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I’m so glad I you continued this story. It’s a great premise. I hoped get to see the whole story soon

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This is possibly the worst version of Jim ever, but I'm DYING and can't wait for more!!

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He wasn’t supposed to make my entire body tingle as he said, “What’s up, roomie?” in a voice low enough that only I could hear him.

Oh okay well this gave me feelings in lots of ways

This contract! You are so dedicated to your craft. It is amazing. It’s what makes you such a good writer, you don’t skip on the details that make your work so immersive. Outstanding. On the same note, the nods to cannon with June 10th and using up her ten vacation days by her third week are amazing.

“ Hey, according to Thesaurus.com, caretaker is a synonym. We could use that instead. It sounds more like ‘babysitter’ anyway, which is basically what I’ll be doing.” fuck yeah Pam, you tell him. Also, I immediately associate obnoxiously loud open mouthed gum chewing with douche bags, so great detail.

“ Apparently, I was finally coming out of my shell, all at once, in a heated screaming match with a New York fuckboy who wasn’t worth my time and energy.” I mean if anything is gonna do it, a NY fuckboy certainly will.

“You know, I had this theory before today that a man’s ego was directly proportional to the size of his nose. Thank you so much for confirming that.” This is amazing. Amazing. Ugh. How are you so good and witty?

I really really really like Jim as an ass. And you write it SO WELL. It’s giving me Draco/Hermione feelings, which is a paring that is always so satisfying to me because a good fic will get to the root of his shit behavior while slowing her to stand up for herself and things are almost always hot as fuck, and I just get the sense that this fic is going to be the same way. I am here for a slow burn and fights and more asshole behavior and just, all of it. You’re so good. This was so good. I cannot wait for more!!

Damn girl, you wrote an actual contract! That's hardcore, and very fun. This story is already amazing and I can't wait to read more.

I’ve never had so much fun reading a contract LOL

I absolutely love the tension you’ve created between them. I can’t wait to read how it plays out once they are living together. Also, you made me laugh with the June 10 date.

I really hope you keep this story up . It is such a great premises, and you write it so well.

Can’t wait to read more

Author's Response: I'm glad you had fun reading it! It made me giggle to write it all out. Thanks for reading!

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Oooh, yes. This is Fancy New Beesly all over. I love that she’s sort of reinventing herself as more confident to take on New York - but, at the same time, it doesn’t feel like she’s losing herself. She’s still very much Pam, just with slightly more verbalized sass.

“The other was Jim fucking Halpert.” What a way to make an entrance.

“thankfully, his flesh was covered” Umm, no. I, for one, am not all that thankful the flesh is covered.

“He wasn’t supposed to make my entire body tingle as he said, “What’s up, roomie?” in a voice low enough that only I could hear him.” YES PLEASE. Ugh. We’re like ten seconds into them meeting and the tension is already SO palpable.

“but I don’t consider a one night stand to be at all romantic.” Cocky Jim is everything. I wasn’t expecting to love him so much, but here we are.

“What, are you going to give me one of those fucking leash backpacks, too?” I can’t see him hating it all that much if it was some sort of kinky cuffs situation...

“Sounds like you and your right hand will become well reacquainted over the next twelve months.” Damn, AG. This is hilarious. I love this spirited version of Pam.

“Katy 1.0.” Just when you think this is too AU to really track with canon, you throw in a brilliant nod like this. Perfect.

Speaking of perfect, this is the ideal use for Andy. His character doesn’t have to change at all. He fits so seamlessly into the role of douchebag.

The payoff of them finally meeting this chapter was so, so worth it.

Author's Response:

Dude. I'm not thankful that his flesh is covered either. But we gotta start somewhere, right? ;)

You picked out all of my favorite parts and then some. I'm glad the payoff was worth it! 

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It's a bit of a kick in the chest whenever I see this one updated. Mainly because the Jim and Pam here as so much different that the one's we've come to love. Of course it's also because of your skill as a writer to pull out real emotions from your reader that adds the the heightened sense of things.

Ok, I'm really glad that Pam is already not backing down from this Jim. He's a world class a-hole and having frat boy Andy at his side isn't doing him any favors. I mean Jim's right there too, not backing down either. It's a very different form of their banter since of course this is a very different form of them.

No issues on my end with the contract. Nice way to get everything across that you needed too. Though I am also with Pam a bit. Why IS Dunder-Mifflin going through all this trouble? It would be much easier to fire Jim, hire someone who's not going to embarrass the company and move on. Things to think about.

Also nice job adding in Flag Day there.

Author's Response: Wow. I mean, getting told that your update is a constant "kick in the teeth" isn't exactly what I was hoping to hear from anyone. And while i'm sure that you mean that in a sense of "I don't like where this is now," I won't lie, it's kind of rude to outrightly say. Again, if this isn't your cup of tea, I'm by no means forcing you to read it. I obviously have a plan for this story that I'm pretty excited about, but a majority of this review kind of just tore me down. Don't feel obligated to review my story for your own reviewing creds, or if you don't actually enjoy this particular style of AU.

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“Listen, sweetheart. I don’t know what kind of Little House on the Prairie dates you’ve been on in the past decade, but I don’t consider a one night stand to be at all romantic. That’s why I’m asking.”
Perfection. I'm rolled my eyes so hard and laughed even more. This whole update was well worth the wait. The contract was hysterical and Jim is such an ass. All the key details in here make it amazing.

And again, Jim is such an ass. I hate to love it, but I do.

Somehow Andy is even more obnoxious in this than irl, but that detail added so much to this. The fact that Andy is Jim's almost friend? Weird, but I need more of it. Can't wait to see how you write these two living together. I really hope Pam gives him a swift kick in the butt to calm him down for a hot minute.

Author's Response: Thanks! I mean, I know he's an ass. That's the point. I'm glad it's definitely coming across that way LOL.

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Oh, I love what you are doing to Jim and please, PLEASE keep doing it.

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I have nothing all that articulate to say, other than that I am here for this & I can’t wait for them to meet. This is a wild version of Jim, but like, what’s not to love...

Author's Response: Thanks, Jenna! I know--what's not to love about a wild, bad boy (who we know will turn it around in the end)? ;)

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Can I just say that I love this Jim SO much? And this Pam? And this scenario? And this story? And this author? Another amazing, in-depth and captivating AU from you. I seriously cannot wait.

Author's Response: Ugh. Thanks lady. Love u mean it.

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I am so here for coke!Jim and I can’t wait until Pam let’s him have it... or joins in, whichever the case may be.

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Ha! I found it! 🥰
I’m too invested in this fic to be healthy. I’m already locking in the begging and pleading for updates. It’s going to be a really great ride.