Date: July 25, 2007 07:15 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Whoa. That was awesome! I love the call-backs to Casino Night, and I really felt like you kept everyone in character even though they were so much younger. Great job!
Author's Response: I'm so excited to hear that you liked the story and that you felt everyone was in character- that's always a challenge of mine when writing. Thanks so much for the awesome review!!
Date: July 23, 2007 04:48 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Thanks so much for writing a part 2! This was so awesome.
The part where Roy didn't get into Marywood, and so can't go to the parties without Pam kills me. I could him using her and walking all over her :(
Loved Packer! So funny and was not expecting that!
"Blonde Ponytail" was great, and I can totally see Pam making up names for people like that.
You NEED to make another part. Maybe Pam runs into Jim in the cafeteria or they have a class together? So many ways this could go. Love it!
Author's Response: Booooo Roy, right? ;-) I'm glad you liked the addition of "Blonde Ponytail"- I was very fearful that it wasn't "Pam" enough, so I'm happy to hear that it worked out. I'm thinking about a part 3... I think I'm a bit in love with college Jim and Pam.... Thanks so much for the awesome review.
Date: July 23, 2007 02:58 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
wahoo! i'm so glad you decided to write this!! I loved reading it, great job!!! my favorite parts were:
Blonde Ponytail! absolutely cracked me up
Pack-er! Pack-er! heee! didn't see that coming but can totally see that happening. He would definitely be the middle-aged bald dude that still goes to college parties.
"....rescuing ladies in Perpetual Help" smooth line, Halpert! though of course he doesn't need a line to land our dear Pamela.
"If I think about the implication of his response, I'm fairly certain everything around me will start to spin again." This is beautiful.
loved it all!
Author's Response: When I saw the names of those dorm rooms, I couldn't resist. It was begging to be made fun of and used. A lot of people seem to really love the Pam line about the implications of his response, which just floors me, cause I just sort of spat it out- so it's brilliant to me that people feel so connected about it. Thank you for the amazing review and for pushing for the sequel ;-)
Date: July 23, 2007 02:15 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
I love these lines:
“Yeah, I guess, right?” I retort with a laugh. “I bet you use that line on all the girls, though.”
His smile fades and the golf cart slows to a stop. “No,” he says simply.
If I think about the implication of his response, I’m fairly certain everything around me will start to spin again.
I'm so glad you continued this little AU story. Roy just won't change, will he? But then, Jim is still such a sweetheart. Love that lisahoo posted that link.
Nice job with this. Feel free to add more anytime. I love Jim, Pam and Roy in their younger days.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the awesome review! When I wrote that line I literally thought: "whoa... how will Pam respond" and it sort of made MY head spin. So, that's ultimately waht brought the line up! LOL Hopefully if the spirit moves me, I'll be adding to the series. Thanks for the kind comments!
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 02:04 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Oh, just going to start off my review answering this:
Pam enters her freshman year at Marywood University. Will she run into Jim?
oooh, oooh, oooh, I haven't even read the story yet but my guess is yes, am I right am I right? do I win anything?
And freshman orientation is different than what I had. Sort of like what I had during the summer.... but, I don't really remember that. All I remember was walking around campus some with parents some not, and touring dorms maybe? i am getting oritation and open house confused. But my first day, I moved in early, and didn't really leave my dorm until that night. Nothing official *remineceses* yeah, like it wasn't just three years ago :P
I love the little:
i would give up my best set of charcoals.... i am so not giving up my charcoals.
I have yet to go to a real college party. Probably because I am a shy introvert who doesn't like to drink, and hates being around people drinking.
Wow, Pam is defintily thinking about Jim...yeah, I can imagine that. Because, um, seriously, if a Jim walked into my life, I would be thinking about him also.
Gah, I don't think I want to go to a party like that. Yeah, I would pretty much want to die. Unless Jim was there. Then, um, duh.
eeek. A Packer. No. No Packers allowed.
Blonde Ponytail kisses Roy. :O
Okay, so tis is not only great first person, it is great present tense. I realized earlier I was reading a story, and reading it in present tense was just like a shock. It didn't feel right. But, this story it works.
We have something like safe walk. It is 7-Duck. most of my friends drive for 7-duck. Guess what number you call to get 7-duck.... 7-d-u-c-k. However, I always joke call them asking them to drive me from the library to my dorm (right across the street). but, generally, i don't need it. Everywhere I walk i feel safe. Which is probably pretty stupid because you aren't really safe, especially being alone on a college campus.
God, Roy doesn't even notice that he is all over blondie
And he accuses her of PMS... that only works when the girl is joking about it. Guys should never act as if that is an exuse (unless you are dwight and it is a funny scene like that). I can say I am PMSing. If a guy accuses me of it, he will get slapped.... well, more likely a glare. But whatever.
I was RIGHT! She does run into Jim. YAY!
I like Jim's eyes also. And, yeah, I am betting kissing him would be nice.
Darnit, why don't any of the guys who work for 7-Duck anyhing like Jim!!!!
That little drunk exchange reminds me of gay witch hunt... they weren't drunk then. she is a little drunk here. oh well. still, kissing jim - good. even if only drunk (dundies). as long as she keeps kissing jim. And doesn't go back to the evil roy.
And of course, the evil "I can't" that haunts them even in AU universes.
So, can we expect another sequel? And soon?
Author's Response: Whoa! That is one mother of a review! LOL To be quite honest the only real college parties I've been to were during orientation week which were organized by the student council of my school. Usually they were at clubs. I'm glad you noticed the parallel to GWH and CN- the connection was certainly intended. I have to think of what I'll do for the next part (of if I will write a next part! LOL) Plus I'm working on an epic along the lines of When in Rome... so I'm just fic crazy! LOL Thanks so much for your awesome reviews and for reading my stuff.
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 01:44 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Okay, I have started reading this like five times. And not really exagerating. But life keeps interrupting (oh I have to make dinner, oh work, oh this, oh that), but then when I saw you wrote a sequel, I decided no more excuses. So, right now I am finishing this, even if the house starts to burn down or something equally dramatic. (but if I do get an email back from my beta... sorry, that is going to take priority. it goes beta>this story+sequel>fire)
Only times I have been in home depot there was never a Jim in there. There was Whitey/Scott/James, a kid I went to school with. I was friends with him when we were in 7th grade home ec together. And then he went on to join the punk/goth crowd. And he scared me.
But no Jim.
First person Pam is awesome, just so you know.
Great, next time I go to home depot, I will either a)start blushing or b) start laughing at the sexual names of stuff. You have ruined home depot for me.
Granted, I am not really a fan of Home Depot as it is. Although (special Emily memory).... it was the first sign I ever read. At least, as I recall. I was a wee little one, and I was going with daddy and bro to Home Depot. And I was like "Daddy, that says Home De-pot." with the t sound. I remember being very confused because I thought they were so stupid because they kept calling it Depot. I had never heard of a silent t.
Its so great how she keeps repeating "my boyfriend roy" as if she has to convince herself that its right and stuff.
Jim is Jim and Roy is Roy and Pam is Pam. Sorry if that seems obvious, but it is still awesomeness.
AND DWIGHT. DWIGHT IS DWIGHT. Dwight in a real sales job, interacting with customers on that level is all sorts of scary. So glad there isn't a Dwight at my home depot. Jim - yes, I want. Dwight - *shivers* no.
And Michael! Oooh, all sorts of awesome.
And pranks. The good start to all Jim Pam relationships.
Yay! No fires, no emails, I am off to read sequel
Author's Response: Wow! Whatta review! It's always so very awesome of you to take the time to review the way that you do. You really add a personal touch to it, and it's very much appreciated. And I'm completely honoured that my fic comes before fire. That is saying quite a lot! ;-) LOL Thanks so much for reading and for the fantastic review.
Date: July 23, 2007 01:39 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Yeah!!! This was so good! I hope you continue it!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much! And thank you for encouraging me to continue from the last fic. Without you, this fic may not have even been born. Thank you! Thank you! Thank you!!!
Date: July 23, 2007 12:29 pm Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Loved this: All I had with Jim was one fifteen minute conversation where we played one prank and now I can’t get him out of my mind.
And how sweet that Jim works for Safe Walk. Knight in shining golf cart. http://mtt.just-once.net/gallery/displayimage.php?album=52&pos=6
Author's Response: Well you had to go and show me a golf cart photo of Jim/JKras!!! LOL Oh. My. God. *thud* That just brought it all to life for me. A million, trillion Dundies to you for bringing that jem to my attention. Thank you so much for the kind review and for reading!
Date: July 23, 2007 11:49 am Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Wow, this little story of yours has taken on a life of it's own, yes? And I think it's great! I love the different take on the characters outside of the Dunder-Mifflin setting we all are used to seeing them in. And I think my favorite line of the whole story was the one about rescuing ladies in Perpetual Help. Very funny, in a dorky Jim kinda way.
Nice work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the challenge that started it all!! LOL Who would have thought a little HD jolt of energy could spurn THIS? ;-) I loved that there was an actual residence called Perpetual Help... it just seemed so perfect in so many ways! Thanks for reading and for the feedback!
Date: July 23, 2007 11:35 am Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
I made an audible noise when I saw that you continued this story. I just love it so much! And thanks so much for the thanks! I am honored!
Great continuation. It is so like Jim to volunteer to get people home safe. What a sweetheart.
Haha, and 'mildly balding senior' = hilarious.
It is so like Pam to be continually irritated by Roy, but then just think to herself that she's 'with' Roy and never thinks that that isn't a life sentence.
And thrilled to get to the end to read 'See ya around Pam.' I know I am looking forward to it. :)
Author's Response: Yay!!! Thanks so much for providing the feedback that helped inspire this story! I'm so happy to hear that you loved the story and thought that it was realistic of the characters. Thanks for reading and for reviewing!!
10 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2007 11:34 am Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
OMG. Roy doing a beer bong? Packer at a frat party? Blonde Ponytail?? This is just awesome. And this:
I am so not giving up my charcoals.
I could so hear Pam saying that!
....And of course, a collective sigh for Knight in Shining Armor Jim.
Author's Response: LOL!!! Of course Packer would be behind it, right? I couldn't give him lines cause I feared complete and utter chauvanism. Thanks so much for everything! Really, EVERYTHING! You rock harder than actual rocks.
Date: July 23, 2007 11:31 am Title: No One Should Escape College Without Knowing How Little She Knows
Ahhh! So glad you decided to keep going with this fun AU you have created! Although I am sad to see that this is just a one shot. I like how Roy was so excited about frat parties even though he didn't go to college. And also:
If I pretend the moment didn’t happen, does that make it true?
Pam's got those defenses up, even at a young age! And, of course Jim works for Safe Ride! Love it.
Author's Response: I'm hoping I find inspiration to do a part 3 at least. But I have to go as the wind carries me, as it were ;-) I'm so glad that you enjoyed the chapter. Thank you for reading it and for reviewing! Very much appreciated.
Date: July 19, 2007 12:32 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Great start! So many awesome things! I was not expecting Dwight, but loved the prank they pulled on him. I was so proud of Pam for that! This is pretty much how I pictured Roy, too. Are we going to see Roy's brother, I wonder? So many things could happen! I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for the generous feedback. Unfortunately it's only a oneshot (although I think I'm going to do a Marywood sequel...) and thereby it is complete. But I totally agree with you- Roy is such the lumber guy! LOL Thanks so much for the great review and for reading :)
Date: July 19, 2007 05:01 am Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
This was lovely! I love the adorably awkward teenage Jim and Pam, the cute, flirty banter, and pranking Dwight! Did not see that coming and just loved it!! Also, I love that you used first person to tell this story, great choice!
I would love to read a chapter or two about Marywood :-)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the great review! Stay tuned, there is likely to be a Marywood chapter in the near future! Thanks for reading :)
Date: July 17, 2007 06:38 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
This is adorable! I love how Jim and Pam's personalities are the same as they are now, but yet they still seem younger - a little more awkward, not quite as smooth. Dwight, of course, hasn't changed.
A thousand Stanley nickels to you if you write a "they meet at Marywood" companion story!
Author's Response: Oooh!!! Don't tempt me, cause I'm seriously considering it... LOL Thanks so much for the awesome review!
Date: July 17, 2007 06:12 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
I love this! But I have to admit that it's almost a tease for it to be a one-shot, especially about Marywood. ;) Very well written, especially the characterization. Awesome job!
Author's Response: Oh wow!! Such awesome compliments. Thank you so much for the amazing comments. I really appreciate it. Thank you for reading and reviewing :)
Date: July 17, 2007 04:46 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Cute! I loved having Dwight come in toward the end. Was not expecting that.
This was really fun. It reminds me of the summer after my freshman year of college when I worked at a Wal-Mart Pharmacy. Happily those days are long gone now. ;)
Author's Response: Ahhh!! I was also a Wal-Martian in addition to being a Depot girl, so I certainly know your pain. I'm glad you loved the story and enjoyed reading it. Thanks so much for reviewing :)
Date: July 17, 2007 04:01 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
very cute! loved it!
Author's Response: Yay!! Thanks! So happy to hear people enjoyed it!
Date: July 17, 2007 02:43 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Oooooo! I love this story.
I hope you can entertain us through the summer with tales from the Home Depot gang!
Author's Response: Wow! Enough people are asking for a sequel or a series to be built around this... so I'm starting to be convinced! LOL We'll see. I'm pretty certain I have enough of my own HD memories to write a longer fic... oh, The possibilities! Thanks so much for the awesome review!!
Date: July 17, 2007 02:27 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Well written & a great original idea. Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! As much as I would love to continue (and perhaps make a Home Depot series of it!) the story was only meant as a quick oneshot. But thank you for the lovely compliments, I really appreciate it! Thanks for reading and reviewing.
10 [Report This]Date: July 17, 2007 02:24 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
i loved this story. very realistic. <3
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really love hearing from readers, thank you for reading and reviewing :)
Date: July 17, 2007 02:10 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Very well done. The characters voice is spot on. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's really nice to hear that the voices ring true, so thank you for that!
Date: July 17, 2007 01:56 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
do you work at home depot??
my boyfriend works in lumber there...you were spot on with all the store descriptions and stuff, I felt so connected to the story...haha
very cute.
Author's Response: I worked at HD years ago for almost 4 years, so I've owned my fair share of badges ;) I'm excited to know that you felt connected to the story, and for the record- lumber associates are pretty much the hardest workers in the store (although they do get to get away with a lot of stuff too... LOL) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!!
Date: July 17, 2007 12:13 pm Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
This is adorable. Pam & Jim sharing a coke & SunChips. And Roy the clod is discouraging Pam's artistic talents.
P.S. Love FlooringGuy!Dwight -- totally in character.
Author's Response: Aw, wow!! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed the story and found Dwight in character. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 17, 2007 10:43 am Title: The Shortest Distance Between Two Points is Under Construction
Oh, if only......we might have bypassed 8 years of heartache for both of them! SummerJob!Jim was adorkable!!!!
Yay for you!
Author's Response: Thanks! Just picturing him in the HD apron adds a whole new realm of dorkitude. :) Thanks so much for the great review and for reading.