Date: November 25, 2021 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 5: closed, but not forgotten
I love the parallels here - these two people who want to move on, and have found people they think they *can* move on with, and just can't bring themselves to cut ties. Even amidst all the angst, it gives you hope for them.
And this moon bounce scene is gorgeous and sweet and the kind of conversation I desperately hope they had sometime between The Job and Fun Run.
1 [Report This]Date: November 19, 2021 11:51 am Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
Ooooof. This one stung. A lot.
I thought you hit the nail on the head again with a lot of Jim's thinking here - it really is Pam's turn, and she's turning away from a perfect opportunity to take it. Puts his anger during the Heartbreak in the Breakroom in a more forgiving context.
1 [Report This]Date: November 18, 2021 08:39 am Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
"They laughed. Pam told him she was certain that if the opportunity ever arose, Michael would leave Jan for Ryan. Jim answered that he wasn’t sure whom to feel worse for. Pam thought he should feel the worst for Dwight." This banter is complete gold, top to bottom.
This is an interesting contrast with Canon, the way Pam has found the Karen of her own she was looking for in The Job - someone who is not the Right partner, but a perfectly good one, someone who could conceivably make her happy. And it's definitely a different sort of sting for Jim - we never get to see him confront Pam saying someone with whom his issues don't completely align with her best interests.
Oooh, this scene at the end. Love it.
1 [Report This]Date: November 16, 2021 08:27 pm Title: Chapter 2: we are moving back and forth
Oooof. Come on, Jim. Pam has you dead to rights - skipping the show and coming to the bar is messed up. Although again, I understand what he's doing here and appreciate him being more honest with Karen. He's in a tough spot - I do think the point you made about their friendship and love being tied together for him is a crucial one.
Eager to see where things go
with Paul...
1 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2021 11:17 pm Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
I thought you did well with Jim in this chapter - he comes through clearly as someone who isn't lying to anyone as much as he's lying to himself, and you can see how he could talk himself into Karen being a step forward. His choice not to come to the show also feels less petty and more like an act of self-preservation here - this is very much *not* about hurting Pam and very much about moving on, and telling Pam in advance at least acknowledges that he knows her feelings about it.
Pam feels distinctly more like she's genuinely making progress here... feels like it's going to sting so much more this way, somehow.
1 [Report This]Date: November 15, 2021 11:52 am Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
Interesting start to this one. As a committed Oscar fan (and as someone who always saw him as having a great deal of affection for Pam), I appreciate you giving him the chance to pre-redeem himself for Business School here. This also feels realistic, the sort of small change you can easily imagine happening and setting events on a very different path.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this!
1 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2020 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 5: closed, but not forgotten
Please update soon!
Even though I love Jim,
I was not a fan of him in season 3.
He acted like he didn’t want Pam,
but he didn’t want anyone else to have
her either. Please update soon!
1 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2020 02:13 pm Title: Chapter 5: closed, but not forgotten
Please update soon!
Even though I love Jim,
I was not a fan of him in season 3.
He acted like he didn’t want Pam,
but he didn’t want anyone else to have
her either. Please update soon!
Date: August 15, 2020 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 5: closed, but not forgotten
Very much on point with the angst. I do wonder--you say it will continue with the episodes, but the arc you've sketched here emotionally is different than canon: Pam and Jim have talked a bit about the show, and Pam isn't single right now. So does that mean a different pace for their relationship going forward?
1 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2020 06:11 pm Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
I mean, it's a good level of angst for s3 and just like the show it's all self-inflicted. Good job drawing it out of them!
1 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2020 05:21 pm Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
So...no points to Paul if Jim was able to get there first. But mainly of course never any points to Roy. This is doing a good job of staying on story without being duplicative of what is canon, if you know what I mean.
1 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2020 05:16 pm Title: Chapter 2: we are moving back and forth
Interesting choice to change Oscar and Gil's interactions with Pam at the show to positive. I'm generally leery of OCs but given you said you considered Danny I definitely think a non-salesman is an improvement.
1 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2020 05:12 pm Title: Chapter 1: hope, hope, hope
Aww, too bad for Pam that Jim is unwilling to face that if he can't go to the art show he can't move on. But very good work on your part working through the emotional beats.
1 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2020 05:08 pm Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
This is an interesting setup and I'm looking forward to moving into the story. It's reasonably in canon and does a good job of presenting emotional stakes.
1 [Report This]Date: July 25, 2020 08:42 pm Title: Chapter 5: closed, but not forgotten
“sometimes in her charade Pam forgot Jim was human too” Oh, I absolutely love this. The idea that Pam can control all these elements of the narrative she’s telling apart from Jim and that’s where the whole thing becomes a little more dangerous. So good.
“It was almost robotic, but comfortable.” It’s funny (in a way) because this is essentially the life Pam was living with Roy... And now Jim is living it with Karen.
Oh boy. The moon bounce. I’m feeling all the feelings. Talking about the art show. Ahhh. There’s some confident Pam in there demanding an answer. My heart.
This was a really lovely, well written chapter. I get them needing to resolve the art show.
Date: July 25, 2020 04:10 pm Title: Chapter 5: closed, but not forgotten
Yes, all sorts of angsty here. Both of them trying to move on, both of them still having thoughts wrapped up about the other one. From where I sit, they're nowhere near over each other. Even as they tell each other they are and want to be, the heart knows what the heart wants.
Each time I see an update I wonder if this will be the chapter they'll finally get together. Looks like we still have a little more to go in that regard.
1 [Report This]Date: July 23, 2020 11:11 am Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
Great premise! I've really enjoyed it so far.
Thanks.
Author's Response: Glad you are liking it- thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: July 21, 2020 05:20 pm Title: Prologue: from here, to where?
Ouch! This chapter made my heart ache, which just proves how well written it is. I'm curious about what's next!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and hope you enjoy it!
Date: July 14, 2020 09:05 am Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
Lots of emotions all over the place here. I feel like they're both giving each other hugely mixed signals through everything. Hugging, kissing, are we friends, do we want more, what are they trying to tell me. They're both all over the place.
Now in the general timeline of JAM this fits. In canon this is one of the lowest spots of their relationship. So in that sense you've got their emotions spot on.
I have no idea what's gong to happen from here on out. You're doing a great job at keeping people guessing that's for sure.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and staying with this. I am glad the emotions are coming off right! :)
Date: July 14, 2020 04:13 am Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
“she looked at him with such an ache written all over her that Jim forgot about everything else” Oh, my heart. I love this scene so very much. Of course Jim is drawn to her side in the face of aggressive Roy.
“He opened the door to find Pam standing there” Yes!
Ugh. So much good, and so much left unsaid. There are hints of Fancy New Beesly and courage, but the honesty is not quite there yet.
I don’t think Pam realizes how cruel she’s being pushing Jim to reaffirm their friendship, after she’s essentially pushed him away once again... The angst factor is certainly strong here, but it doesn’t seem completely unbelievable. I hope Pam finds a little more honesty with her courage soon!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for this review! I am glad it does feel believable and isn't way over the top. Glad you are liking this! :)
1 [Report This]Date: July 14, 2020 02:54 am Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
Ahhh the angst. I would love to shake pam! I'm really engrossed in this you have written Jim and pam perfectly. They are both so stubborn. Really hope they get their act together soon even so I can't help but like Paul but I really need some Jim and pam closeness xx
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for reading! Glad you like it.
I wanted to do more with Paul but I am finding myself focussing more on jim/pam nevertheless lol!
1 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2020 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
Oh, I am loving this, even though it is TORTURE!
Author's Response: haha thank you so much for reading! Glad you like it :)
1 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2020 03:00 pm Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
I love angst so I am living for this right now ! :)
Author's Response: haha! virtual hi-five to you! glad you are liking this :))
Date: July 13, 2020 01:17 pm Title: Chapter 4: being fancy sucks
Please when is the romance and fluff coming? It’s amazing angst but I hope there is an end in sight
Author's Response: Haha I am sorry I love season 3 angst. But as I am going episode-wise, it will end soon :) Thanks for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2020 03:09 pm Title: Chapter 3: status quo and chinks
Omg this amazing! I need more
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!!