rest of this plays out.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! I'm glad I kept the canon events recognizable.
Also, there was a hint of 'Phyllis' Wedding,' though I'll put that line on in the story later :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2020 10:28 am Title: Chapter 4
This is still great fun - and I'm liking the introductions of Roy and Preacher Dwight. That's a great idea!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 01, 2020 03:51 pm Title: Chapter 4
I absolutely love the way you’ve brought Jim and Pam into working together. And to have Jim orchestrate it all by making Michael think that he needs it? Brilliant.
It’s so fun to see Michael in this time. He fits the genre so wonderfully. He has enough money/social standing to be seen as somewhat important in society, but he’s so delightfully improper, etc. and himself. It’s great!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review (and even more for your help)!
I kinda like this Michael. He's fond of my faves and mostly harmless. It might be OOC, but I'll keep this line :)
1 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2019 12:30 pm Title: Chapter 4
I'm loving this. Great work with the adapted banter and with the characterization. More JAM upcoming, I trust?
Author's Response:
Of course ;)
And thank you for your reviews and reading!
1 [Report This]Date: December 31, 2019 12:26 pm Title: Chapter 3
I am enjoying this. Interesting class divisions you've set up, with only Michael, Jim, and Dwight in the scholar/pastor/man of leisure class. Looking forward to seeing it play out!
Date: December 31, 2019 07:12 am Title: Chapter 4
Great way to have this Jim prank preacher-Dwight. Seemed like quite the appropriate jest, especially considering this Jim is so well versed in books.
Lots of little warm and glowing moments between Jim and Pam here. Especially with him being complimentary about her artwork. It's wonderful to envision this Pam starting to glow when she's around Jim. Makes me very curious as to how this will all play out for the two of them.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
Hope I keep develop their relations naturally and without the rush.
1 [Report This]Date: December 18, 2019 09:30 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love the introduction & repurposing of a few other members of The Office here. Dwight is so very Dwight, even in this world. It’s fun to see the dislike he takes to Jim, as well as how easily Jim takes it all in stride. His mischievous suggestion as to whether he can influence content of sermons to come hints in the beginning of pranking - something you wouldn’t think fits in this universe, but you’ve set it up so it works seamlessly.
A really lovely update.