1 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2020 04:35 pm Title: Free For Dinner
Lovely for your first fic. Starting out on the First Date is always a great starting point and it's lovely to get a new perspective on it. Pam messing up Jim's hair, honest conversations for once, all just great. Well come to MTT. Can't wait to read more from you.
Author's Response: So kind, thank you! I wasn't sure if anyone would be interested in this little fic! :D
1 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2020 02:17 pm Title: Free For Dinner
I really liked this chapter! Something about the style of the writing feels minimal and yet there's enough there to fill in the gaps. It might just be me but it felt like the word economy of some of the 55 words challenges, but delightfully longer.
Looking forward to more, and welcome aboard! Always great to see a new name around.
Author's Response: Wow, that is so kind of you! Thank you! :D
1 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2020 10:08 am Title: Free For Dinner
Welcome TIS from one newbie here to another.
I really enjoyed reading your take on this. My first entry into this world is also the post-NY story (I'm 6 chapters in but you're already past me in time) and I love to read other takes on it.
I love the way she musses his hair up - yup that's her Jim and that's just one difference between him with her and him with Karen.
It's interesting to see the things we hit on things exactly the same, the barely touching, the hand on the small of her back, the emotions they were experiencing and also where we differ - he leaves Karen in NY without ending things. I really want to know how you see that going. (Are you a Karen Sympathizer or Hater or somewhere between - I think I have an idea.)
Your style makes it so easy to read, the pace quick and flowing but with descriptions that put you there with them. You say so much with your words and it's refreshing to read.
I'm looking forward to going on the journey with you and see where you take this - from the looks of things our JAM will be similar but the path's we lead them on may diverge - and hey isn't that what this Fan fiction is all about.
Author's Response:
I think Karen was put into a difficult position. Like, she was being used by Jim to try to forget about and move on from Pam. And her character was actually really interesting and cool. Until she started getting desperate to make things work with Jim. Obviously he could only be with Pam but poor Karen just got so twisted around it was difficult to watch. I liked her alot better in Stamford and then when she was revisited after Scranton.
What's your take on Karen?
Thank you for reading my story and for talking with me. You're very kind. :D
1 [Report This]Date: October 11, 2020 09:03 am Title: Free For Dinner
I'm so glad you brought this one over from FFN! Welcome welcome welcome!
I really like the way you've structured this - it gives it a neat sort of staccato rhythm.
I loved Pam mussing his hair, because that's definitely the first thing she would do, and the Fancy New Beesly move of boldly suggesting they'd be good in bed together. And them ending the date and then talking on the phone for a few more hours is so very them.
Interested to see where you go with how he handled New York - he's taken some steps there that feel like they're bound to have consequences. Looking forward to seeing what you write next!
Author's Response:
You're so sweet. Especially when I know you know how it ends, ha! Unless of course I keep going. I'm not sure yet.
I'll say I actually like some of the setup of this site a little better. Thanks for telling me about it. :D