1 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2021 03:46 pm Title: Tiny Dancer
Welcome to MTT - always enjoy new voices.
I enjoyed this a lot- from relating to the chipping off of her nail polish - I do this too (my poor nails) and can total see Pam as a nailpolish peeler - good explanation too why she rarely had on in the show (PS check out OL this week for more).
the juxtapositioning pf the last lines worked really well and I love that Jim was playing his elusive guitar.
Nice first story - hope to see more.
Author's Response: Thank you so much Maxine! The combination of this weeks OL, plus watching the extended cut of the Dundies superfan edition brought this idea into my head. Definitely more stories to come, but I wanted to start out with a little season 2 love. :)
1 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2021 03:40 pm Title: Tiny Dancer
Welcome to MTT! This was absolutely lovely!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, I love your username!
1 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2021 03:23 pm Title: Tiny Dancer
First off welcome to MTT! Always glad to have another writer join this little corner of the internet.
Really good look into their internal thoughts there after the Dundies. Pam wondering if she could have had the courage to ask that question. Jim hoping for something that at the time seems unreachable.
Pam coming home to find Roy passed out like that and even acknowledging his faults was also kind of big. Maybe an in vino veritas type of moment there.
All in all great way to break into things. Looking forward to anything else you have to share.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the warm welcome, I truly appreciate it! This community seems so wonderful, and I’m excited to return to my passion of creative writing as opposed to writing textbooks lol.
1 [Report This]Date: August 21, 2021 02:34 pm Title: Tiny Dancer
I liked this a lot. I think you captured the vibe of this moment well. The way Pam is achingly close to breaking through her fear and inhibitions and can't quite manage it, the longing and the dissatisfaction with the life she has she's not quite ready to name for what it is, and on the other side Jim's sense of fear of disturbing the status quo at this moment when he's gotten just a bit of hope. And the way you use the connection between them at the end is just plain good writing.
Also: Hi! Welcome to MTT (love the user name btw), and congrats on your first story here!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I’m very excited to be here, and going back to my passion of creative writing. More things to come soon!