1 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2021 05:39 am Title: Air I
These are all beautiful little gems.
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Date: January 11, 2021 05:10 am Title: Air IV
Very nice. It all leads back to her. Run, hide, deny, look away, it comes back to her. Even better when she reaches out to him like here. You're still doing such a great job with all of these. Love them.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Warrior! I like so much hearing from you!
Date: January 10, 2021 03:53 pm Title: Earth III
Really gets into what Jim was hoping for and why his heart shattered when it didn't. If only he could have waited just a bit longer.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm still frustrated with Jim being that impatient (though perfectly understand his feelings too...)
Date: January 10, 2021 07:54 am Title: Earth III
"Deeply inside he still believed in fairy tales" is a very good description of Season 2 Jim in his hopeful mode. And I like the Sleeping Beauty idea here, where his kiss DOES wake her up... it just takes a while to do it.
You know, I know that the original versions of those fairy tales are all not kid-friendly, but I had not heard that version of Sleeping Beauty. Ummm. Yikes.
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Date: January 09, 2021 08:28 pm Title: Air III
The full circle of life in 110 words. Lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: January 09, 2021 05:29 pm Title: Air III
Love this one as a counterpoint to last chapter. Even though I'm a guy and will never know that kind of experience, I did see that look on my wife's face a few months ago. The pain immediately turning to love and relief as our son took his first breaths. Really great job with this one.
Author's Response: Thank you! My brain mercifully blocked out most of my memories of that experience, but I'm glad I still have pleasant ones :)
Date: January 08, 2021 08:25 am Title: Earth II
My sympathies to you about your grandma. I don't feel this is out of character at all. It feels appropriate that after such an event they'd talk about it. the bet neither wanted to win feels all sorts of appropriate though.
Author's Response: Thank you, Warrior. It truly means a lot to me.
1 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2021 07:41 am Title: Earth II
I'm very sorry for your loss, my friend. My uncle passed away last month, and I'm going through a similar period of reflection.
It does feel in character that this is something they would start to think about at that point, that it's not on their minds before the loss of a parent, and that it would be chilling to them to think of life without each other.
Author's Response: I'm so sorry for your loss too. And I'm grateful to you for your support immensely.
1 [Report This]Date: January 07, 2021 10:11 am Title: Fire I
Beautiful imagry. You're really knocking it out of the park with all of these.
Author's Response: Thank you, Warrior, I hope I'll keep this pace!
1 [Report This]Date: January 07, 2021 08:19 am Title: Fire I
Deleted scenes that should NEVER have been deleted. I love how blown away by Fighter!Pam you've made Jim here.
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1 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2021 09:52 am Title: Earth I, Water I
Ooooof. Roy as a swamp sucking her in to an environment not conducive for growth or laying a solid foundation is a pointedly good metaphor.
Author's Response: Thank you! I think that's my favorite piece so far :)
Date: January 06, 2021 05:20 am Title: Earth I, Water I
Very prosaiac to be sure. A really good interpretation of her mindset I think.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 05, 2021 06:40 pm Title: Air II
Freaking MORE POETRY oh my god. These are so good. I will take 100, please, tysm
Author's Response: Thank you so much, BT! I can't promise 100 (I feel I'll ask for prompts at some point, lol), but there are some more coming :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2021 06:39 pm Title: Air I
Hi, this made me cry. It is beautiful and poignant and heartbreaking. Excellently done.
Author's Response: Oh, I hate that you cried :( but thank you for your kind words!..
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2021 02:23 pm Title: Air II
The "She needed to make everything he’d ever owned hers/On his lips she tasted the same greed" combo is a really good description of what the desire they have for each other must feel like.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I was nervous a bit about publishing this part ('isn't it OOC?' 'isn't it too much?'), but I'm glad it suits well to the characters.
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2021 08:17 am Title: Air II
Dernhelm, these are amazing! I can’t wait to keep reading them as you post them. Beautiful writing!
Author's Response: Thank you very much, WW! I'm so glad you like these pieces. Tomorrow will be more :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2021 04:41 am Title: Air II
I LOVE the concept of this and you are incredibly talented at poetry. I’m looking forward to the rest of these. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Bored! I didn't expect that I could write poetry at all and I truly appreciate your kindness!
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2021 02:45 am Title: Air II
That's a delightful way of writing a short but intimate scene. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you, Warrior! I'm still insecure about writing things like that, so I'm glad it worked out well.
1 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2021 10:06 am Title: Air I
This sounds like a really good project! And I love the way you've started off here - you've created a really vivid image that's totally on point with where Pam is at this moment. Very poetic.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked this piece. I have no idea what I'll write next, but I'm excited to find out :)
Date: January 04, 2021 08:06 am Title: Air I
It's good to challenge yourself! What a good way to get your writing juices flowing.
This was lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope I'll won't give up on this challenge quickly.
Date: January 04, 2021 05:41 am Title: Air I
Awww, heartborken Pam. Very fitting considering the time frame. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you, Warrior! I can promise I'll write about happy Pam as well :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 04, 2021 04:47 am Title: Air I
this was so poetic. and I love the idea. Morning music to send me off on my day.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it and I hope you'll have a lovely day :)