Date: June 16, 2022 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
You're right that pam/Roy dynamicnis fun, especially in comparison to JAM... Thank you for another great fic!
1 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2021 05:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
UGH! I loved this!
The way this just flowed together seamlessly: his opinion, her and Roy's conversation, Roy confronting him, their argument - and ending with s4 with her acceptance to Pratt? This was amazing!
1 [Report This]Date: August 01, 2021 10:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Really enjoyed this! Nice work on Pam in particular.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2021 05:01 am Title: Chapter 1
Really loved this - even with my hesitancy to read it for reasons I shared offline.
It's just so impressive to see someone take a scene and build upon it to a story as beautiful and insightful as this
This is the line that did it for me.
*She can’t decide which is worse -- having a wall between them, or a mirror: the one that shows her exactly the kind of person she never wanted to be. The one Jim is holding up to her right now.
She doesn’t want to look into the mirror. So she chooses the wall.*
What truth in that - in the whole piece actually - the way you write them is so fluid and true to character - the fill in the blanks and window into their minds we don't see through a TV sitcom.
I love the layers too in some of the things he says to her- wants for her being advice he should take too - “You have to take a chance on something sometime.
*so he looks at her hand instead, at her engagement ring. Something designed to be a symbol of everlasting love, but he can only see it as a physical representation of someone who is holding her back.*
another line that struck me - so wonderfully expressed.
Thanks for giving us this multi-layered view into the moments we saw onscreen.
Bellisimo.
Author's Response: I always appreciate your reviews, thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2021 04:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
So I feel like you already have a sense of my thoughts on this, BUT:
I loved the window metaphor, which just seems very Pam, and the line about Jim making her feel like she can have the things she wants captures that part of their relationship really well. In general, I think you did solid work capturing Pam having feelings for Jim but not in a way she'd be at all aware of consciously throughout this story.
You did well with Roy - marking his territory, ham-fistedly shutting down Pam while actually psychologically disarming Jim pretty effectively. And I thought you did really well with the Roy-Pam dynamic and how familiar it is to her, the way she can tell exactly what he's thinking and feeling without him having to say it.
That Pam is sitting in the kitchen waiting specifically to talk to Jim, looking for comfort from him is PAINFUL. You capture her struggle well here.
I really appreciate this parking lot conversation post-Valentine's Day. We see a lot of Jim and Pam getting into these tough moments, and not very much of them making up afterwards... and the idea that they normally don't really talk about it after the fact tells you a lot about how they stumbled their way into this situation.
The coda at the end here is CRUCIAL. Glad to end this on a better note.
Author's Response: Thanks again for all of your help!
Date: July 28, 2021 10:38 am Title: Chapter 1
"...an entirely inappropriate and desperate love for her that he’s unable to either articulate or control" wow this sums up S2 Jim so well - absolutely brilliant writing! Loved this.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2021 09:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Ugh this was so outstandingly painful. There were so many lines that made my heart hurt.
"Roy doesn’t know that he’s still madly in love with her.
But then again, neither does Pam."
"Besides, that crush was over a long time ago. He couldn’t wait to tell me that part of the story."
"What they are to each other remains elusive to him, too."
I love you for having a nice ending like you did because dear god I needed that.
Author's Response: Thanks girl! Look, I love pain but I'd never leave Jam hanging <3
1 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2021 07:54 am Title: Chapter 1
This was a hard read at times because it represents such a difficult time for Pam and also those of us who ship JAM with Jim just not quite being able to influence her enough. But absolute pay-off in that last paragraph. Great writing as always.
Author's Response: Thanks for sticking it out! :)
1 [Report This]Date: July 28, 2021 04:24 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so great! I’ve not seen the superfan deleted scene - but I love the way you’ve written the contrast between Jim and Roy’s reactions in this. Also, Jim as genuinely not loving/being slightly nervous about the idea of a confrontation with Roy, and how that might have impacted his interactions with Pam too (which I’m not sure you hear much about, but actually does feel very true for Jim’s character). Pam’s point of view after their kitchen interaction is also heartbreaking to read - especially the ‘he reeks of disappointment. She could suffocate from it’ line, and that final note of pity at the end. Which makes it even nicer that this ends on the much happier note of Pratt, and Pam actually having someone in her corner - this was so lovely 😍
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2021 10:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Not going to lie, this one was a little tough to get through. Mainly due to the superb writing with it all. To take on one of the times Jim and Pam are at odds with each other and with Roy still very much in the picture was a bold choice. Even more so with the new deleted scene. You really did a great job of getting into their heads in this moment in time. How much Jim and Pam want to say more to each other, but there's still just to much standing in their way. The tension between Jim, Pam, and Roy is so thick in this you'll need a chainsaw let alone a knife to even attempt to cut through it. Brilliant writing to bring that all out.
Then the tag there about her getting accepted to Pratt. THANK YOU! After reading everything else that little scene was just so much more wonderful for both of them. Great way to show the different dynamic Jim and Pam are in there at the end. Wonderful.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I haven't written much S2 Jam, the complexities are really interesting to tackle. Glad you liked!