1 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2023 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aww this is so sweet! I like possessive jealous Jim.
1 [Report This]Date: June 04, 2021 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
Kids are in bed and let me tell you, I enjoyed this immensely.
“The driver just smiles and rolls his eyes as the tipsy couple all but intertwine like ivy on a trellis, making the most of the ten-minute drive from the bar.”
This is such a great visual.
“He settles on top of her and takes her hand in his, kissing her ear, her neck, her shoulder, like he has all the time in every world in every solar system. He explores her to his heart’s content, and soon she doesn’t know whether to arch against his hand or his mouth, she just wants to be up and as close to him as possible.”
Okay wow I felt that.
“He’s strong and warm. He’s emblematic of everything she needs. He pushes her to her best, keeps her on her toes, and gives her a safe place to land if her toes get a little shaky. He gives her butterflies without nerves and makes her heart start again when it stops.
They’re so perfect together.”
“From here it’s a dance, except this time, swaying is dancing. It’s dancing without formalities or precision or anything other than maintaining tempo. They make up their own effortless steps and lyrics to the music until they find what they need, and they let that carry them up into the endless night sky.”
Omg you write them so beautifully, this is exactly
how they have sex, I’m convinced. This was so perfect and them. Well done, friend 🔥💗
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2021 07:14 am Title: Chapter 1
You write such beautiful love scenes d84;a039;d84;a039;
1 [Report This]Date: January 28, 2021 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Plausible and sensual - and I really liked tipsy jealous Jim.
Thanks!
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2021 09:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
It's interesting seeing them dealing with jealousy, and where it's rooted - this idea of Jim feeling embarrassed that the guy doesn't see him as her boyfriend reflexively feels very much about their history and about how much time he's spent with HER seeing him as not her boyfriend.
You planted some really good lines in this! "She’ll have to settle for holding his hand on the center console of his three-year-old sedan as the breeze flows through the windows instead of wrapping her arms around him and letting her hair fly behind her as it’s illuminated by the streetlights" is a really vivid image. And "She’s Princess Leia, Audrey Hepburn, and both versions of Sandy from Grease all wrapped up into one" feels just perfectly Jim.
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2021 08:25 am Title: Chapter 1
TPB, this was great.
"Motorcycle Waiter Dude" brilliant. Great way to describe that guy, but also to set this story along.
The "She’s Princess Leia, Audrey Hepburn, and both versions of Sandy from Grease all wrapped up into one." had me ROLLING. I love those descriptions of her from Jim's POV. She's his leading lady, makes me swoon.
“I can’t believe I don’t have to fight off a pack of motorcycles every day.” Oh Jim.
“You better be taking off your clothes while you’re waiting,” Fancy New Beesly is thriving and well. I love it.
This was great, TPB!
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2021 08:04 am Title: Chapter 1
“From here it’s a dance, except this time, swaying is dancing. It’s dancing without formalities or precision or anything other than maintaining tempo. They make up their own effortless steps and lyrics to the music until they find what they need, and they let that carry them up into the endless night sky.“
You. Kill. Me.
I loved this SO MUCH, TPB! You have such a way with words. Beautiful, sweet, sexy. Perfection!
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2021 07:29 am Title: Chapter 1
This is really cute and sexy. Kind of a fun thing to imagine that Jim would still want to stake his territory. Only he goes for the more sublte approach rather than some big show of testosterone. The easy glance to the bartender on the way out is probably a lot harder of a hit than any punch to the jaw. Seems to work for Pam too. It's nice to feel appriciated, but she knows their good together.
They both clearly show that to each other when they get back ot Jim's place. Really sensual scene there that shows just how right they are for each other. Great job.
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2021 05:36 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so awesome!! I absolutely loved this! The way that Jim gets a teeny bit jealous and Pam is there to reassure him is incredibly sweet and makes this fic just all kinds of perfect and fluffy. I love the tiny bit of angst at the beginning. Even if you don't, ily for it, haha!
Thank you for the birthday fic!! A million jellybeans for you!!
Date: January 13, 2021 12:43 am Title: Chapter 1
Your phrases are wonderful.
"Motorcycle Waiter Dude" and "intertwine like ivy on a trellis" made me laugh.
"Princess Leia, Audrey Hepburn, and both versions of Sandy from Grease" and "little dancey feeling in her stomach" are inventive.
"all the time in every world in every solar system" and others are lyrical.
I'm glad you added in lots of Pam sass, particularly the last line.
Jim has always given me the impression that he is slightly insecure even though he is self aware. Your first few paragraphs bring that out well.
Good onya
1 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2021 12:17 am Title: Chapter 1
TPB. I never knew I needed to see what happened after Local Ad until right now. Possessive Jim is one of my favorite Jims, I wish we got to see more of him. Ugh. He owns my heart. Calling the bartender "Motorcycle Waiter Dude" made me laugh every time.
But mostly I need to compliment your use of metaphors in this fic. There were so many and all of them were just beautiful. This was amazing, truly.