1 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2020 10:25 pm Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
Really enjoying this story! Paul seems sweet, but of course he's no Jim. I'm excited to see how the next chapter goes, between Roy, Paul and Karen, with Jim and Pam trying to figure out how they fit in! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Jim and Pam need some serious figuring out to do LOL.
1 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2020 08:47 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
Wow! Lots of emotions on this one. I loved how described everything with Pam as being increasing chinks in the armor around Jim's heart. Cleary Casino Night hurt him deeply so he put up guards. However here we can easily see that despite everything his head is saying, Pam is the one who can always get through those defenses.
Simillar with Pam. How she's not letting things get to serious with Paul. Easy dates, a few kisses, but that's really it. Deny it all she wants her heart still longs for Jim.
It's really felt like something needs to break and if feels like that's happened with Roy's drunken encounter here. Nothing like the heat of a moment to make things clear. Paul doesn't know her, Jim does, and it's finally in Jim's arms that she really feels safe. Hopefully she remembers that despite all the margaritas. I know I loved the fact that she finally feels safe in Jim's arms.
Speaking of that confornation, loved that as soon as he sees what's happening, Jim's at her side. Rage and agony as you say, but he's there. And in front of both Karen and Paul. The next chapter should be really interesting to read. Nice job with this one.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for such a detailed review!
I always felt it was quite clear to both of them suring S3 that all the feelings were just right there but they judt didn't know how to go about it.
Hope you like where this is going! Thanks for reading.
1 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2020 07:23 am Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
you have me sitting on the edge of my seat with this story!!
Author's Response: Haha, thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2020 04:08 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
I'm really loving where this is going. I cannot wait for the next update.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2020 03:44 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
Oooh yes, I like that you’ve maintained the tone of canon here. Jim’s reactions make a lot of sense through that lens.
Somehow picturing Paul as Mark Brandanawicz automatically makes me find him just a little bland - every though he seems like a super sweet guy. I just... Mark is not my fave... That said, I’ve definitely got a clear visual!
I got too caught up in reading to review the last chapter, but the line where Paul says his last name is Bernard, but quickly distances himself from Andy was hilarious!
Both these chapters were lovely. I like that you’re essentially following the episode storylines with your original story weaved throughout. This ending has me so keen to see what happens next!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I am glad keeping the episode tone makes sense.
Hehe, well, sweet and bland was what I had in mind when I was writing Paul so that's good.
Thanks so much for reading and reveiwing!
1 [Report This]Date: July 08, 2020 12:15 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
This is getting soooo good. Can NOT WAIT to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks so so much for reading!!
1 [Report This]Date: July 07, 2020 03:50 pm Title: Chapter 2: we are moving back and forth
This is such an original story, the plot is great! And thank you for having Oscar and Gill be kind to Pam and her art in this version.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 07, 2020 11:22 am Title: Chapter 2: we are moving back and forth
YES! This is the art show that Pam deserved. I was always so broken hearted for her when in the show, her hard work was overlooked or looked down on. After all that she went through and the strength it takes to rebuild your life, she deserved to have everyone from the office come and celebrate her! I'm so excited to see where this is going to go with Paul. He sounds like he'll be really good for her. I'm a sucker for a slow burn though, so I can't wait to see Jim's reaction as Pam and Paul grow closer.
Also, just wanna say that I love how you've written Karen in this. She's not being mean or vindictive. She's understanding, and caring even when her boyfriend is being a bit of an airhead right now.
Can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I am glad you're liking it.
I am a huge sucker for slow burn too, but it's always difficult to keep Jim/Pam apart because thier feleings are just right there haha. But I am trying- wink wink. And I agree on the Karen part, I always found her nice and super mature.
Thanks for reading!
Date: July 07, 2020 11:13 am Title: Chapter 2: we are moving back and forth
Grrr, I wanted to hate this new guy but I can't. Though the emotions roiling around with Jim and Pam still seem as confused as ever. I'll say this much for this story, you're still nailing the fact that Pam and Jim are still scared to be completly honest with each other and because of that keep adding to hurt feelings.
On a more positive note it was really great to see all the encouragement for Pam's art show. Nice change of pace there.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading! I am glad the confused feelings are getting across.
Date: July 06, 2020 11:18 pm Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
Really liking the angst and the au path it is taking so far. Thank you for writing long chapters, makes reading even more interesting. Looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2020 03:24 pm Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
Oh I love the Mark mention - he’s not wrong.
“He couldn’t imagine it otherwise; he didn’t have the energy to.” This is Season 3 Jim all over. I feel like he’s kind of fallen into this thing with Karen and it seems simpler than any alternative so he just goes with it.
“he had always been her cheerleader” This whole section is kind of heart breaking. He’s always been her friend, but now there friendship isn’t what it was and he can’t even be there for her in that way. Ugh. Poor Jim.
“the way she used to smile when Roy” Ouch. Oh boy, that packs an emotional punch. I like that Jim tries to fix it a little bit. It’s nice to have his point of view and get a glimpse into his motivation for not coming.
I love that more people from the office have actually shown up at Pam’s art show. Thank goodness. Her glances at the door add a touch of angst.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading, and quoting! That makes me feel so good.
I am glad I am able to flesh out S3 Jim. And yeah, I always wanted him to have a friend to talk to during S3. And Business School was just so heartbreaking that I needed to fix it.
1 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2020 03:08 pm Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
Welcome to MTT!
I so, so love a good twist on Season 3. This is a really lovely setup. I’m so glad to see Pam striving for some of that Fancy New Beesly boldness, even if things aren’t working out the way she would like with Jim.
Pam and Oscar’s friendship was great to see here. I hope she doesn’t overhear the same art show conversation as canon because I can imagine that would be all sorts of crushing with Oscar poised as one of her support people.
I’m really interested to see where you go with this - and who you have catching Pam’s attention...
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for such a warm welcome! I love it here already.
Pam/Oscar always seemed to me two people who would get along! Thanks for reading.
Date: July 06, 2020 12:59 pm Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
This is gonna be sooo good!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2020 11:10 am Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
This was positively heartbreaking. I feel for Pam in this so much. While I understand where Jim is coming from, I'm not happy with him. I get it's self preservation, but dang I just want him to kiss her after her show.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
Ah, I know. But l always felt super bad for S3 JIm, he was really struggling. So thought of cutting him some slack, haha.
Date: July 06, 2020 10:58 am Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
I love the premise of this story and your writing is very good too! I've thought a lot about how Jim would react to Pam getting a boyfriend, or even being confronted with her dating while he was back in Scranton, so I'm really, really interested in how you'll have him react. Thank you so much for writing and I cannot wait to read the next chapter!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading! I am glad you like the premise. Writing S3 Jim is so tough!
Date: July 06, 2020 10:20 am Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
Oh Jim, that hurts. Like I said clearly they're not over the other one but they're trying to force themselves they are. And it's just making for hurt feelings all around. Intersting to see that things are starting to get rocky for Jim and Karen. It makes sense since he knows in his head Karen should be great, but his heart is still telling him otherwise.
Likewise it's tough to read Pam being let down by Jim. It's great writing to bring out these feelings don't get me wrong. Very interested to see where we go from here.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading!
What can I say, I always felt super bad for S3 Jim, poor thing was just trying so hard. And JK portrayed the conflict so well.
Date: July 06, 2020 10:13 am Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
Yes it's a good set up to what it seems you're planning. Even though Jim is here with Karen and Pam is about to be with someone new, they still seem to share a connection even if they don't know it or want to know it. It very much feels like they both know they're not over the other one, but they're almost forcing themselves to try. At least that's what I'm getting out of it.
Nice to get into their headspace like this though.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's always interesting to get into the heads of S3 Jim and Pam. Thanks for reading!