1 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2021 10:33 am Title: Chapter 1
I thought you captured that half-real, half-otherworldly dreamy feeling really well here. It seemed like the sort of weird that might realistically manifest in the mind of a pre-Casino Night Pam Beesly. AND it was really sweet. Jim giving up the mustache without hesitation, Pam recognizing that kissing him is a big moment even when she knows it's not real... lovely. Roy being more upset about losing his breakfast than the kiss definitely feels like the sort of thought that Pam wouldn't allow herself to wallow in consciously but is definitely lurking just under the surface.
Oh, and the next morning works really well. Pam still sort of lingering in her dream-state and trying to process it all, and Jim observing her doing it... I can really see this scene playing out. Well described.
1 [Report This]Date: April 21, 2020 10:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so interesting and unique! I don’t think I’ve read a lot like it. You did a great job with some wonderful imagery and descriptions. It’s not hard to imagine that season 1 and 2 Pam might very well have had dreams like this. Great job!
1 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2020 06:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Dreams are hard to retell, so I imagine they are difficult to write! I like this take on Pam discovering her feelings for Jim through her dreams and being bold enough to act on it. I also wouldn't mind another chapter or two if you'd consider it! :)
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely comment! If I figure out what to do with them, I'll add some chapters (or, rather, a connected story).
1 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2020 03:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Interesting to say the least. Gives Pam quite a bit to think about that's for sure. Some questions remain though. Why Pam and Roy drove separately. Obviously hey had a fight about things. Is Pam thinking more about leaving Roy now?
You wrote Pam being flustered very well. Seems like everything was spinning out of control until she hugged Jim there. Then maybe something calmed down. Jim is now befuddled that's for sure.
Works good a one-shot but I wouldn't mind seeing another chapter to see how everything ties off.
Author's Response:
Thank you, warrior, for your great review - as usual!
Answering the question - Pam and Roy had a fight... over the broken toast oven (and I totally failed with an explanation of this moment in the story; I should probably add a line or two to point at this).
And, as much as I want to set Pam and Jim together as soon as it's possible, I doubt that first-season Pam could leave Roy after one dream (even such a meaningful one). But, if I figure out how to organize her escape, I'll definitely add some chapter(s) or a connected story.
1 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2020 03:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the idea/psychology of a self-fulfilling prophecy and this was such a cool way to explore that! It was great how you set up that Pam has these dreams before jumping into this particular dream. I love how her subconscious wants to get away from Roy, if that doesn’t tell her everything about that relationship...
“ Despite the winter and her half-naked condition, it was his voice and his warm hands on the bare skin of her knee and forearm that made her shiver.” This line was SO good. I love that it’s Jim that she has the reaction from, and that she’s aware that it’s Jim.
“he seriously suspected his ribcage would be bruised inside” I loved the imagery of this line, what a vivid way to describe a racing heart!
Author's Response:
Thank you, Jenna! To be honest, I had doubts, if this story was worthy of being published or not... and your review is the best way to get rid of the doubts :) I'm so glad you liked it!
1 [Report This]Date: April 11, 2020 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
What a wonderful little story, if only they had realized this was a sign. Pams description of a hug from Jim is adorable and your writing here captures the two so perfectly.
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed this story :)