1 [Report This]Date: December 30, 2020 04:16 pm Title: Almost Midnight, December 31st 1994
I love the way this one random encounter has set Pam's high school life on a whole different path, both because it's sweet and also because this idea of making one connection that sort of spirals out feels very true. It sounds like she had a very nice 1994. I also really enjoy that you had this be a life-changing encounter for the more socially adept Jim, too.
"And no, she totally did not have a crush on him. Shut up." Lol. Oh, Pam.
Making the song a runner is a nice touch. It's now led to two milestone moments in their relationship... perhaps a third and fourth are coming? :) The bickering over the dancing was fun, and a cute nod to canon, too, and the inside jokes they've built up are sweet.
I love the subtle changes from last year in the countdown. Showing their slow progression towards something more.
P.S. Another quick beta note: "Should be at his birthday party, at hers,"
1 [Report This]Date: December 30, 2020 04:10 pm Title: Almost Midnight, December 31st 1993
A multi-chapter! Fun!
There are a couple strong characterizations I want to note here. Pam was totally the reading in the corner with the rainbow popcorn girl at the party girl in high school, so this both feels a lot like canon her and is a strong image to start with. She comes off like a Rainbow Rowell heroine throughout this chapter. Kelly liking people with a lot to say because she has a lot to say is great.
Jim's line about the "desire to get to know at first sight" feels like a very teenager-y thing to say, and the hug at midnight was adorable. I *really* like the choice not to force their first kiss, especially in light of that thought from Jim. It lets this chapter be about two people who are forming a bond and making a connection, which is a great foundation for a slow burn.
Looking forward to seeing where you go with this and where 1994 takes Jim and Pam! (Also, them bonding over Meatloaf is *very* charmingly 90s.)
P.S. Quick beta notes: in the first sentence, "she was sat on" could use a little cleanup, and in the third paragraph, should be were and not we're. Should be the obnoxious speakers the Kapoors owned and Jim owned a flannel shirt over what seemed to be a; let alone dancing at them; I'm the type for dancing not time. At the eight second mark, should be Pam.
1 [Report This]Date: December 30, 2020 07:13 am Title: Almost Midnight, December 31st 1994
I don't think this chapter was sadder than the last one to be honest. They're still teenagers and are trying to figure our their feelings for each other. They've clearly built up a solid relationship and that's lovely to see. A bit of fear on both of their parts in that they don't want to ruin anything.
All that being said, they're both adorable with each other. Matching clothes, Pam's choker (now there's a blast from the past), Jim's dorky dancing, Pam's swaying. All really cute.
1 [Report This]Date: December 29, 2020 08:22 pm Title: Almost Midnight, December 31st 1993
Very cute way for them to meet up. Teenage Pam and Jim are adorable. There's sparks flying off everywhich way and I love seeing that. 1994 absolutly looks like it's off to a good start for these two. Hopefully it can stay that way for a while as well. Nice job.