Date: November 13, 2020 11:29 pm Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
This was a really nice way to wrap it all up! You've created your own version of one of those incidents in canon that would clearly be a hallmark of their story. Well done with this one.
Author's Response: Just wanted to thank you for taking the time to read and review each chapter. You are too kind! So glad you enjoyed this story!
Date: November 13, 2020 11:27 pm Title: Chapter 6
Okay, him showing up at her apartment? Amazing. And Pam's Breakfast Club rip-off was hilarious.
1 [Report This]Date: November 13, 2020 11:21 pm Title: Chapter 5
There's something about these two that just really lends itself to phone sex - I don't know, maybe it's the fact that they've got so much stored up to talk about and are used to not being able to touch each other? I don't know. Either way, you did well with it here.
1 [Report This]Date: November 13, 2020 11:17 pm Title: Chapter 4
The abandonment of Andy is one of those things that's only comic if you don't think about Andy as a *real person* who has been abandoned to float around a lake in a sumo suit. Then it's just disturbing. Thank you for pulling him out of there.
I love this tentatively sexy dialogue!
1 [Report This]Date: November 13, 2020 11:11 pm Title: Chapter 3
The sumo match was just spectacularly written - I can totally picture it as it happened. And this version of Pam's coal walk works well! They've already opened the doors of communication a little without Karen there, and they've got some privacy from both his girlfriend and their co-workers, and that makes it easier for them to walk through the entryway right then and there.
1 [Report This]Date: November 13, 2020 11:06 pm Title: Chapter 2
The metaphor of his love for Pam as a chronic pain Jim's just going to have to live out his days with feels very true to Jim at this point in Season 3 - he's tried to get over her, and it's clear he's just going to have to move forward without getting there. And you've written some lovely moments of their tentative stabs at re-establishing what they once had, along with some solid inner monologue from Jim about whether or not he's just screwed this whole thing up by not pursuing that friendship when he returned.
1 [Report This]Date: November 13, 2020 10:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is a great concept, and I think you executed it well. I like the way you've shown how their connection endures and also how aware they are that it's badly weakened - the way Pam gets upset because she knows he would have messed with her when blindfolded a year ago is a very insightful bit of work.
Date: May 26, 2020 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
The whole Michael Jim interaction is a good chuckle. Michael interpreting things as compliments is one of my favorite things. I like this twist, Jim expressing interest in Michael’s job instead.
“Things weren’t normal at all between Pam and Jim, but in this case, that was a very good thing.” A very good thing indeed .
This is such a lovely new normal you describe for them.
Pam’s dad is a sweetheart! Bless him. Ooh, nice touch having them back at the beach games spot. I love when things come full circle.
Author's Response: Thanks for this and for always giving me such great, encouraging reviews. I really appreciate how you notice the details. So glad you liked this story.
Date: May 26, 2020 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
While I'm super disappointed about the Sox hat...I was super excited about the boat! Cute ending.
Author's Response: Lol. I know nothing about baseball, I just know JK wears these hats. Glad you enjoyed the boat. Thanks so much for reviewing. Your opinion means a lot :)
Date: May 25, 2020 09:59 am Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
"She presented the navy blue cap to him, with the words, Life’s a Beach emblazoned upon it in white letters"
That was a perfect roll credits moment, good going.
This story was a great ride and I'm sad to see it end, but I have no doubt you'll ensnare us in the next one, looking forward to that.
Thanks for writing this for us!
Author's Response: I appreciate you pointing out the details you liked. Thanks so much for coming with me through this fic.
Date: May 25, 2020 09:19 am Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
Very cute way to wrap this up. Always fun to see Jim and Pam just being in love with each other.
Great job throughout all of this. It's been fun to read and watch progress.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat
Author's Response: As always, so excited to hear what you think. Thanks for the great review.
Date: May 25, 2020 07:50 am Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
Very sweet. Thanks for wrapping that up! I loved the Dwight moment in particular.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
1 [Report This]Date: May 25, 2020 07:46 am Title: Chapter 7: Conclusion
Perfect conclusion! I got such a huge smile on my face when she pulled up with the fishing boat. I love it so much! Great job!
Author's Response: So glad this made you smile! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing.
1 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2020 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 6
I just binged these 6 chapters and I have so many parts that I stopped and thought “this is my favorite!” “no, this is my favorite!” “no, THIS!”
It’s seriously all so good. The Star Wars, the phone calls, the conversations at the beach, her hands feeling bereft without him. You have such a lovely flow and voice in your writing and I can’t get enough. Hate to see this one only have one more chapter but already can’t wait for your next one!
Author's Response: Wow! You are too kind :) I'm so flattered you binged this and enjoyed so much about it. Thanks for taking the time. The conclusion is up now!
1 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2020 04:07 pm Title: Chapter 6
I am more than delighted to see that you are still writing Office fan fiction! Keep it up, and stay well during these trying times!
Author's Response: Thank you! I have another idea for a story, so that's coming soon. I guess I'm addicted :) And best of health to you too.
1 [Report This]Date: May 19, 2020 07:51 pm Title: Chapter 6
love it
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: May 17, 2020 09:39 am Title: Chapter 6
I can understand why there might be some initial hesitation, but then again with the phone conversations and all their history, just jumping right into the deep end like that works too. Vivid and descriptive both physically and mentally. They're clearly well in tune now and that's brought out nicely.
Fun little bit of humor there with then note.
Author's Response: Glad you liked where I took this chapter. Thanks so much!
1 [Report This]Date: May 17, 2020 09:01 am Title: Chapter 1
‘How about a little less talk and a little more action, Halpert?”
A confident Pam, we love her.
Love the Breakfast Club reference too!
1 [Report This]Date: May 17, 2020 08:46 am Title: Chapter 6
Very cute, and nice Breakfast Club reference: that's exactly the sort of thing that would appeal to Michael.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it. The conclusion is up now :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 12, 2020 02:16 am Title: Chapter 5
“Skivvy” means turtleneck here so I was like “what on earth is Jim wearing” until I read Pam’s next line and had a little giggle...
Despite the cheating, this strikes me as a very mature version of Karen. I like that she’s cognizant of the fact that she made the choice to move to Scranton because she liked Jim. All in all, a very measured break up, on both their parts. It’s very nice to have her so cleanly out of the picture.
Author's Response: lol. So funny how words can mean different things in different countries (ie. fanny, stuffed, shag). My dad was a Marine, and talk about a different language! I grew up hearing about skivvies and bogey bait (candy) and grunt work (manual labor), lol. Anyway, glad you liked how I handled Jim and Karen's breakup. Less dramatic I know, but I was going for mature realism. Thanks so much for the great review! Chapter 6 is up now :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2020 07:31 pm Title: Chapter 5
I'm happy that Jim and Karen got a somewhat amicable split, but I can't help being upset at Karen on Jim's behalf! Ok, that's a bit of a double standard I know.
Good read, looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Yes, cheating is always wrong, but I hope I conveyed how Jim had been cheating in his heart too, so they are equally to blame. In the end, it makes sense they should break up, right? Thanks for the review. Chapter 6 is up now!
Date: May 10, 2020 09:06 pm Title: Chapter 5
The fact that Jim chose to come clean with Karen instead of just letting her affair be his out shows a lot of maturity. Now that there's been a clean break, I can't wait for Jam to finally be together!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really was going for a more mature, less angsty resolution to Jim and Karen's relationship. I hope it worked for you. Yes, on with the Pam and Jim togetherness. Next chapter is up now!
Date: May 10, 2020 07:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
A little late to the party but I got to read all five chapters at one time! I am loving this story! One of your best yet. They are taking their time, making sure they do it right. They can already tell this is it, it’s for real and forever. The flirty and then sexy banter is great! Can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: So glad you're enjoying this. And I always love banter compliments the most :) Thanks so much!
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2020 03:30 pm Title: Chapter 5
I can very easily see Jim and Pam ramping up their normal banter to phone sex very quickly. They've had years of practice and now after the day at the beach and all day Saturday on the phone, I'm sure there's a lot of air that got cleared. So it makes sense their conversations would progress like that.
Interesting choice with Karen. It avoids a lot of the normal Jim and Karen break-up heartache. They're both guilty of playing with each other's emotions, but they're being a lot more mature about it here. I liked it. It also sets the scene to allow Jim and Pam to be completely together so that's nice to think about too.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked my different take of Jim and Karen's break up. I hope it seemed realistic.
1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2020 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 5
Well, I did not expect that Karen twist, but I did like how they left it, and I'm enjoying your Jim-Pam banter. Nice work.
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad I could take you by surprise. And dialogue compliments are the key to my heart :)